My character (Material Absorption) just got beat up (what else to expect from people with durability powers) until he broke the mansion and dipped.
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The claw MC didnât do that much better since he just wrecked cos of super speed.
Well I didnât expect much out of them either when their main power requires them getting their ass beat
Yeah, she also seems to have the superman type of powerset, superstrength, heat vision/laser eyes (did love the part where she and mc with the superman powerset have the laser eye staring contest) and flight. MC is at least her equal even so, maybe slightly stronger but mc had already fought a strong supe just before while she came in fresh, even if she also came in half-cocked and arrogant.
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Is there any particular reason why thereâs no female ROs in Outlaws when theyâre all dudes? Iâm not trying to be rude but it just feels like a huge college bro frat at this point
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Exactly why it was it a lost or scale mate since the MC was spent in fight before. Iâm not denying her strength or anything itâs just that teleport just seemed op compared to the others. She learned her lesson so it wonât as easy next time.
Thatâs actually a good question. Seems weird for one RO for that group instead of at least one of each gender.
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If you play as a female, then might as well insert the â5 dudes with one girlâ porn meme which is extremely uncomfortable
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Hopefully the author does something about it just seems random and unfair for lack of options. It could probably be fixed easily by just adding a new character to crew a bit later than the MC joined.
I donât think thatâs necessary. The easier fix could be flip one of them into a female or make it a gender selectable RO
Either option could work but I just liked the idea of new sidekick joining near the same time as MC.
Surely will do something about it
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Thank you. It just seemed odd to me
I wanted something op like Superman without nerf, Iâve been waiting for something of this caliber for years
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Itâs good youâve put your work into rewriting your game, but the issue of missing choices remains.
In addition to the problems youâve already pointed out, the police can compare testimonies from different people and catch your on a lie:
âHow would you describe your relationship with Rege?â
You offer a small, polite smile, the kind that disarms suspicion. âWe werenât particularly close. Just classmates. He kept to his own group, and I kept to mine.â
Rege had a gang. If police asks them about Regeâs enemies, they might point at MC (and lie about who caused the conflict).
âWhere were you yesterday afternoon?â the officer asks, his gaze piercing.
âI was at home,â you reply smoothly. âStudying for an exam.â
No, MC, you were on a gym cleaning duty until late in the evening (judging by the moon when you buried the body), and there has to be a teacher who knew about it. Do you have any bloodied clothes, by any chance?
I agree, but recomment some abandoned building instead.
While itâs understandable there arenât big story deviations in a prologue, there can still be more choices to add interactivity, build the MC character and let readers relate to them better by making their decisions. For example, you could do something like that:
The gang laughs as Rege towers over you, his shadow casting a dark pall.
*label resist_bully
*choice
*disable_reuse #Try to stand up for yourself.
You try to get up, but one of Rege's cronies kicks you back down. "Stay down where you belong," he sneers.
*goto resist_bully
*disable_reuse #Insult the damn bully.
"Rege, you piece ofâŚ" you shout, quickly interrupted by a kick in your face.
*goto resist_bully
*disable_reuse #Call for help.
"Stop him! Somebody!" you cry.
Other kids pass away, casting fearful looks on the bully's gang. A teacher opens her book and quickens her pace, nearly colliding into a wall.
"You're nothing, just a pathetic orphan with no one to protect you."
*goto resist_bully
*disable_reuse #Treaten to report Rege to the principal.
"Stop, or I'll report you! You don't want to be expeâŚ"
"Shut up! Nobody will expel me, because my parents payed for the school's computers. And your parents are dead. Do you think you're so special, just because you survived that night? Do you think anyone will believe you?!"
*goto resist_bully
#Endure.
*goto endure_bully
*label endure_bully
Your mind races, a whirlwind of anger and helplessness. The memories of your parents' death, the injustice of Vanguard's lies, and the years of suffering at the hands of Rege and his gang fuel a fire within you. But you know better than to fight back physically. You've learned the hard way that it only makes things worse.
Instead, you focus on enduring, on surviving another day. Day after day, you try to keep your face impassive as Rege insults you, curl into a ball then he beats you.
*fake_choice
#But your face is only a mask. You find a secluded spot and go there to scream your torment away.
You find an abandoned factory in your area and go there to vent to yourself about your torment and curse your bully.
"Talking shit about me, orphan?!"
#You secretly train your body, so it won't be a helpless ball anymore.
You find an abandoned factory in your area and go there to lift heavy objects and punch what remains of local furniture.
"You punch like a wimp!"
