Yeah, I just mean that their body wouldn’t be developed enough to be that coordinated or strong. Even bringing magic/ki into it, I feel it bends suspension of disbelief. They’re also being treated like they’re much older than they are by the Sect members who have no idea they’re an adult in a child’s body.
EDIT: I do want to be clear though, it would totally work fine if the MC was just a little older. You wouldn’t even need to edit much.
Just finished reading the story, I have mixed reviews on it.
The Good:
The writing is extremely high quality in terms of dialogue, very elegant, poised, and wise. There isn’t any purple prose but it just feels enlightening, like I’m learning from a sage. Reiren in particular is a very wise character and the way she acts and speaks is very sagely, Im kind of sad she’s not a potential RO for the MC.
The lore and worldbuilding is pretty good, very interesting and has East Asian influences that makes those who understand our culture quite proud.
The Bad:
The pacing is very very very very very slow, there are nonstop walls of texts that bored me into oblivion, no drama, thrill, action or plot progression, even character progression is very minimal. This is a massive problem for the audience. Where’s the story or thrill?
Lack of choices, the choices are very few and the ones that are available are only stat choices which I dislike since I’m looking for a story, not a DnD game.
The MC is a blank “oh I got hit by Truck-Kun and got Isekaid” trope, there isn’t any more meaningful or deeper backstory that would elevate the story in my eyes.
Why is the MC 4 years old? this part is ridiculous, I would make them 14-18. This whole time the MC and the other characters are 4 years old? for a normal human being that part is unbelievable.
Conclusion:
It has some good and bad points and the story needs to pick up the pace and introduce something more than just training and lectures. I personally liked it but almost dropped it due to the slow pacing and lack of any meaningful progression.
What’s the correct combinations for Eden snack though? I gave her the strawberry and the lemonade just like she asked. But she still said I’m bringing the wrong one. Is this a mistake?
Yeah that is what also happened to me
Me when I see 4 year old MC fighting
Cute baby fighting with chicken in kung fu style.Must watch till the end.#ai #babyshorts #babyfunny
Has the author dropped this if?
Has the author dropped this if?
Hello, uhmm I’m not dropping this work. actually I’ve spent this past months rewriting it and learning more about coding and doing extra more research and worldbuilding to enrich the lore and Right now, I’m coding what I’ve written so far into the game, and I’ll update it as soon as I can.
That’s Really Good News, Also The Tumblr Link Is Not Working.
Don’t make assumptions about authors. Let them work at their speed. They will show something when it’s ready. If anything our feedback wasn’t being ignored and probably helped with the rewrite. Keep at it.
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