I’ve begun work on my new game The Imaginary Friends. In it, you play as a single parent raising your daughter, Melody. Your life is changed forever when it turned out that not only her imaginary friends are actually real, but she is in danger because of her imagination.
Currently, it’s about 5.7k so far. I plan on finishing the rest of chapter 1 this week if everything turns out fine. My writing still needs improving, but I thought I could still put my ideas out there.
So The Doppelganger is on a hiatus until I get inspiration (is that the right word?) for it. Hopefully, I get it back soon, but I won’t rush it otherwise I will be dissatisfied with my work,
The PS note should be emphasis as well.
The sentence “How are you?” should be ‘how are you?’.
I’m not quite sure if the Sweetheart should be ‘sweetheart’ or not. The sentence, “It’s only be one day and your father is already saying that this is the best trip ever.” It is a bit confusing (or at least to me.) ‘It’s only be a one day trip but your father is already saying that this is the best trip ever.’ also the last sentence of the unlined in red, I was really confused of what they meant by that.
I was supposed to update my demo but between work, school and my personal life things are kind of hectic at the moment. I would update again before this month is over.
Update:
So far I am working on redoing chapter 1 so that the choices would be able to influence Melody. School and work is keeping me busy, but I want to at least start updating about how the game going a least every week or two.
I like the premise of the story and I would like to see where this goes. You mentioned that you’re thinking about making this more of a fantasy story and that’s fine. But with something that deals with a child’s imagination, it could turn out many other ways – including a horror path which might be interesting. As mentioned before, grammar could use some work. Unfortunately, I am not able to point out any of these errors at the moment as doing so would take too much time. What I suggest is to just keep on writing as freely as you can and worry about editing later. Good luck!