Hello guys. I am currently working on a game.
The plot is very simple: you are an alien, you go to the earth with a very simple mission and after quite some time you understand what’s the real purpose of your mission.
That’s enough about the plot.
I want to hear what you think about the game so i uploaded it here. It’s not even at 1/10 of what i plan as a full game.
I am new to writing and will appreciate all of your opinions. I want to know of all the plot holes, all the scripting fails and etc.
Thanks for the attention ! 
And big thanks to @dashingdon for his site!
https://dashingdon.com/play/aaster23/planet-rescue/mygame/
EDIT: 6.6.16
A very big update. I think i managed to fix all there was to be fixed. I improved the story, the atmosphere and the *page_breaks are long gone Hope you enjoy the game for the moment
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It’s good I’m going to go play through it again. Bugs I think there is a i like on the fourth page that needs to be capitalized. Also the girl says does not correction it should be doesn’t. Also on that page again there’s another I that needs to be capitalized I’m so picky. Also the girl says is this some kinf of joke instead of kind. The second sentence confused me for a bit
Also I keep getting a 404 error after we are about to go to the restaurant
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Is there any reason this is gender locked?
There are many spelling errors and “I” and “I’m” are always capitalized.
You should remove a lot of the page brakes and have some text along with the options dialogue. I think about four or so paragraphs per page is a decent page size and is less frustrating than having to click next for each sentence of text.
You could add a neutral option when we meet the human girl and add her apperance so readers can better understand the choice or make it clearer if you are using this as a sexuality determination ; I usually don’t think about how ugly or attractive a person is when I first meet them.
My game ended with the error stated in the post above.
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I agree
(20 character madness)
Thank you very much for the feedback! I am going to fix everything!
@Sovereign2Lilith
You should remove a lot of the page brakes and have some text along with the options dialogue. I think about four or so paragraphs per page is a decent page size and is less frustrating than having to click next for each sentence of text.
About that. When you choice that u are attracted to the girl, you are simply attracted that’s all there is to be said. As i develop the game further there will be more characters and if you want to be a gay you will be free to be a gay.
Is there any reason this is gender locked?
Yes my friend, there is. Further in the plot i will give a reason why the MC is male.
@Xavier_Kirton
Also I keep getting a 404 error after we are about to go to the restaurant
That’s because that’s a test run. I have not made the restaurant dialogue yet.
Once again thank you for your feedbacks! I want to make this game really enjoyable to play !
found a spelling error
"Is this some kinf of a joke?
I also noticed you forgot to place a point between you you in this sentence.
In the small amount of time you spent with scientists who actually noticed you you learned about the space.
I also think that the should be removed before space.
I refused to follow the girl (her fault for disturbing my nice nap), but got an error (line 237; non-existent variable ‘coming’).
I like it, I think it has nice potential.
One thing I wanted to point out or ask is the consistency of the engineer/scientist/soldier part. One question is who would you rather learn from and the one right after that talks about who you would spend your free time with? At first I thought that maybe it was one of those ‘what’s your strongest and second strongest strength’ but the second choice didn’t effect me. Is there a reason for that second choice?
But you also have other areas where you kinda repeat yourself as well.
Thank you for your feedbacks!
The second choice affects you! I tested all of the choices and they affect your Intelligence, Fighting or Handy skills.
Yes they are
Yes actually it’s like it but it gives you small boosts to the stats.
I want to ask you where do i repeat myself and how can i fix it.
I will make daily updates on the game because i really enjoy programming.
I’ll go back through and pm you the spots I saw.
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