Yes!!
Hey! So I don’t know if anyone has mentioned it but when trying to play as a male MC for some reason it changes my gender to female the second time you get to decide gender
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No one else did, but then again it might be something I accidentally changed when I tried to fix a few things. Thanks for mentioning, I’ll fix it as soon as I can!
I’ve fixed it! Thank you for point it out!
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No problem, always glad to help ^^
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Very intriguing start! I really like how you described the “childhood friend”. They were just the right amount of creepy and alien while simultaneously giving off a warm aura. Both myself and my Mc truly believed they wanted the best for us.
The pupils never stop moving is such a nice detail. I loved it.
Can’t say much about the story, since I haven’t read the introductory post. I prefer to dive into the demo blind, but I can say it definitely left me wanting for more!
One thing I would note would be, perhaps, to give a little more freedom in dialogues. Although I understand that so far we’ve only talked as a child so it may be intentional on your part. But I do prefer to pick what my character says and how they feel about what is happening instead of being chosen for me. Again, I understand this was pretty much a prologue, a setting of the plot, so this feedback may be completely unwarranted.
I also really liked your writing style! It seems to fit the story really well. Best of luck for your project, I’ll definitely be keeping an eye out for future updates 
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Thank you! I think you may be the first to trust the childhood friend!
This may have been the outcome of me staring at my computer for fifteen minutes trying to think of something terrifying and remembering my grandmother told me if I stared too long at a computer screen/phone screen/etc my pupils will start moving in different directions 
Oh, I’m actually working on that! I changed a few things up in my draft and gave the reader the choice to be suspicious/scared of Geishehl at first etc, but since I’m not fully satisfied with it yet, I haven’t uploaded the new version.
I posted this one mostly to give readers a taste of what’s to come (and because I was impatient to get feedback to see what to change), but I was (still am) a newbie to coding so I really wasn’t able to use the magic of coding to its full potential. I learned quite a few since then, though, and I am having fun changing stuff. The new prologue will definitely have more choices and their effects! Thank you pointing it out!
Thank you so much!
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Update 20/05/20
Before you get excited, this isn’t chapter one! That’s still a long way to go, but I do already have its bones ready. And I’m heading on to chapter 3 rough draft in a few days, I think.
For this update, it does warrant a post. I changed quiiiite a bit in the prologue, more choices, a skill boost, and the ability to input your own pronouns. I also, sort of, cleaned up the stats page.
Now, you can either have a high enough relationship with your guardian to get their name, or too low. (Yes, most of you already know their name 
). There’s a bit of a difference in scenes, too, depending on whether you like the guardian or not.
As always, tell me if something goes wrong or if there are some continuity errors! Or, if you’re uncomfortable with something that you think I should change.
I also changed from uploading scenes to html since I now have… too many scene files in my computer and I think it’s better in the long run if I have just one html file for each change/update. Better change it earlier than later.
I also put up a google form for my general questions, please answer if and when you can! You can also tell me your suggestions and stuff there, in case you wish to be anonymous.
As always, please be safe and healthy! I hope you’re all having a good day. And for those of you not following the tumblr development account, I’ve answered a few asks about the ROs that you might be interested in!
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How do you do it?I just keep getting their species.
There were a couple of errors:the first being that you are asked your first name twice, and the second being
Other than that,I absolutely love it.
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Oh, I think I forgot to adjust the lowest amount of relationship needed, put it too high… I think it’s working now. You only need to choose “I thought they were lonely” when asked what you think about them.
The name thing is on purpose, for those who want to change their name if they ever changed their gender or just because, but I put it behind another choice now, you only get it if you choose to change your name. I also fixed the spacing there, I hope…
Thank you for pointing them out!!! And thank you, I’m glad you love it! 
Oh yay, an update!
Still yearning and longing for Chai, but this is wonderful, thank you. Good luck on writing 
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Hey there dear author! I am very excited about your project and hope that you will have an enjoyable experience on this site and working on your story! The premise is definitely interesting and I am a noted sucker for mythology stories so I am very happy to see your take on such a genre.
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I meant the missing capital letter.It’s my fault for not explaining properly.
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I meant twice at once.
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You’ll get him in his full glory in Chapter 2, unfortunately 
Thank you so much! It’s been great so far!
Hmm, which one? Is it “you grew even closer”? That was a spacing mistake. I’m preeetty sleepy so I may have missed something.
Oh wait, yeah, I think I know what you mean. When you input your own name, yeah? I think I remember doing something that may have messed that up, sorry! I’ll fix it asap. Thank youuuu!
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I got this
It became easier to deal with Geishehl’s death and the anxiety it brought you after.
It’ s Skia now 
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Damn, and here I thought I mastered the art of ctrl f and changing everything 
Thank you, I changed it already!
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UPDATE 24/05/20
It’s 24.6k with code and 21.3k without, which makes me think it’s a bit too long but even if I want to cut it in half, I still don’t know where to cut it off, so it’s staying this long in the meantime.
My anxiety isn’t through the roof right now, and I thought I’d use this chance to post. I tested it and I went through the code a few times to check for mistakes, so I already caught a few of it. But there’s bound to be some mistakes still.
I’m still not completely happy with how it turned out, but it’s not the final draft anyway, I’ll have time to revise it while I’m writing the other chapters. I feel like there’s a bit of a weird pacing, or maybe that’s just because I read and reread this like a hundred times. I’ll reread it after maybe a week to recheck.
Please tell me if you find any mistakes, or if you have any suggestions, or if any of the coding’s weird and gave you something you didn’t want to get. The stats and variables are still a work in progress, but the temporary ones will be used in this chapter. There’s a google form linked under the demo for your suggestions in case you want to be anonymous!
By the way, I changed the title of the demo from The Rosy Ones to The Rosy Ones: Resurrections. I think I’ll stay with this book 1 title for now.
I hope you have fun reading, and I hope everyone keeps safe and healthy! 
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I forgot the $ sign… 
fixed it! Thank you!
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