The Galactic Monarchy (WIP) [2017-02-18]

UPDATED: I changed the game!

EDIT: I missed any important things. Now you can play!

What? What does that even mean?

And what do you mean?

If you mean ā€œmissing any important thingsā€, so I forgot to add the codes.

Or if you mean ā€œNo updates, no feedbackā€, so nobody gives any feedback to me.

Setting skills based on races or parents seems dumb.
Id rather suggest doing it throught short childhood sequence IMHO

You seriously need to have one of more experienced writers to go throught your game. You have a load of things that i think arent lets just say very good. I dont want to depress you its just. This is your first time writing anything right ?
Also why you speaking in third person

I try to write about the childhood, thanks you for your tips.

No, I released my stories in the net. It is not my first game either. Like I wrote, I am very bad in grammars, so I need help.

Hmm? What?

Heā€™s talking in ā€œthird personā€ because English isnā€™t his main language and he is learning.

Also Jacob, I could help you with Grammar and editing.

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Yes, please! I really need your help!

Will I paste the text or send my e-mail in your message?

Just send me what you think needs to be fixed with Grammar.

Iā€™ll PM you my email, if you want just send some text and Iā€™ll fix it up as best I can.

Grammar is not a proper noun. It should be written in lowercase.

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