I currently have Chapter 1 to 1st half of Chapter 7 but it’s on my computer. I haven’t compiled the ruler MC and non-ruler MC yet.
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Can’t help but have to agree with a couple of folks here, certain parts near the end felt rushed, some stats were often meaningless and the game would often feel pretty biased against the mc.
The game was a nice read though, I especially liked the end where my mc was chilling hand in hand with clara and xavier while king richard was fuming at the back 
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Thanks for the feedback, guys! I appreciate them.
However, I think I need to clear some things up.
Stats: I understand your frustration that most stats aren’t used in the game, but it’s just the first book. The most important stats in this one are archery, leadership, personality, relationships, and some hidden stats. The other ones will be used in the second book, where you will fight in a battle, make allies, stop the rebellion, etc.
Some of you guys say that close combat and swordsmanship skills could come to use during the ambush scene. It has been mentioned many times in the book that the king/queen and heirs must be protected no matter what. Why would Sir Arnold let you fight them and put yourself in danger? What if the ambushers use poisoned weapons? One scratch and MC will be gone.
I know you want to fight, but there will be plenty of chances in the battle.
Poison: Some events have to happen to move the plot forward. Why the poisoning had to happen:
- It was Erwan’s plan all along, and it had to happen to show how dangerous he was.
- To give one final reason for rebellion which is the main plot for the first part of book 2. However, some players will have it easy while others will struggle a lot.
- Matteo’s confession.
- Leia’s introduction. If players adopt her, she will play a significant role in the following books.
- Gerard’s death. It had to happen for Clara’s character development.
- To develop the relationship with the ROs as they experience how it feels almost to lose MC.
- And one final test for Astryn romancers.
Richard. He is favored by people for these reasons:
- He’s the king’s favorite. Everyone knows King Charles trained with him at some point.
- His mother is the king’s favorite, while Alvena has a terrible reputation.
- He’s the firstborn child.
- Atheris has a poor reputation for her temperamental personality. Freya is unfit to command. MC is the youngest one (and has less knowledge/experience than their siblings), and it’s mentioned that youngest heirs are rarely chosen.
However, if you play his route, you can see how disappointed people are with him in the end. They also rebel against him.
Other than that, I agree with you all. I will use your feedbacks to improve the sequels.
Have a good day/night! <3
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I’m tryna open the game link but it’s shows a ““t he requested URL was not found on this server.””
That’s cause it’s been published mate, you got to buy it from the store of whatever device your using.
I’d like to reiterate that I enjoyed the game to some extent even if I wish some things were handled differently. A great example for that would be giving the player more liberty and freedom with their choices. (Something I’ve pointed out in my earlier post)
While I understand that a King/Queen must always be surrounded by royal guards/protectors, there should’ve been choices where the player themselves can decide whether they want to stand back and let the MC’s guardians do all of the fighting, or join in to help in their own way. Whether they endanger themselves, or act smart, that’s up to us. It’s just a way of showing the readers that their character is developing, and give the training they had some merit.
But we didn’t have any pay off to the hard work our character put in. I mean, the MC was grazed by an arrow. If it was poisoned, we’d know. But it wasn’t because that plot of using poison was saved up for last. Which I will get into in a sec.
The thing is, he didn’t capitulate on our loss, which set him back. He let Astryn do all of the work for him, which is idiotic in a tactical point of view. There was no ‘plan B’, and in a way, his refusal to launch a direct assault just extended the war. If he wanted a fast war, he should’ve sent an assassin to kill our MC, and rescue Astryn.
It also baffles me that, despite how great his scouts are at delivering him news, he didn’t even think of recovering Astryn from our dungeon when he had the chance.
This was one of my biggest gripes with this story. We could’ve avoided it if the player had more agency with their choices, but of course it had to be a preselected scene. The whole kingdom management would’ve been great if we could avoid certain events from happening, and not be railroaded into a set ending or outcome. It paints the people of the story, the civilians, a bad image. Instead of us wanting to save them, it makes us wanna burn them. Ya know?
I understand that Rhivenians’ accept adopted children as heirs, and it’s kind of cute in a way. I’ll hold off my thoughts on this until the second book comes. It’s still premature.
Sir Arnold pointed out that there is a fine line between love and obsession, and I completely agree with his assessment of Matteo’s folly.
We gave Astryn plenty of chances to show that Rhivenians’ aren’t as evil as she was lead to believe. We protected her from being harmed. We gave her plenty of leeway, and showed her kindness from our own hearts. We even went out of our way to befriend her, to make her understand that maybe she’s got it all wrong.
