Ah I see, does this mean there will be less combat scenes, or am I mistaken?
It is hard to say at this point. There will be less fighting in the beginning and more at the end, when the team actually makes it to the tournament they are traveling to.
The text has been expanded to 25 000 words. The link is the same 
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/s/23b56qud7otccdx/The%20Abandoned%20Planet.htm?dl=0
By the way, I am considering changing the title to Spacing Out.
"You wake up and extend your muscles. They still hurt after the extensive training. Your bed is ergonomic and you really appreciate being able to have an afternoon nap after almost dying from over-training earlier today.
You get up and try to ignore the pain here and there, confident that your coach knows what he is doing and you will be alright after you have a few rehab drinks and mineral pills.
The clock reminds you that it is late afternoon. Or kind of. You are on a space ship, so everything related to time is conditional. It is just that the psychologist insists that you keep as close to the schedule you are used to as possible to avoid unnecessary stress.
Several objects attract your attention. Where do you look?
You wake up and extend your muscles. They still hurt after the extensive training. Your bed is ergonomic and you really appreciate being able to have an afternoon nap after almost dying from over-training earlier today.
You get up and try to ignore the pain here and there, confident that your coach knows what he is doing and you will be alright after you have a few rehab drinks and mineral pills.
The clock reminds you that it is late afternoon. Or kind of. You are on a space ship, so everything related to time is conditional. It is just that the psychologist insists that you keep as close to the schedule you are used to as possible to avoid unnecessary stress.
Several objects attract your attention. Where do you look? "
It still has a double start
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Ahem, humen ET is wrong, it should say humanoid ET, because itās a alien.
@SheaMcD, yeah, Iāve been too lazy to check for a newer version of the newer version of the software, especially knowing that if is not something that will affect the final product.
@NukeboomV2, this was my initial reaction too, but human ETs actually are a popular urban legend (or truth, the creative writer in me doesnāt need to know). If you google ātall white aliensā, āNordic aliensā, or āPleiadiansā, you will find a lot of info about them, including beautiful pictures 
I have the rising suspicion that in order to save the tribe of insectoid people, Iām gonna have to bonk their queen.
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I believe that your suspicions are well founded
Well, you would need to play as a male in order to do that. I still havenāt decided what would happen if you try to romance her while playing a female MC.
I can picture the scene. Itās gonna be beautiful.
MC: Time for us to save an entire species team! WITH MY JUNK.
Valk holds her hands over her mouth and blushes
Innovation: Urgh, human biology.
Meatwall: Dammit, Captain why do you always get the fun parts?
Astra frowns in confusion: Iām unsure how your personal unwanted items will be of use in this situation.
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I am happy that you are able to connect with the images of the characters I am trying to create in the minds of the readers. I canāt imagine Valkyrie, Innovation and Meatwall having different reactions.
Astra, however, would be glad that the genetic experiment she undertook by making Queen Shiera a human-insectoid hybrid leads to the desired effect.
I just imagined her getting confused with the MCās choice of words like she does occasionally
Lol, now I get your point 
The work is currently frozen and I am working on another, but I do plan to return to it. Plus, I have a very beautiful cover drawn especially for it. And, when finished, the title would be Spacing Out. https://www.facebook.com/photo.php?fbid=10206945184140099&set=yo.1593303955.2016.www_timeline.&type=3&theater
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The spears of Mars or the mirrors of Venus choice for when you choose your gender it can be confusing (on your dog tag) and I ran into what I think is a bug. After observing everything in your room it wonāt let me choose The ādone with observationsā option. So im stuck at that scene
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Thank you, I really should improve the coding of that situation when I return to that WiP. Best wishes.
I receive two script errors it seems o.o
āintro line 2583: increasing indent not allowed, expected 1 was 2.ā
This happened after asking our dear lady about what threats one gotta expect.
It happened in another ocasion when I asked to see Innovation.
Did not see it being mentioned in the last ten posts, so I thought I should mention it.
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Thank you very much, @Amalia_Schroter. I am currently finishing my other work in progress, Twin Flames, and I will go back to this one after that and look into the issue.
The story is complete, even though it still needs polishing and I have not made up my mind about a couple of mechanics such as the conformist/rebel opposed pair, and how health relates to the red dots / black dots mechanic (it marks key decisions as right or wrong and decides the final battle). But it may be a chance to hear from you, so I am pasting the new link here:
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/s/rbmr3p2h39hlq2c/Spacing%20Out.html?dl=0
Unfortunately, I am not very good at making long games, so it is still a 50-k-word one.
By the way, if you like my works and want to keep in touch with me, you can like my FB authorās page:
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Congratulations!! 
will read this one tomorrow (coz itās already past midnight) 
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Long time no see
Also heres something, this is repeated
You wake up and extend your muscles. They still hurt after the extensive training. Your bed is ergonomic and you really appreciate being able to have an afternoon nap after almost dying from over-training earlier today.
You get up and try to ignore the pain here and there, confident that your coach knows what he is doing and you will be alright after you have a few rehab drinks and mineral pills.
The clock reminds you that it is late afternoon. Or kind of. You are on a space ship, so everything related to time is conditional. It is just that the psychologist insists that you keep as close to the schedule you are used to as possible to avoid unnecessary stress.
Several objects attract your attention. Where do you look?