by the way are the dragons here based on DnD dragon?
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Not entirely
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Apparently this set up in goblin slayer universe, which is a good thing goblin slayer is one of darker fantasy with vicious and cunning monster I hope author take full advantage of that to create epic story with ups and down, twist and turn, this is a world where the powerful can be felled by far inferior monster.
As I understand the MC is pretty powerful combatant but lacking in personality choice like what kind of MC player want to play, a stoic MC, extrovert MC, charming MC, shy MC, tsundere MC, etc.
The goal is set by story so far MC want to beat the bad guy, some player probably want fame, want wealth (although doubt that MC need money anymore), maybe just want the thrill because MC is thrillseeker or maybe other intention like seeing the world or something, giving player some choice in this matter probably would be nice.
Author also could make the MC dragon have personality like sarcastic, playful, etc.
Some weapon of choice, armor choice, better customization which may or may not impact the story is fine as well.
Lastly I am confused is MC only a rider/fighter or they do have dragon gene like flying with wings or have scaly appearance, it’s unclear how MC soar into sky with their dragon, is it by magic? skill? equipment? innate ability? Some detail could add nice touch to the story.
Let mc have one or some character weakness/flaw such as cocky, overconfident, reserved, smug, arrogant, hesitant, this could turn into their downfall but also could play to their character growth like how they gonna overcome this weakness and be better person, this also make them more human not different from other character in the story, this make MC’s companion matter which could play into relationship building, trust and friendship and MC’s companion get more story time as well, it’s okay for strong character to have mistake/weakness, it is okay to lose something and then bounce from that loss and win some, it makes the drama, it make the character memorable.
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The writing is fine but there sure was barely any interaction in this interactive fiction
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hey author sorry for bugging you with this but there is just some strange problem going on , well I chose the option to become the greatest and it was all ok until during the fight with the naga that a conversation for bloodlust suddenly appeared and that is the only one in the demo so far that did that
@Sylents
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Fixed that and a little more
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Im fiddling around with most of what you said. This is a dark fantasy even if it does feel light hearted. If you want really dark, stick with bloodlust.
I got plans for that route.
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Bro don’t you got like 10 different WIP’s, how are you managing all of them?
If you split your attention on so many different projects, wouldn’t that slow the overall progress all of your WIP’s?
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I only have 2 now.
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I remember seeing you make one where we were an elf with some sort of god seed or something like that. I didn’t know you took it down though, so that probably does make things easier to manage.
Still though, how are you splitting your attention between these two projects?
Do you write one chapter for the first WIP, then one for the other and just keep going back and forth like that?
Or do you just solely focus on one WIP for a couple mouths, or till you hit a certain checkpoint in the narrative, then switch over to the other WIP and do the same?
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So this week thats about to end, I revisit Era of Archdemons to rewrite things, revisit chapters, brainstorm, add and delete etc.
For tale of the dragoons, it doesnt take long to write a single adventure, about a week so next saturday.
The week after if im not satisfied with the structure of era of A, i do the same as before. If I am then i just tread on. Once i finish ch4 then ill stop and focus on this WIP because thatll be the halfway point.
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Oh, okay, I see your process now. Week by week is an interesting way to go about it, that’s for sure.
I appreciate you for giving me the intricates of your writing process though. I don’t see a lot of people managing multiple WIP’s at once, so I was just curious about the process behind it.
What you have so far with both titles have been great, I see the improvement in your writing with every update👍
I only hope that you don’t get overwhelmed trying to juggle these amazing WIP’s you have🙏
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So, it’s been a while. There is added content, but I’ve decided to go for a rewrite.
Major changes coming but the goblin slayer inspired world will remain. Until then you can continue a little further than before. I’ll let you know when the rewrite happens.
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I’ve played the demo about the story so far it’s true to Goblin Slayer which is good since it give dark theme to lighthearted beginning.
it just I notice lack of choice and response for player, so far the choice only cover significant part of the story like how the fighting style for MC and what type of dragon MC companion is basically only cover the important part of the story, but not covering much on how MC responded to conversation, there is also noticable lack of MC’s choice of reaction when dealing with situation.
The choice presented might be need to rewritten to be more personal, I feel like the option given is written in very short and feel detached.
For example like the choice of height length it just said, short, average, tall, this could be rewritten into.
For short height could be written like:
Short height lower than most people you’ve meet often you need to look up to talk to people.
For average could be written like : you didn’t consider yourself as tall yet not that short either more of average height.
For tall could be written like : you’re confident you’re cut above the rest often you have to bend a little to talk to people.
This can be implemented for the rest of the option like eyes, hair, etc giving the option more descriptive personalize flavor.
There is error in city exploration something is written as deshe$ or something.
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UPDATE
Title has been slightly changed and the demo completely rewritten. Its a lot shorter than the previous demo and in a completely different setting and protagonist.
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So is it a mix up or is it on purpose that the male MCs get the old fashioned and the female MCs get the whiskey sour, because generally speaking it’s normally depicted that the guys drink the hard liquor like whiskey sour and girls drink the more fruity stuff like old fashioned, but hey I can get that the male MCs like the fruity taste and the girls like the more hard stuff if that’s what your going with
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It was a mix up actually. Dont know much about alcohol so.
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Okay the teasing line of the demo somewhat intriguing, going to check this out.
Edit:
Okay I’ve checked the new demo, while it short this is well done.
so in new demo MC is half dragon I guess? No longer have dragon companion because given the new background it obviously give away, while I have so many question for new demo, I think I will hold off for now and see what direction the story goes
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Well depend on the girl obviously sometime after long day something strong is good, I am not much of a drinker it just sometimes you need pick me up to charge the battery, I am imagining that MC have a long day and considering the background MC life is tough, so still make sense.
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