Thank you! I am in the process of editing right now so I’ll fix that up.
It does seem to work now, yes.
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Great, thank you! The process of writing options that make more sense for a gay (or ace) MC on the jilted route is taking a little longer than I thought. I might have only been able to test it tomorrow. Really appreciate your help.
I’m a bit shocked just how invested I got without realizing it… This is quite good. I’m hoping writing for two different backstory/motivations won’t end up burning you out, since I am very interested to see how this develops. Good luck, I’ll be watching for updates.
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I love your writing and historical setting! I laughed at the reasons for the family’s debt (not only beetles, but cats also 
) and I’m intrigued by Eleanor’s engagement mystery.
I understand that it is only a prologue and that it is a spoiler, but are MC’s and RO’s marriages avoidable? I’m playing as gay male MC and if he or his RO will have to marry some woman inevitably I’d like to know it earlier.
I chose debt origin. When marriage came up one set of choices mixes three things: sexual orientation, atitude to romance and sex and atitude to marriage. So it seems gay MC can only be dutiful and determined to marry, he can’t “be not ready for marriage” or “don’t want to be a cattle on the market” or “run to convent” or “be interested only in sex”, which feels limiting. Oh, and I thought “convent” is for women and “monastery” is for men, maybe I’m mistaken, English is not my native language
Later there was this two choices:
#“I doubt any other will hold a candle to your good looks and grace, my dear.”
#“Your wit and accomplishments will charm anyone within a mile radius,” your mother says simply. “They’ll fall in love with you as soon as you open your mouth.”
Can MC be plain and socially awkward?
Small error: “Catherine Wexford!” your mother snaps. "You will respect - I chose another family name
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Will the ex fiance be an available ro in the future?
Painfully alluring, terrifyingly intriguing. Thank you, that was a very pleasant start. I’m eagerly awaiting the continuation
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Just when I thought I was done with editing XD But you make good points, thank you. I didn’t even consider the MC being plain and awkward (I don’t know why). I’ll have to mull it over as that would include quite a bit of extra writing - but it is a good idea. I think I’ll do it.
As for gay male MC, no, you will never be forced to marry, no worries about that. Really, one of the themes of the story is about deciding between duty and happiness… or choosing a third option.
Not an RO, but possibly something else…
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I have a major weakness for best friend, rivals, and grump with a heart ros. Lol.
Plus, his subtle anger at my fiance and the hug. Yep. This boy is on my radar. Lol
My MC would be chill with marriage if he can find a lesbian lady in need of a ‘husband’.
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I’ve edited and updated to fix problems - attempted to make a gay or ace MC on the jilted route have more understandable reactions - please let me know if it works. I also hopefully fixed mentioned other issues, and added an MC with no special talent or skills for those who are jonesing to be average, lol.
(And I’ve also probably caused more issues with the edit, please let me know if you find mistakes.)
Thank you so much for all your comments and suggestions, I feel really happy that you like the story.
Griffith is ride-or-die. He’s probably the only RO with no red flags (except Iris perhaps). Now I want to hug him lol.
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I really like the premise, really looking forward for updates. I have only played the gambling debts route but I will replay and go through the other option when I can.
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Well then, I call shotgun! We’ll be partners in crime. 
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I’m a sucker for period stories, especially regency, and have already read everything there is multiple times. So you can imagine how happy seeing this new story has made me.
Although it’s only the prologue posted, it does set a nice bit of backstory/family background and begins a few interesting threads that I really want to follow already.
I cannot wait to read more.
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An interesting prologue! I played through twice and enjoyed both origins – although the ruined fortune path has the added conflict of marrying Sharpe’s son if you fail, I liked that the broken betrothal path allows for the MC’s goals to be more open-ended. I did like the broken betrothal path less, however, because it seemed like it was often telling rather than showing – for example, in the ruined fortune path, both the MC and Penelope trade barbs as a way to show their relationship, while in the betrothal path it just states she is a self-appointed rival. Another example would be how we are told multiple times how the MC’s mother isn’t a comforting person.
The introduction of MC’s family and their dialogue was fun to read – I hope the MC will be able to send letters to them – and I liked all the different talents and interests that can form the MC’s characterization. I liked the descriptions of the furniture as well, and how your choice of clothing changes perceptions of the MC, as it helped convey the culture of the setting.
One thing I noticed was the point of view switching. In the ruined fortune path, it starts in first-person, then shifts to second, with first-person lines breaking it up such as with the But right now, I was not thinking of him in very kind terms next button. Or in the broken betrothal path, there’s this line: That’s one of the few powers women have—we are allowed to end engagements, but men are not, and will be heavily shamed if they try.
Looking forward to chapter one!
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Sorry about that. I’ve had a lot of errors with else statements. I’ll go hunt down every if/else statement and fix them.
Edit: I did go through all the if/else statements and fixed those that didn’t have a goto. Hopefully it’ll work now. Please let me know if it doesn’t.
Thank you, I appreciate your thoughtful insights. I do have an issue with sticking to the same tense, think it’s because it’s not my first language. I’ll try to be more mindful of that.
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Will there be other ways to increase the intelligence stat? I don’t like to choose between beauty and intelligence :<
Want both 
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Haha, yes, there will be.
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It’s perfect it just needs to be polished and displayed but I lack in many things so would it be possible to add a cheat mode I sometimes feel useless
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I get it. Sometimes I have days when I put cheat mode on too, it’s nice to feel perfect and invincible sometimes lol.
Right now (in the prologue) your stats don’t really matter, but when I write chapter one I’ll see about adding a cheat mode.
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