It’s really exciting innit? The higher spirits know how much I want to blast those doors open 
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It’s sus given the people sent to the war are Heirs to Noble houses as well mc included, not sure about Zenon but my point makes sense regardless. They have something to do with wiping out or controlling the Noble houses and the Republic for some dubious reason. The first plan with the kidnapping failed therefore it necessitated a new plan being sending the mc to war.
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Not to interfere with the discussion and theories, but I just want to clarify a few things (I plan to create a Codex in the rewrite where these things will be explained in more detail).
The Senate holds the ultimate power in the Republic. They have the authority and privilege to pass laws, sanctify appointments, and more. The MC’s Uncle is the “First Citizen”—similar to a Roman consul, but there’s only one at a time.
The Council is somewhat (loosely) inspired by the ancient greek Areopagus—it’s a collection of representatives from the seven (previously eight, when House Serin was part of the Council) Great Houses, which are the families descended from the original nine heroes who established the Republic. Only members of these Great Houses can be part of the Council. While it can propose laws and appointments, it doesn’t have any real power over the legislative process (at least, in theory) - so the Senate always has the option to straight up reject the Council’s proposal.
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oh no you did it 
you did fuel my theroy side even more dmm
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Welp this helps my theory even more so thnx Noltev lmao.
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The letter probably intercepted since the courier itself play a role in that mess, but if you guys doesn’t care about point of view there is one possible clue to point who that is.
However this would break Immersion since MC doesn't know this
At the beginning of story during Erick cutscene, Erick meet with The green masked man, this is the one that release him to do the deed. (During visit with the Governor)
There is however one detail during capture scene MC could see one of the accomplish the woman that do the deed “The council agent” The woman with black hair it’s braided.
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So thanks to Noltev’s Lore dump I highly suspect the masked Councilor’s are getting tired of the Senate and have gotten power hungry hence the supposed some being not as unified as Noltev said before as well as the statement of them being ambitious. Who is up for overthrowing the Republic with the people who tried to kidnap/kill the mc raises hand
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But didn’t thé mask dudes hated our family because one of us wanted to go Julius Caesar style?
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Hypocrites exist bud lol. Wouldn’t be surprised if they think they can do better than our Julius Caesar wannabe ancestor.
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even more reason to get us away or dead or whatever, we are from a fam that wanted go julius and our mc already showed a bit the admiarton (sorry bad english) to our what all call him (traitor)
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If you ask me I would try to hold off conquering the nation part until they gave MC open justification to wage war so population doesn’t see MC as tyrant, but others may do their own path it just how I am gonna see it.
Either way as priority MC need to know there is attempt of their life first and bust who plot this attempt, survive the front line, get stronger, get more connection before anything else.
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Would be funny if the Councilor’s doom themselves and their plot by giving the mc a role in the military. That spells risky if you ask me
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Tbh I wonder why they still did that lmao,giving your enemy control of an army is always recipe to disaster.
Thougg ig maybe they think MC will never wrestle the control of the army with Leona,which would makes sense.
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MC is just a child, barely reaching adulthood 16 years old, MC is not this person whoever that Julius Caesar is MC is their own person.
It seems to me it just poor justification of a murder for personal gain easier to blame dead ancestors for something their great grandchild didn’t do, way to garner support of rebels.
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mc is still a kid thats true but our mc also already showes some side like the mother with her steadly gaze or being direct, after the failed murder adempt or kidnap, is our mc now sure in shock but if did learn one thing if trauma is really well handelt can make a really powerfull person in the end and sending our mc to war even more
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I can understand that whoever plot this is smart what else can ruin a war other than putting untested barely experienced child as general of a military campaign.
Obviously the plotter want MC to fail if not getting killed during this campaign, bringing along with it other heirs and bring down Serin legacy to it’s end.
It’s quite smart actually killed multiple bird with one stone, however MC here is not normal person, this plan will blow up in their face.
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There are things called generational family grudges it could be that some of the Councilor’s has said form of grudge/vendetta against the Serin’s be it due to the grandfather’s attempt or simply what the family did such as killing a member of their family. The thing is we don’t know much yet.
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Coming back from my hiatus, this is the first story I picked back up, seeing it has Roman influences too. And in glad I did. Medieval fantasies always hold a dear place in my heart and this one doesn’t disappoint.
I enjoyed the pacing, however, the disjunction between a few scenes happening one after the another seem non-immersive, which reminds me it’s a pre-planned story I’m reading and not something which should flow naturally.
I liked Juna’s usage of emotional appeal to the readers, it’s an important tool which, cleverly implemented, allows the readers to be emotionally involved. (Like hell, I’m choosing any other horse than Luna!)
The scenes of gore and violence were well depicted and as engaging and prompt to satiate the readers I feel like, as well as the MC’s personal scenes with family.
There were a few instances which seemed odd like Neimo having a sister our age, given he’s a lot older than us or Julia’s sister supporting that mountain of a man when he was spent from using that spell, or the underlying feeling I had all throughout the story I had about all the NPCs having varying levels of distrust against the man for some reason? As my first time playthrough I didn’t feel any distrust or hatred warranted towards the guy therefore was a bit confused as to why everyone except the MC (even the MC in some choices) felt aloof towards him ?
I would also suggest taking a cautious dip in the rabbit hole of using magick in medieval fiction as it can soon go out of your hands if you don’t think of a threshold to which you want to keep the involvement of magick in the story, and it can turn back on you and create lack of immersion and further roadblocks for the writer.
Otherwise, a wonderfully written story, take your time, coding is shité, we all know it. As long as you keep making the story good enough to keep the readers engaged, time shouldn’t be a huge concern.
Typos and such
Mostly pronoun errors and unfinished sentences
Somehow MC knows Iris’s name before they meet her, this has happened before when we were taken prisoners in the bandit camp and we knew their names suddenly.
Carry on the good work, cheers. Ave🍻
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I have a word for that.
“Blood Feud”
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Yep that’s the exact term from the era to the middle ages as well as certain parts of modern times lol.
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