you seem to often miss (") at conversation.. is it intentional? though i dont advice it, coz it will confusing the reader
i mark some of it here with some typo:
at stat screen : Below is a list of importatant information: (important)
Varys interjects (")so what is the play here? I know there are some general formations you can make, but remember playing to the crowd can be useful too. Any gold thrown into the arena is shared. It may also be a good way to distinguish ourselves. (")
you are left with the thief. He looks at you hesitantly, (") what do you two want? (") You respond, "We are looking for people to join our team for the tournament. You seem like a fast kid." You tell him all the details.
[Harold notices the wooden sword, "That is a nicely made weapon Jacob. Where did you get it?"
Jacob responds, "I made it myself." Tommen smiles, (")Oh that's cool", he holds his staff up, "I made my weapon too. I call it Troll Smasher" (who is Tommen ?)]
After the tournament, you stretch examining any bruises you may have gotten from the fighting. Varys grins, (")well, that was…fun. I am going to be late for the darts competition if I don’t leave soon.(")
You are so surprised at his presence, you don’t know what to say, luckily he speaks first. (")Luke right? Your father has told me a lot about you. How is he doing? Is he doing better?(") You manage to nod.
Sir Robert approaches you and asks if he might have a word. You nod and follow him. (")Luke, I really appreciate everything your father has done. Midnight is quite a handful to care for, it will be difficult to find someone to replace your father to care for him.(")
Sir Robert puts his hand on your shoulder, (")unfortunately I am leaving town in a few days for another tournament, in fact I plan on attending several tournaments over the next few months. Your father is in no condition to come with me, I will have to find a new horse trainer.(")
Sir Robert smiles, (")that is nice of you, but I already have an experienced horse trainer in mind who I know will be more than willing to take over in your father’s absence.(") You frown.
(")It is a strategy. You see one day during a joust I had an over eager attendee polish my armor and shield so well, that you could practically see your reflection in it. I was jousting an opponent that was quite good, and I wasn’t sure if I was going to win, when halfway during the match my shield and armor reflected the rays of the sun onto the eyes of the other jouster. It allowed me to hit him with my lance and unhorse him. Ever since that day, I always like to keep my armor as shiny as possible when it comes to jousting.(")
Varys is waiting outside. (")Hey Luke, thanks for helping me get that job with Sir Robert. Even though I will be essentially a paid scarecrow in charge of guarding his supplies…I can use the work. My uncle's tanning shop has had a run of bad luck lately, so I need to go out on my own for a while.(")
"Good", responds Sir Robert, "I want you to ride these two horses here. Even though I always prefer to compete with Midnight, I figured it might be good to have some backup horses just case. You will ride alongside me in the front. Alright?" (did you mean just in case)
(")I’m not a farmer, and I don’t really have any interest in lording over others. I pretty much let the townsfolk do what they want. As long as they pay their tithes I’m happy and their happy for the autonomy I provide them." "That is about it."
(")Yeah, in some ways I found those much more dangerous. Probably because you’re in an enclosed space, with a bunch of drunk people trying to kill you, some with concealed daggers too. I was outnumbered in one bar fight that turned ugly really quick. I actually managed to block one of the assailants strike with my arm, even though he did some minor damage to me, though obviously small wounds are better to receive than mortal ones. In fact, some of the bloodiest fights I have been in have been bar fights.(")
and there is a scene with a wall of text, please make some space and paragraph coz wall of text will usually threw off some reader (including me that is). this is the part where the wall of text was :