it has been almost 4 months since I updated this, but once I have access to the files(I’m not at my laptop at the moment, I update what I have, so be on the lockout for it all
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so I updated it, with my redone version for the first part of the game, but I’m at the point that this is how I fell about the game
sorry if this get you a notification Eiwyn, but this is how I kinda fell about, not so much the “lose sight of its better qualities” part yet, but still, so I’m thinking about redoing the beginning again.
for basically anything I write I can never get satisfied with the beginning, just never. so here’s
what I got so far, it sorta a dream sequence/vision and it weirdly written, but its a dream so its supposed to be like that. give me your thoughts on this
I Walk this City
i can't see, I'm am blind, yet i have not be blinded
It is- it must be Pitch Black - the lights are off. yest i can't see the stars.
i could see the stars in the night, my will to see means it is night.
i am blind, the moon is asleep but it is night.
the sun is asleep as well
The balancers are asleep, both at their weakest neither at their strongest
Chaos Reigns tonight.
*page_break
I'm here, in this glass house.
I work here, this is my job
I hear the storm brewing, the thunder rolls, the lightning strikes,
it illuminates, yet i see nothing
but i know now, the protector is dead, the fragility has been exposed. one crack and its all gone
a voice speaks to me.
"you have studied and yearn for so long, everlasting searching for it is at its end.
"Embrace your studies, embrace Perfection"
"Open your eyes and see the Truth"
I'm Resiting, i don't no why but i am, my willpower is faltering
*page_break Resist
"Be Blind No Longer"
With this, my will is out, i can no longer resist
but i see nothing, i hear a loud bang, i fell a pain in my chest, i think i'm falling.
i hear a crack, a shatter, and i know i'm falling.
i fell like i can see, but i think i have been blinded.
these thoughts are unusual, like they're not mine
but this is madness, these thought must be mine
yet i know
they are not
but that can't be, it would be crazy, it would be [i]madness[/i]
these thoughts that must be mine but are not, are the thoughts of madness
[i]my madness[/i]
*page_break I See
I Awake with a Startle, my dream has ended thankfully, i head out the the balcony so i can get fresh air but i look outside and see nothing, just a city, but that isn't normal for New Berlin, its just wrong for their to be nothing happening. i must still be dreaming.
but i see something, something glorious
*choice
#I see ORDER
#I see TRADITION
#I see WORSHIP
#I see COMPROMISE
ORDER = Military Dictatorship/Fascism
TRADITION = Absolute Monarchy
WORSHIP = Theocracy/Cult
COMPROMISE = Democracy/Far-Left/Constitutional Monarchy
tradition or compromise may/will change later but this is what I got so far
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haven’t done much other than what I showed yall but here something I wrote
The Year is 1956, Alan Turning is speaking with Commissioner Mosley about the Invasion of British lands in Normandy. "Commissioner, Our Endeavor for the creation of a 'intelligent' AI, based on what I'm calling Diracian Computation, a idea me and Physicist Paul Dirac have created, we are trying to superimposed quantum mechanics on my Common Computation theory that we have based most military computers on. i wish you to have the government finance it. it will g-g-greatly strengthen our forces"
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so Progress report time,
so far, I have redone Startup.txt, which is the first scene you see and is where I make all the variables and whatnot. that’s at about 3K words or if you want to be specific 3333 words. it has an average playthrough length of 1961 words of just below 2K. it is a lot more in-depth and has far less spelling and grammar mistakes. another big thing is that the nation is changed from the New Order to the German Order, and you no longer lead a unified germany, the first section will be about unifying the nation of germany.
i’m also changing the game title to the Fallen Order.
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