It’s decent, but i think there are too much info dump for a first chapter
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Over exposition and lore dumps are a problem yeah
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Overall this is really great but the part in the sewers where the mc loses controls is really confusing. Are we the entity? Then shouldn’t the vessel giving up give us full control? But the pov character is the vessel so they’re the Main character but in that case the entity comments are kinda unneeded and confusing. Unless we’re both, and it needs some kind of harmony for it to work? Its really unclear so I just spend that last part confused instead of following the story.
My favourite part so far was Gigi she’s awesome and her death was gut wrenching, Felt like it was straight out of an anime. Please please please let her be the secret RO 
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