I’M SO EXCII~IITED~! Everything I could possibly hope for and more! I’ll definitely have to make a new Sidestep to explore the Argent romance route… I’m hooked on this dynamic already. The Ortega scene!!! MY GIRL MIA OCHOA! and gosh I did not expect the path of villainy to be this customisable - I cannot wait!
I plan to poke through the mini-demo more when I get the chance, but here’s the weirdness I noticed so far (that hasn’t already been noted above):
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When choosing to change your motivation, it’s possible to choose the same one you had before.
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The flashback after choosing to be criminal syndicate/ anarchist could be split into separate pages in my opinion. It was a little confusing to go straight from the flashback text back to the present. Pressing a button would make for a clearer transition, I think.
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As much as I enjoy Argent flirtation, it did feel a bit sudden to go from choosing to try and talk with her to touching her face. Maybe add another choice there if it’s not tangled up enough already? 
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After triggering the Sword of Damocles and choosing to take Argent down forcefully, it sounds like she’s just collapsed on the ground
(It’s as someone has turned off a switch, one moment she’s twitching in agony, the next she’s limp and unconscious.)
But the next page sounds like she fell off the bridge since the Handyman is trying to save her and MC says it’ll be a while before she gets back. I guess you could just include that we kicked her into the ocean after triggering the Sword.
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The first page of the Dr. Mortum love scene could use a page break or two, as could the last before the flashback ends.
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Dr. Mortum still calls the puppet by the business nickname (madamoiselle/monsieur) even after love scene where I decided to go from business associates to flirting. It’s actually kind of cute, but I’m guessing it’s not meant to be that way
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I got these paragraphs flowing kind of awkwardly next to each other - I poked at the code and it looks like they’re separate checks for willpower/stamina?
You slowly release the breath you hadn’t been aware that you were holding. With the throbbing headache, everything feels too bright and sharp. You need sleep soon if you’re this ready to be jumping at shadows.
You slowly remove the last bits of your armor, grateful at least for the fact that you’re in lot better shape than you used to. Six months ago a battle like this would have left you a wreck, but you’re not even winded.
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Got this repeating dialogue during the criminal syndicate route after joking about marlin.
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Dr. Mortum again, going from flirt to dating with repeated text
And here are some stats!
My custom MC - Start
Ash Hong is a seasoned, tech-savvy fighter.
Physical Status
Stamina: You are rested.
Willpower: You feel rested.
Injuries: You are fine, with no significant wounds.
Telepathy
Strength of Mind: 75%
Subtle Manipulations: 55%
Armored Suit
Vengeance’s suit is utilitarian and nondescript.
In its left hand, the suit has a neutered colony of nanovores functionally similar to having a disintegration touch, as well as being equipped with telepathic boosters and enhanced speed, as well as jump-jets.
Armor Status
Need Repair: 0% Fine: 100%
Vengeance.
Infamy: 10% Obscurity: 90%
Standard of Living: You are comfortable.
You are living in your old, comfortable apartment.
Psychological Profile
Arrogance: 25% Anonymity: 75%
Ruthlessness: 10% Empathy: 90%
Daring: 75% Caution: 25%
Main Puppet
Name: Eve
Puppet Status: unknown
Description: A short, mixed woman in her twenties with hazel eyes and long wavy blond hair.
Allies and Enemies
Ash’s relationship with Ortega: it’s complicated.
Ortega and Ash: 75%
Eve’s relationship with Ortega: friend.
Ortega and Eve: 60%
Eve’s relationship with Dr. Mortum: friend.
Mortum and Eve: 70%
Ash’s relationship with Lady Argent: distant.
Lady Argent and Ash: 0%
Ash’s relationship with Marshal Steel: former ally.
Marshal Steel and Ash: 30%
Ash’s relationship with Herald: friendly.
Herald and Ash: 40%
My custom MC - End
Ash Hong is a seasoned, tech-savvy fighter.
Physical Status
Stamina: You are rested.
Willpower: You feel rested.
Injuries: You are fine, with no significant wounds.
Telepathy
Strength of Mind: 75%
Subtle Manipulations: 55%
Armored Suit
Vengeance’s suit is utilitarian and nondescript.
In its left hand, the suit has a neutered colony of nanovores functionally similar to having a disintegration touch, as well as being equipped with telepathic boosters and enhanced speed, as well as jump-jets.
Armor Status
Need Repair: 0% Fine: 100%
Vengeance. Vengeance is known as a meddler and rabble-rouser.
Infamy: 9% Obscurity: 91%
Standard of Living: You are wealthy.
You are living in your base.
Psychological Profile
Arrogance: 19% Anonymity: 81%
Ruthlessness: 9% Empathy: 91%
Daring: 79% Caution: 21%
Main Puppet
Name: Eve
Puppet Status: unknown
Description: A short, mixed woman in her twenties with hazel eyes and long wavy blond hair.
Allies and Enemies
Ash’s relationship with Ortega: open attraction.
Ortega and Ash: 77%
Eve’s relationship with Ortega: friend and confidante.
Ortega and Eve: 60%
Eve’s relationship with Dr. Mortum: friend.
Mortum and Eve: 70%
Ash’s relationship with Lady Argent: distant.
Lady Argent and Ash: 0%
Lady Argent’s interest in Vengeance.: 23%
Ash’s relationship with Marshal Steel: former ally.
Marshal Steel and Ash: 30%
Ash’s relationship with Herald: friendly.
Herald and Ash: 40%
I may even challenge Argent to see which of our action figures sell more… 