#You try to ignore the bully and learn more about criminal underworld to one day hold evil people accountable.
One day you learn about an abandoned factory. Rumors say drug dealers gather there from time to time, so you go to investigate.
"Well, well, if it isn't the orphan hobo. Looking for a new place to live?"
Looking around, you see Rege standing alone, his posture exuding arrogance and menace.
This would achieve several objectives: 1) add choices to the game without drastically changing the plot; 2) reinforce the sence of anger and helplessness towards the bully by trying to resist him and running out of options instead of just reading how resistance is futile; 3) build MC character by having them try different solutions (if you can add some stat changes to the secluded spot-finding choice, even better); 4) explain some things, like why MC has a perfect pocker face during the interrogation (bullying survival tactic) and why they were in a secluded spot.
If you donât want to rewrite the story to account for the bully surviving, you can add some negative effects to the 1st superpowers awakening (disorientation then teleporting, having limited control over superpowers), then add a choice between intentionally killing the bully and trying to get away/push him away only to accidentally cause his death due to incomplete control over MC powers. Like intentionally incinerating him with your eyes/pushing him away and accidentally crash him into a wall, intentionally using a sharp object to slash his throat/trying to teleport away and him fluing to the ground three floors below, and so on. You can make a variable to record if the kill was accidental or deliberate, and another one to account for the state of Regeâs body (incinerated bone remains, almost intact body and bits stuck in a wall after partially phasing through it require different body disposal procedure).
Oh, and please let us decide what emotions MC feels after killing the bully. Something like this, for example:
You look at Rege's body and all you can think of isâŚ
*choice
*if (bully_kill = "accident") #"I didn't wan't to do it! It was an accident!"
"The destruction you see around you is a direct result of his uncontrollable rampage." Vanguard's voice echoes in your mind.
*fake_choice
#"I won't become like them! I'll learn to control my powers so no one accidentally dies!"
#"Rege's not like my parents! He deserved to die, after all!"
*goto hide_body
#"He won't hurt me - or anyone - anymore. What a relief!"
"He attacked without provocation, endangering countless innocent lives in the process. It was my duty to intervene and prevent further casualties." Vanguard's voice echoes in your mind.
And unlike him, you haven't killed any innocents tonight.
*goto hide_body
#"Justice is served! Dark justice!"
"We will do everything in our power to bring justice to those responsible. However, in situations like these, tough decisions must be made for the greater good." Vanguard's voice echoes in your mind.
And unlike him, you haven't killed any innocents tonight.
*goto hide_body
#Rage, pure rage still pulsating in your veins.
*if bully_body = "burned"
"Burn in hell, bastard!"
*goto hide_body
*elseif bully_body = "pieces"
"Rest in pieces, asshole!"
*goto hide_body
*else
"Feed the worms, you piece of shit!"
*goto hide_body
#Nothing. You are empty inside.
*goto hide_body
Hope this helps. Good luck with your game!
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It is certainly easier to follow. The exposition set the tone and was unintrusive, as it should be.
The bully bit left a bad taste in my mouth. MCâs awakening wasnât
really earned or rather, there was no reason for that level of escalation. Also, the cleanup did not take our powerset into account.
Can we get a better explanation of our loadout? Supposedly I have
teleportation and âthe bladeâ but I keep seeing mention of claws, claws, claws.
I preferred the original Superman expy better. This new rendition is irredeemable and not in the fun way. Canât even love to hate her.
All in all, a marked improvement. Also, are we going to run into the proto MC at any point? Dude had the makings of Azrael, be a shame to bin him.
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Hey @Reiner it took a lots of effort but I finished it. Some errors I think no one mentioned yet.
Pretty sure Nathan Green aka Steel Soldier is 100% NOT Jesseâs brother. Itâs Taylorâs brother.
Also for the sake of peopleâs sanity add some pronoun variables.
Another thing is please understand that Mrs. is for married women and Ms. or Miss. is for unmarried women and I assume Taylor is the Romance Option and not married? Same for Jesse Rogers I assume.
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To to be fair about the identity of the MC being investigated some details of the of the MC are gonna be exposed since the mask canât cover everything completely. Also the mask would of taken some damage from both fights.
They know some things but not everything yet since the MC was a nobody to everyone on the outside even with what happened that night or school.
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While I havenât tried out the other powers yet. I really like the Wolverine powers. I really messed them up with those powers and the MC got some good hits in against Valkyrie. Canât wait for more content, especially content that have us showoff our fast regeneration once it gets stronger.
Can u add an option to customise our outfit if itâs not too difficult?
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