Our overt kindness should’ve given her a moral dilemma; made her think that perhaps there’s more to this war than meets the eye. There should’ve been an internal struggle inside of her, between her mission, and her developing feelings and understanding for our MC.
Shouldn’t that be enough to give her a change of heart? Or maybe force her to postpone her mission? Even if she didn’t want to admit that she was wrong, she should at least recognize the fault in Erwan’s plans.
Yes. This is all conjecture. But that’s the point. Despite every morsel of good heartedness we showed to her, she still poisons everyone. That makes her irredeemable in my eyes. It would’ve been understandable if we were evil to her this entire time, but no. Regardless of your choices, she goes with the plan. And that’s just, to put it mildly, bad character development.
Where do I even start with Dick…
Is that enough to justify Richard to become the golden boy in everyone’s eyes? It felt completely biased in the player’s point of view because he gets all of the praises while doing nothing, and if our MC does something remotely kind, we get crucified for it. He doesn’t go out of his way to show people that he’s a worthy first heir. He doesn’t have to, anyway.
He simply is because everyone said so.
There’s no showing, only telling.
Which brings me to my second point about Richard’s utter incompetence. It’s true that we are the youngest, hence why we’re less loved, but at least we have something to show for it. Even Atheris goes out of her way to save our ass when the children were making fun of us. She is kind and protective, even if she’s brash. It gives her character which Richard sorely lacks.
When we show kindness to Richard, he acts like he doesn’t care, especially if we’re just as kind to Clara because he sees us as competition. He brags about being trained by King Charles all of the time even though it only happened once.
He has no real understand of danger, and has a childlike view of the world. He would rather marry a stable girl than save an entire Kingdom, and this becomes evident when you marry him off to another heir. His temperament and stupidity places a heavy emphasis as to why he’s a bad leader, and yet people still choose him.
That’s why…
…it doesn’t matter. Because it’s set in stone. The ending is all the same even if he’s the King. Even if you’re the King. Even if you go out of your way to do everything the people want you to do. And I’m saddened by this, because I really looked forward to this game.
Hence why I need to be more critical of the second book. I can’t emphasize enough that the first game is what launches a series. If it’s bad, it’s doomed to failure. But I also believe that sequels are just as important.
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His main plan was to have Astryn only poison the king/queen and royal family. However, she failed. But she didn’t use the opportunity to run away like Xavier did (if you don’t let him escape). This is how she shows remorse.
Though the main plan failed, it’s still advantageous for Erwan because the rebellion will weaken the kingdom (if MC or the ruler can’t handle it well in the second book)
As I said, the rebellion is the main plot for the first part of book 2. Realistically, it had to happen. It’s mentioned in the story that the economy is terrible in Rhivenia after the several battles and wars. When they found out that the treasury is empty and the war is coming, it pushed them over the edge. They don’t care if you executed the traitors in your castle, or have been kind to everyone. They care about their family and they don’t want to starve.
So that’s why, no matter who the ruler is, rebellion will happen. They even rebelled against King Charles in the past.
Astryn and Erwan have been friends since childhood. She sees him as a brother and is loyal to him. She knows MC only for a few weeks. How can she possibly know that MC is not manipulating her? (It’s an actual choice in the game. MC can be nice to her so they can use her later against Erwan). And in her eyes, Rhivenians are still not good people. Remember what Isabelle did to her?
And her redemption arc starts in the second book if you kept her alive.
I will not make any comment on it anymore as it feels weird to defend my own characters. You can hate or love any character you want.
Sorry that you’re disappointed. There are so many good medieval games to play. I suggest you to play The War for The West if you haven’t. 
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While this is a understandable from a certain point of view, their decision to rebell now it is not a smart thing to do. Because even if they manage to win the rebellion, they still need to repulse a foreign invasion, and it is imply that our enemy posses a powerful army. And wars are costly. No, honestly even if they took power how they are supposed to fix the economy issue, and win the war. For this reason I think they are not acting logically.
Also they conveniently ignore that we rule by divine right, but no, they dislike us from day one.
Just one question: Why the MC can’t tell to queen Aetheris Freya’s secret? Keeping a secret to you ruler, about a member of a royal family it is very close to be considered treason. I don’t even want to think, what will happen if that jerk of Isabella will discovered the truth. She will certainly try, to use it to undermine Aetheris rule.
