Hello everyone. After getting more likes than I was expecting, I finally decided after months of building up the courage, to show what I have until now. My first wip: The Last Laugh. A story I came up with specifically to experiment with choicescript and try my hand at this.
:In this world, much like many others, there’s many, many superheroes and villains. Filled to the brim with them. There is no one incident or common cause of origin for these heroes and villains. Some are aliens, others are gods and others are people who have had freak accidents. And others are only humans who use their wits. Among all of these heroes, one of them stands out. Considered the first of them all, this hero is the most powerful hero on the planet, they have fought alien invasions, gods, mad scientists, monsters and many many more things. They are regarded as the best hero on the planet, the standard to strive for, the symbol of what a hero should be. You…
…are not this hero. What you are is their clone, created by their greatest enemy, their nemesis, Vera McAllan, to seemingly be her enforcer in her eternal battle against the hero. What will you do is your choice. Will you support your creator in her dark endeavors, will you side with your progenitor and rebel against her, or will you strike out on your own as a villain?
What will it have:
- You can choose the gender of both you and the Hero.
- Design the appearance of both you and the Hero.
- Learn to be a villain under three of the world’s most prolific villains.
- Choose what you will be in this world.
- Define your origin story.
What am I looking for in feedback:
The whole nine yards. Critiques, suggestions/recommendations. Pacing, writing, etc. Grammar too since as much as I know and grown with it, english is still not my native language and I may forget some words and subtleties.
And for those who love to code dive, maybe you can also suggest other ways a I can code to make my job a hell of a lot easier. Maybe a way to write one scene once instead of three times per choice, maybe some obscure coding trick I may not be aware off, anything that can make my job of coding easier, if you don’t see it in the coding, let me know.
What it has:
It currently has the prologue and the first chapter. In total it has 10,355 words. Currently trying to work on chapter 2.
Curse words delivered throughout the demo and in future chapters.
I’ve fixed as many of the him/his problems I could find. I also eliminated the line breaks to make it much easier to read. Let me know if everything works out well.
Here it is. Enjoy. WIP