Thank you SO much! I got some reports of an error during this scene but I didn’t know exactly what variable was causing it, so I had trouble locating the issue. Turns out I forgot to add the variable to the startup file and thank you for letting me know about the second problem, too!
I’m in the middle of adding more pronoun options for the MC (they/them + custom pronouns), so I can’t update chapter 2 with the fixes just yet without messing up some of the code. I’ll make a post once everything’s finished and the error fixes have been added. Thank you again!
EDIT: Actually I realized this makes no sense since I just have to upload the startup file and not the chapter 2 file in order to fix the bug. My brain’s tired the bug should be fixed now!
@Alvin_Chi1 Thank you so much! There are no poly routes planned for this story, unfortunately. I love poly content, but I’ve already got so many different kinds of relationship dynamics in mind for TSS depending on your choices, personality etc. and adding poly routes would mean a ton more work. Sadly have to draw the line somewhere for my own sanity’s sake haha.
I’ve fixed some chapter 2 bugs and errors now and added they/them pronouns to the game. Custom pronouns will take a little longer since I’m still looking into how to add them
I also completely forgot to add the artwork of female Jaelyn I commissioned a while ago, as voted on by my Patreon members. Here it is!
The clothes are different than what I put in their description since I hadn’t settled on any particular attire for them.
Agree - He was the one part that stood out as odd to me. So he was a former high school classmate, and now is a convenience store clerk MC occasionally sees while running errands? Small town w few people in their age group so they’re passing acquaintances/friendly enough? Sure, that makes sense, got it. But then MC has a bizarre interaction w him in which he makes it clear he’s been observing her / her routines, wastes her time when she’s clearly indisposed, and just generally ignores all boundaries / rules of polite, normal human interaction. Then you get a choice as to what your relationship was like in HS, and even though I picked the one that says “you were indifferent to his existence” it doesn’t appear to have any effect on the narrative. Then he shows up trespassing at the house during a crisis, acting like it’s all harmless tee hee hee and is somehow surprised MC wants to call 911? And he is apparently deeply betrayed when MC isn’t buddy buddy towards him later with everyone else?
Idk, if my local Starbucks barista / former HS classmate showed up at my family home in the middle of the night, I think I’d be prettttttttttyyy alarmed and would probably want to stay far, far away from that person. He reads like a potential stalker / threat to me more than anything else. If there were some sort of preexisting friendship noted, I could maybe understand it, but as it is now, I was just left mildly annoyed, confused, and wondering if I’d missed something. I haven’t read the original though so maybe I’m missing some nuance!
Other than that though I really enjoyed it - lovely work!
Hey! I finally got around to reading this IF and I love it! One bug that I noticed tho, is that at some point, I’m chapter two I believe, our personality description disappears completely.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts I definitely understand the uneasy feelings surrounding/outright dislike for M. However, there should be changes in the narrative depending on how you view them with additional or differing options later on. This story does have a lot of variables, though (I think I’ve got more of them by chapter 3, which I’m currently working on, than I had in the entire original version of the story ) so it’s very possible that I might’ve forgotten to account for certain scenes or that there are bugs which show the wrong scene etc. If you have any specific interactions/scenes in mind where you thought “I’d want to answer differently here” or “this doesn’t align with how my MC views M” (doesn’t have to be M in particular, though), I’d love to hear about it and re-check the code as well as potentially add more options or alternative scenes!
One of my top priorities for the remake other than adding more to the story, characters and relationships is to add reactivity and make the narrative respond to your choices. It’s very important to me that players feel like their choices stay consistent and I promise that if there are places where they don’t seem all that consistent, that’s definitely not done on purpose.
The “M feeling betrayed part” should also only occur if you outright say you don’t care what happens to them or stay quiet and let the others do whatever they want when they beg for your help. I might need to add some more nuance there though since the game currently reads M as either being okay with/liking you or not after that particular scene. Thanks for pointing it out and for sharing your opinion overall
@eTootsi Oh that’s weird, I’ll have a look at that. Thank you for letting me know! I’m really happy you enjoy the story so far
Makes sense to me! Maybe if you pick an indifferent choice when you first encounter M, there could be some line like “ugh he’s been annoying you since you were kids but he’s ultimately harmless” and that might make M feel like less of a creep? And yes, I did pick the extreme option leading to him feeling betrayed but it was because at that point I was just so annoyed by his continued presence after blowing him off at every opportunity that I just wanted him gone hahah
Great work and I look forward to reading more! And I love that one of your best friends is also a big M hater !
A new commission, this time of Rheylo, that was uploaded to my Tumblr a short while ago.
I’ll probably add the portraits to the intro post with the option for people to click to see them or not at this point
All portraits that have been made thus far has been voted on by my Patreon members (except for the Azuridian one which was voted on by my Tumblr followers).
and thank you for letting me know about the second problem, too!
the bug should be fixed now!
the artist is incredible and super nice. I really recommend them if people want to get commissions!
I definitely understand the uneasy feelings surrounding/outright dislike for M. However, there should be changes in the narrative depending on how you view them with additional or differing options later on. This story does have a lot of variables, though (I think I’ve got more of them by chapter 3, which I’m currently working on, than I had in the entire original version of the story 
!