Sample choice game

Thank you for the feedback guys, i am relatively new this kind of story writing but i want to try nonetheless. So with that I made a tiny choice game in Notepad with all the notes everyone gave me:

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*title Sample Choice Game "Camp"
*author Mr Suitz
*create mc_malefemale ""
*create muscles 10
*create smarts 10
*create improv 10
Looking out the bus's window, your eyes once again sees nothing but greenary. It seems the camp is 
further deep in the forest than initially thought. With that thought you move your eyes towards 
the other potential campers, glimpsing mostly at people's hair. Everyone appears to be sitting by 
alone, yourself included, your bag taking the empty space next to you. Feeling completetly bored,
you open your bag to check if you have everything for the upcoming two weeks. Your parents made sure 
you packed extra
	#boxers and breifs.
		*set mc_malefemale "male"
		*goto bag
	#panties and bras.
	*set mc_malefemale "female"
		*goto bag
		*label bag
This camping trip will last for some time. You really did not planned this, you parent just 
suddenly told you about this camp at the last second. While checking you belongings you noticed 
you mostly packed
	#sports gear.
		*set muscles +25
		*set improv +15
		*goto contents
	#a lot of protection against nature.
		*set smarts +25
		*set improv +15
		*goto contents
	#everything you think you need for the two weeks.
		*set muscles +15
		*set smarts +15
		*set improv +10
		*goto contents
		*label contents
*if sports gear.
	# Shorts, sneakers, swimsuits, tank tops and about other stuff to aid you in your muscle growth.
	You are a really atheltic person and hope camp will have provide an altenative exercise routine 
	than your daily one back at home. 
*if a lot of protection against naure.
	# Insescts that suck your blood, filthy critters, and you pray at least your bed won't have
	bugs in them. You dread whatever this 'outdoors' may hold. You got bugs spray sweaters and 
	long sleeve shirts for protection, also long pants and some heavy duty boots
*if everything you think you need for the two weeks.
	# You mostly grabbed you think you need for an outdoor adventure. suncreen, bug spray, and a book on surviving the outdoors.

I really bad at this so if you manage to find any errors just tell me. (so i can see what i did wrong)

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Here, my guide should help you get started on getting that actually in a game format.


Is that really a thing that you can use an *if [choice] right after a set of choices and split responses out like that? (using the full choice text the player just chose as a pseudo-variable?)

You need to reset the indents on those labels:

         *goto there
         *goto there
         *goto there
 *label there