An interesting premise, though there isn’t much to go off thus far. While having 12 orders means that there’s a large variety to choose from, I would raise a concern over whether all 12 should be playable. I imagine that the MC’s order would be a relatively significant part of each playthrough and could result in a rather significant ballooning of material or result in it being window dressing and being rather sparse. Though if it is pulled off, then I’m sure the replayability would be greatly benefited.
Concerning the game as-is (though you may have changed it with the upcoming update), I would suggest a clean-up of the pick-a-name scene since there’s a lot of names just arranged by alphabetical order without any option to go back or any indication as to the order. At the very least divide them on a gender basis or a religious/regional one. Personally inclined towards the former and a descriptor of the order e.g.:
“John” would become “John, Knight of the Golden Archer”
I assume that the rest of the backgrounds will be filled out in the next update, if not I suggest that the options get commented out or else people might get an incorrect impression.
Having run through the St. Bartholomew path, might I also suggest that the options have a bit more detail than just a few words. For instance, “Use the Oil” doesn’t really indicate much, if it were something like “Use oil to exorcise the prael” it would be more indicative of what the option represents.
Also, I would suggest that some “specialist” terms are explained as exposition in the text. I know “prael” is in the glossary, but it is a bit of a slog to click through to it. Having the glossary there is useful, but if I have to keep a separate tab open to refer to terms which aren’t introduced in the text and which randomly appear it isn’t really the most convenient of options.
Having sneaked a look at the code (I didn’t catch the notice on the names which had paths in the OP), might I suggest using *gosub and *goto a bit more? I’m not an expert in Choicescript by any means, but there looks to be a lot of superfluous text that is just a copy of another option.
Interested to see how this goes.