Ah yes Isabella has to die…
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I mean, if you’re a medieval peasant, “who’s in charge” is not particularly relevant. Not even nationalism plays a part, because Erwan is Rhivenian. They don’t need to repel an enemy invasion, they can just… let the invaders win. That’s certainly a better proposition if you’re a peasant than having an actual war, because it means it’s less likely for your farm to get burnt to the ground or for you to die in a muddy ditch somewhere for the cause of “dude that doesn’t give a fuck about you” against “this other dude that also doesn’t give a fuck about you”.
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They don’t want power. They want the current ruler to be replaced by another one. If MC is the ruler, they want Richard or Atheris to take over. You see, Rhivenians don’t always agree with the Sword’s choice. They rebelled against King Charles after what he did to Prince Francis.
Keep in mind that they’re commoners and they know nothing about leadership. If they’re suffering, they will blame the ruler for doing a bad job.
MC will have a chance to discuss it in the second book.
If you have any more questions, please ask me on Tumblr as I’m not much active here.
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Actually, this sounds like they know very much about leadership indeed. Shit, I WISH modern day real life people knew this much about leadership.
Nationalism was actually very important for medieval peasants. It just doesn’t matter here, because Erwan is also Rhivenian, so it’s not factor.
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Good point. You are right nationalism, was not an important thing for a medieval peasant… Religion was…
And Erwan and his lads worship a very different God. They also think that our sword and religion are evil.
Think about medieval Europe.
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I have a lot of things to say about this story but i believe everyone here alrdy said it.
One thing i really want to say : mc is not smart
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Where do you want bugs reported?
I’m actually pretty worried about my MC. Isabelle threatening that she wants him to fail, when pretty much all he’s doing is supporting Richard (who is the king, since my MC actually does like him) is… making me think she’s going to get him Francis’d.
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I thought the story the author was trying to deliver was great but the execution was poor. It felt rushed and our choices were limited. I believed the main theme of the book was about love and obsession, and you can clearly see how every character perceived and expressed it. Everyone can make an argument about a character and how bad they were written but you can also understand how and why they did it (for what they believed was love but actually an obsession. And because of it we got to see how imperfect they really, I think the best example of it was the mc’s mom, you can see how unstable and insecure she was as a woman to the point she caused Isabelle to be infertile and killed her child, but she’s also a good loving mom who puts her children first before anyone else you can see it when she stand against King Charles.
I’m in no place to tell the author what to do since I just write short stories and I don’t have any experience about writing a whole book. I believe the story has a lot of potential that I wish to see on the second book. Thank you.
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War of the West threw me in a loop with its cult storyline. It has some pros and cons, but it’s not SoR. It will never be.
SoR is unique. I like SoR because it hooked me in with the whole “some Namherys dude decides who becomes monarch, and also he’s a magical giant ass sword.” And you should take advantage of your story and its uniqueness.
I hope my criticism didn’t come off as hate. It really isn’t and it wasn’t my intention. I really wouldn’t bother if I didn’t like the whole thing. I know you’ll improve on the second book, and I hope that you incorporate everyone’s (or at least some) of the things we’ve pointed out. 
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You can send them to me on Tumblr if you want.
I will. I promise
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Dang, howd you get the evil and cruel stats to shoot up so high 
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Hello!
Here’s the list of the choices for Chapter 4 to Chapter 11 of the Ruler MC. Unfortunately, I haven’t finished with my non-ruler MC route with Daemir as a RO and I don’t want to be spoiled but I hope this helps a bit.
Daemir Ruler MC
Chapter 4
#“I like the design of your armour.”
#“And I don’t like arrogance.”
or
#“I see no reason to flatter you.”
or
#“So is their lord.”
#“And I don’t like arrogance.”
or
#“I see no reason to flatter you.”
Chapter 5
#“I don’t like flattery, Lord Daemir.”
or
#“It’s nice to see you again, Daemir.”
or
#“Your hair looks much better now.”
#“It’s inevitable.”
or
#“Thanks for the hope.”
#“You can do your duty and find peace at the same time.”
or
#“What if you never find peace at the end?”
Chapter 6
#“It doesn’t apply to everyone.”
#“You did what you had to do.”
#“I’d never hate you.”
#“I believe it too.”
Chapter 8 Ruler MC
#Don’t take the flower.
#“Leave the children alone,” you command the man.
Chapter 9 Ruler MC
If you executed someone before (either Astryn and/the guard
#“I’ve always been ready.”
If you didn’t executed someone before
#“I am ready.”
Chapter 10 Ruler MC
#“It’s good that you’re here too.”
OR
#“Where were you?!”
OR
#Hug him.
#You put your hand over his, showing your gratitude.
OR
#Take it from him, making sure your fingers brush against his.
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