Romancing Ortega as the puppet and as yourself and confrinting Ortega about it.
Do you have any idea what you did in the character generator to unlock that option? Iāve tried many different variations but itās always grayed out for me.
Sorry, I donāt remember.
Ah well, thanks anyway.
God this is amazingā¦ my dream comes true!
Caught one mistake. Ortega is female but in text it says he.
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Well, as if I wasnāt conflicted enough about what I wanted, you added in career options.
Iām completely divided between being a Hero Hunter or Criminal Mastermind
Track heroes down, fighting them, breaking the ones who donāt measure up and teaching the ones who have potential. Tearing them all apart to make them stronger and separating out those who are pretenders.
Or, do I build an empire in the shadows, solidifying my power base and building up resources so that when I finally strike against my true enemy, Iāll be able to do so effectively, efficiently, and ruthlessly.
One allows me to take a proactive role in the story and be a truly feared name, the other allows me more control over events and gives me a better advantage against adversaries.
One allows me to destroy, the other allows me to build.
One has a very compelling solo story, the other opens up more character interactions and introduces a team that I actually got very attached to in a short time.
ā¦Iām conflicted.
One error that bugged me a lot. I couldnāt see any option for me having one the fight against Argent (I used subtle telepathy to have her forget to breath and fall unconscious).
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Same here. (20 hero hunting characters)
The Anarquist route is specially frightening if you go full evil. I mean you already blew up a museum.
Iāll probably explore that later since iām not sure how likeable that guy would be (of course, the joker was likeable but still).
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Im honestly genuinely torn between anarchist and hero hunter. For one i want everyone to fear me but i also wanna train the whole heroes to become better than they currently are.
Also going full psycho is always the answer lol
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Anarchist route for me. Mostly because my MC still believes that theyāre doing the right thing ā how do you hold a corrupt system accountable when they control the rules
So yes. No killing/minimal damage and making sure to sow discord for change that way. The world needs to know what the Farm did and how complicit the government is in it
In terms of things that surprised me during the demo:
I had the exact expression as the MC of āwait whatā when Argent started flirting during their fight
Not in a bad way but a part of me was also gleefully āoh Herald wait till you see thisā
(Also you Ortega. And Steel. Basically the Rangers seeing Argent flirt with a rising villain and that eventually revealed that Ortega has been kissing/dating them ā at least in my run ā for a while now)
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Just finished reading it wow never thought argent could be likeā¦ that! Canāt wait for chapter 2 to be developed.
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The flirting was surprising. You can reverse it and startle her instead if you go the thief route, she acusses you of stealing things and you add āLike your heart ?ā ā¦ wow.
Iām positively going nuts over what happens if you donāt have a realtionship with Ortega and have your puppet date Dr. Mortum instead.
Malin I love your reverse-storytelling gong back and forth, never ever abandon it!
it.
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So far i love Book 2 very much ā¦ and personally the story line is as clear as crystal , i genuinely think it is way better than Book 1, the main reason is Book 2 allow readers to role play their own character based on individual preference ā¦ meaning the story slowly evolve into a phase where we can become an Anti-Villain , maybe even a Hero ā¦ the choices given to us allow us to define what type of personality we want to evolve into, there is no more restriction where we feel we must become a villainā¦
my favourite is giving an interview with Mia, while at the same time start a fan club with the kids by giving them autograph and selfie with them, before running away with a smoke grenade ā¦awesome !!! my MCās philosophy is ā¦ since i am back, why not have more fun and be more famous than sidestep ?? Life is short , i am not going to ruin my days with petty hatred ā¦
and i love the interaction with Lady Argent , she is so sweet !!! the flirting scene with her suit my style , Argent is right ā¦we shouldnāt end each otherās life, it will be boring without any of us
and thank you @malinryden for giving us the option of robbing from the criminal , you are right in your reasoningā¦ fighting criminals had always being what i did in my life , i feel more comfortable robbing from the underworldā¦ especially now without the control from the government 
I think Book 2 bring so much joy to the Fallen Hero franchise, if i may add a suggestion ā¦ perhaps MC be given choice to register trademark of his/her hero/villain name , i want a copyright for my "Excalibur" ā¦ since i choose to be a Gang leader and register a luxury company with a building , i hope i can register my company as a Charity Organisation , because i plan to distribute my wealth to the poor and homeless ā¦ even start to build some houses and give them to the poor , that secretary of mine will be my CEO to do all this "charity "
Oh ā¦i have a better idea !! Why donāt i start a No-holds-Bar match with Lady Argent in a 100k seated Stadium?
all money from the ticket sales and the merchandise will be donate to the charity ā¦ I think Argent will be thrill for this opportunity 
I may even challenge Argent to see which of our action figures sell moreā¦
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IāM SO EXCII~IITED~! Everything I could possibly hope for and more! Iāll definitely have to make a new Sidestep to explore the Argent romance routeā¦ Iām hooked on this dynamic already. The Ortega scene!!! MY GIRL MIA OCHOA! and gosh I did not expect the path of villainy to be this customisable - I cannot wait!
I plan to poke through the mini-demo more when I get the chance, but hereās the weirdness I noticed so far (that hasnāt already been noted above):
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When choosing to change your motivation, itās possible to choose the same one you had before.
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The flashback after choosing to be criminal syndicate/ anarchist could be split into separate pages in my opinion. It was a little confusing to go straight from the flashback text back to the present. Pressing a button would make for a clearer transition, I think.
