Rick can angrily ask why the MC seems to hate being a âcursed bloodâ, but he opened himself up to quite the counter blow by stating âwhatâs wrong with being a cursed blood like us?â
My MC would likely say âHow is being a human killing blood sucker âlike youâ? Like any of you! You have the choice to not hurt someone, I might not have that same luxury.â
Which is true since none of them specifically require consuming the blood of someone else to survive. Everyone living has to eat, but the context becomes a little different when the MC has to contemplate what would amount to âcannibalismâ by having to eat human blood not long after being human themself.
The little changes throughout were definitely nice improvements.
The scene where the MC is being force-fed the blood to turn them still has the original text about the hair color being black.
Glad to see the return of the original surname, though! I liked it, and was a little put out when it was changed to just a text entry field for a little while there. The short lists of name options were a nice change.
Tried the more âwillingâ path, and I have to say the interactions there are definitely more lighthearted, but that may be because no one is having to drag the MC back into shelter.
One thing about it that stuck out, though, is the flavor text where a more willing MC is suddenly okay with the âdrinking bloodâ part of their transformation, and thatâs something that a player choosing the willing path should still decide if theyâre okay with, or not. Just a detail that should probably be adjusted later.
And sorry but I canât seem to find that point? Can you tell me more specifically what surrounds it? As my plans for making a to drink or not to drink choice is later on.
The underlined part isn't outright stating the MC will be consuming blood, but it doesn't imply an aversion to the idea either, which could be contradictory to some reader's background thoughts on what they'll want to do next.
Itâs at times like these being able to save scum to get to specific passages of text more quickly would be nice. Any plans to play around with the save plugin?
Hey there!
I have started the game since it looks interesting, but I had bugs that prevent me from playing - as in, I really canât continue with that happening if I want my MC to be in-character, so Iâd rather report that before finishing!
By the beginning of chapter 1:
âYou were not a soothsayer or anything mystical like that. Still, as a former student of Unknown Academyâ
Thereâs a coding error with the name of the academy, and it says âUnknownâ instead of the proper name. I had selected Salutem Primum Academy, btw.
That one is not a big issue, itâs the next one.
When the MC is captured:
Selecting âYou do not want to antagonise them. Just stay quiet and hope and opportunity will present itself.â leads to MC swearing at their father, which shouldnât be the case, and I canât even back up from that. Itâs because in the code, that choice doesnât go to any label, so the game just continues on with the first text it encounters, and itâs the swear selection part. Furthermore, since there is no additional goto and label, it goes from the swear segment to the fishing for information scene after that. Basically, I went through both of these things while I didnât want any.
I want a very calm MC, and Iâm not necessarily planning for a cunning one, so yeah, I need the issue to be fixed before I can continue playing
Iâll give proper feedback later, since I didnât have time to see much of the story.
I was looking for this thread in the Hosted and WIP section of the topic view to reread an older post, but now I see why I couldnât find it there. I am tracking this thread, but without new posts to bring it forward, it wouldnât show up in the activity feed at the bottom of the page as easily as other threads suggested because of the category I was in.
This one might get a bit more responses/reader activity if it had the right category tag listing it as a WIP, too.
I do admit itâs splitting hairs to be worrying about this. @moderators
I find the premise and plot intriguing. My main concern is that a lot of the time youâve tried to pack too much into a short amount of text. Some times it gets confusing to follow whats happening or new information gets dropped in or interesting tidbits are glossed over. This has potential to be a real gem; donât be afraid to expand.
Also thereâs areas where she/he are being mixed up. Probably programming issue, but a common one
@EddieSeb this is a great story. Very interesting, quite emotional too. Although i know this book is still a wip. I found way too many spelling, typo and punctuation errors. Not only that be where there should be female pronouns there are male pronouns instead.
I was hoping there to be a scene where the MC would either cry in pain or pass out from ingesting the bloodâŚ
I agree with what you said but on the other hand I want to get the information out as quick as I can so that I donât bore the readers with thousands of words of exposition. Iâll probably try to flesh it out a bit more though!
And yes, they are programming issues cause it seems I missed some bracketsâŚ
I get what you mean. I happen to like exposition over brevity too, so take this comment with a pinch of salt. The important aspect is to make sure important info is understandable. If you want to reduce exposition, it may worth editing to remove information that isnt currently vital to the plot.
Even though you can chose the option to defy fate it still seems this Eve has forced you to help others whether you like it or not. Can you still remain selfish later in the game and even try to bite the dust if you want?
Iâm hoping to make it so that you can remain selfish and change fully. Not too sure about having options to bite the dust but I might add some. In the next update there will be a choice for jumping from the roof too.
