I very much enjoyed the writing style. It was very clean and moved the game on without dwelling on things, I always find that that makes the world feel more “real”. I was a little bit surprised at how fast my brother accepted that I’d had a communication with the divine, though. Is that not that surprising in this world or is he particularly open to that kind of thing? He just seemed overly apologetic for waking me up. I feel like he should have almost accused me of being drunk after I told him but then have gotten more serious when he saw that I was serious. But, if this all makes sense in this world then forget I said anything.
The idea of playing a prophet/ess is a really cool approach that I don’t think I’ve really seen before. Do you have any idea how far you’re going to go with that? Is our God going to give us clear messages or are we going to be in effect “interpreting their intent” (i.e. lying to get our way)? Will we get future prophecies and get to decide whether we let them play out or not? There’s a lot of fun stuff you can do with this idea and I’m excited to see where it goes!
I also found a couple of missing words. I’m not as clever as other people on this forum and can’t work a screenshot for the life of me so I just copied the paragraphs and enclosed the missing words in square brackets:
“When [you?] go to the Grove today, you could ask the Grounds-Marshal about Aelius. If He really is from another province, there’s going to be a decent chance that the Grounds-Marshal has heard of Him. We could also take a look inside the Hieratic Library and see if they have any papyri about Aelius.”
As you enter the Grove, you stop to take in the enormous movement of human beings taking [place?] before you. Not only have most of the residents of Arelone come to the Grove, whether paupers or nobles, but so have throngs of peasants from the surrounding countryside. You have heard that for the furthest of them it is an entire day’s trek!