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As much as I enjoy Argent flirtation, it did feel a bit sudden to go from choosing to try and talk with her to touching her face. Maybe add another choice there if itās not tangled up enough already?
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After triggering the Sword of Damocles and choosing to take Argent down forcefully, it sounds like sheās just collapsed on the ground
(Itās as someone has turned off a switch, one moment sheās twitching in agony, the next sheās limp and unconscious.)
But the next page sounds like she fell off the bridge since the Handyman is trying to save her and MC says itāll be a while before she gets back. I guess you could just include that we kicked her into the ocean after triggering the Sword. -
The first page of the Dr. Mortum love scene could use a page break or two, as could the last before the flashback ends.
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Dr. Mortum still calls the puppet by the business nickname (madamoiselle/monsieur) even after love scene where I decided to go from business associates to flirting. Itās actually kind of cute, but Iām guessing itās not meant to be that way
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I got these paragraphs flowing kind of awkwardly next to each other - I poked at the code and it looks like theyāre separate checks for willpower/stamina?
You slowly release the breath you hadnāt been aware that you were holding. With the throbbing headache, everything feels too bright and sharp. You need sleep soon if youāre this ready to be jumping at shadows.
You slowly remove the last bits of your armor, grateful at least for the fact that youāre in lot better shape than you used to. Six months ago a battle like this would have left you a wreck, but youāre not even winded. - Got this repeating dialogue during the criminal syndicate route after joking about marlin.
- Dr. Mortum again, going from flirt to dating with repeated text
And here are some stats!
My custom MC - Start
Ash Hong is a seasoned, tech-savvy fighter.
Physical Status
Stamina: You are rested.
Willpower: You feel rested.
Injuries: You are fine, with no significant wounds.
Telepathy
Strength of Mind: 75%
Subtle Manipulations: 55%
Armored Suit
Vengeanceās suit is utilitarian and nondescript.
In its left hand, the suit has a neutered colony of nanovores functionally similar to having a disintegration touch, as well as being equipped with telepathic boosters and enhanced speed, as well as jump-jets.
Armor Status
Need Repair: 0% Fine: 100%
Vengeance.
Infamy: 10% Obscurity: 90%
Standard of Living: You are comfortable.
You are living in your old, comfortable apartment.
Psychological Profile
Arrogance: 25% Anonymity: 75%
Ruthlessness: 10% Empathy: 90%
Daring: 75% Caution: 25%
Main Puppet
Name: Eve
Puppet Status: unknown
Description: A short, mixed woman in her twenties with hazel eyes and long wavy blond hair.
Allies and Enemies
Ashās relationship with Ortega: itās complicated.
Ortega and Ash: 75%
Eveās relationship with Ortega: friend.
Ortega and Eve: 60%
Eveās relationship with Dr. Mortum: friend.
Mortum and Eve: 70%
Ashās relationship with Lady Argent: distant.
Lady Argent and Ash: 0%
Ashās relationship with Marshal Steel: former ally.
Marshal Steel and Ash: 30%
Ashās relationship with Herald: friendly.
Herald and Ash: 40%
My custom MC - End
Ash Hong is a seasoned, tech-savvy fighter.
Physical Status
Stamina: You are rested.
Willpower: You feel rested.
Injuries: You are fine, with no significant wounds.
Telepathy
Strength of Mind: 75%
Subtle Manipulations: 55%
Armored Suit
Vengeanceās suit is utilitarian and nondescript.
In its left hand, the suit has a neutered colony of nanovores functionally similar to having a disintegration touch, as well as being equipped with telepathic boosters and enhanced speed, as well as jump-jets.
Armor Status
Need Repair: 0% Fine: 100%
Vengeance. Vengeance is known as a meddler and rabble-rouser.
Infamy: 9% Obscurity: 91%
Standard of Living: You are wealthy.
You are living in your base.
Psychological Profile
Arrogance: 19% Anonymity: 81%
Ruthlessness: 9% Empathy: 91%
Daring: 79% Caution: 21%
Main Puppet
Name: Eve
Puppet Status: unknown
Description: A short, mixed woman in her twenties with hazel eyes and long wavy blond hair.
Allies and Enemies
Ashās relationship with Ortega: open attraction.
Ortega and Ash: 77%
Eveās relationship with Ortega: friend and confidante.
Ortega and Eve: 60%
Eveās relationship with Dr. Mortum: friend.
Mortum and Eve: 70%
Ashās relationship with Lady Argent: distant.
Lady Argent and Ash: 0%
Lady Argentās interest in Vengeance.: 23%
Ashās relationship with Marshal Steel: former ally.
Marshal Steel and Ash: 30%
Ashās relationship with Herald: friendly.
Herald and Ash: 40%
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I definitely would love to turn my fanboy Herald into a boyfriend in the future if that is a possibility.
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Hello! I really liked the first book and i am really happy to see this wip 
I took a look at the code and i might be wrong because i have never coded anything, but i think i found some mistakes
You have the facial scar labeled as false and it says it's false even when i choose the "i got the scar" option
Edit:
how does one look at the code?
[Edit] found out.
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It has begun! 
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As much as I enjoy Argent flirtation, it did feel a bit sudden to go from choosing to try and talk with her to touching her face. Maybe add another choice there if itās not tangled up enough already?
Yeah it was a little off-putting that simple choosing to try and talk with her automatically led to returning her flirting, it feels like that choice could use some more clarity.
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