You sure it’s not more like this?
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I chose the poly option in the flashback scene though 
mainly because I’m here for major angst and I can’t decide who’s cuter between the two lmaooo
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How do you pick the poly option? because I didn’t remember ever seeing it
Choose Leith as past lover and on the flashbacks of the feast choose going to a familiar face i think.
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I’ll do a quick response before I type out the update post, sorry for leaving some of you hanging without replies!
@quartz Thank you for your review!
The ability to customize them even though you already “have” is there because of the complexities of gender. Even if you choose for L to be a woman, you can have them bear male genitalia later on, for example.
I already have a solution to this, thanks to @/CC Hill, who helped me set up a coding shortcut for all the verbs and contractions. Now, me remembering to add them correctly when I’m drafting is another thing 
@anon67111821 Oh you grump. There was one, just accessed through the discord! But it doesn’t matter now, as I’m uploading the update to the original link now. Might have a cup of coffee first though.
@Eiwynn , Thank you dearly 
:>
Depends what your hunter does with their body 
A feature, not a bug, surely!
Yeah, work still ate away at my writing time last month, so I couldn’t finish. But it felt so good to finish the update today, on my first day as a full time writer! 
It is definitely you, out of all of them! :>
The poly can be started by:
-choosing to see a familiar face instead of approaching L and your team + choosing the
#"You, me, a glass of something strong... And $!{leith}?" [[i]start polyamorous relationship[/i]]
option in that conversation. Hope that helps!!
Update is incoming. Brace yourselves! 
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IT IS UPDATE TIME! For those of you who missed the dirty draft in the discord, the original play link has now been updated with 35 thousand words sizzling with exposition, and heated rivalry. I’m so excited!
Here’s what’s new:
Before we start, it took some honest critique for something to click for me, plot wise. I have been meandering with the plot, partly because I had no idea what I was even doing, and part because I really wanted to meander around in this new medium.
But, the plot I have planned is very high octane and epic in scale so I don’t want to bore you to death before we get to the good stuff.
So, don’t hunt me for sport when I tell you that (for the time being) I have removed the entire section of RO 101’s. I was so stubborn with shoehorning them in for the better part of a year, leading to writer’s block and utter despair since it just wouldn’t fit; it wasn’t how you were supposed to learn about the RO’s. I have put them aside for now and tweaked Lenas scene once more so that it flows better- I am hemming and hawing over Id’s 101 because that one actually makes sense to have there, plotwise. It might go back in where it was, but I am still thinking about it.
Ok, for real this time though:
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The scenes where you scream and your RO busts down the door Kool-Aid man style are there now.
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A meeting with Oma and a blast from your [origin] past!
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A whole chapter of lies and deceit, but it could literally be anyone lying. Careful who to trust.
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Is that… [REDACTED]?? Surely not.
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Another chapter where you get to choose your weapons and the way the Surge manifests with your hunter.
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Forgot to add. You get revenge on Idren/Ida.
On topic of the surge, the magic in Ouro, it is now a default for all players; you can choose from 4 different classes. The Battlefrenzied Zealot, The Beastmaster, The Etherweaver or The Vox Psion.
I had a terrible time writing the codexes for these classes, so some are partial and others missing, but if you continue you will experience them in actual action-scenes instead, weaponized. Don’t forget to save!
For now, each class comes with its own weapon, but I will add more whenever extra time strikes, or when the draft is done.
I am going to remind you as I remind myself: This draft will get rougher around the edges, a little bit messy, as I am going to try to just draft the whole thing without even looking back. It will make my life so much easier when it comes to figuring out key scenes and motivations. While I wrote quite slowly as I treated OUROBOROS as a hobby, now I am working on it, which means skipping content I cannot think of on the spot just to keep the ball rolling. If you don’t want to read the alpha draft, please wait with reading until the edited twine demo is out. Thank you!!
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Can we have the unicode-hints in the stats or something because sometimes I forget which is which, and the only way right now to re-learn them is to go through 3 different menus
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I the Vox Psion path when i choose to let them sleep or wake them up gently it gives error on them both.
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@hyperbolou found this:
line 436: No selectable options
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@Fenrir1 Thank you so much! I had not done the indentations correctly, and it slipped through testing. It is fixed now!
@Bulk_Biceps Thank you! I don’t know what was throwing that error, but I reformatted those scenes with goto’s instead, and it passed testing (I can’t randomtest anymore because of some variables, so truly, appreciate the help! Let me know if you come across some new bugs.)
@Max_Jones , I will have a look at that!
I wanted to post a feedback request here too–
This update was a bit tricky to write because I still don’t know what information to give and what not to say so that I don’t spoil some reveals later on. So what I wonder is:
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How is your hunter feeling after the update? Are they frustrated by the lack of information (or rather, straight forward truth)?
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Do you feel like they are motivated, or is the information given still too cryptic?
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What do they feel about the RO’ dismissal in talking about Lena if you denied the alliance?
And finally, since I turned the way weapons and magic (surge) works upside down,
- Do you feel like the options suit your hunter? Or is it disorienting that all of a sudden you have a subclass that is pretty op, but hasn’t even been mentioned yet in story?
Thank you if you read the update, or answer these questions, or send me spoils of bug hunts. I appreciate you to the moon and back!!! <3
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@honeylou found another one:
line 439: No selectable options
ok i dont know whats going on but after you fixed the previous issue another one popped up:
lyselin line 425: bad label lys 2
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I squashed them all! I had marked some labels incorrectly, and kept glossing over it while reading. But now 
IT WORKS!
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Since the half-moon sickles are able to transform into a double bladed spear, will the dual-bladed glaive be able to transform into dual swords?
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First off loving the step forward in the story
One thing noticed when it came time to choosing the surge we manifest we acctually get locked into choosing the one yet cant backtrack to see the others unless we restart or load up a save.
Something to be fixed i think lol
This time i decided to play a different mc from what i have been going with a healer mc who is in a relationship with leila and ida. On that note did notice quite abit gender switching between them even though i had it set to being able to romance both genders this playthrough they were both female yet at times it had them being male at times.
To how the hunter feels hmm a bit harder to say at the moment lol they are not very stable mentally right now and never trusted the clergy that hasnt improved at all. As to lena somehow acctually do trust her and bell despite what the others have or have not said about them. An as of the moment can allready see the storm thats going to come from selena when things come to a ahead with them.
There is more i think but going to do more playthrough when i can and respond more for now though work beckons.
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Introductory-scene involving Yor:
Somewhat jarring inconsistency in their thematic, emotional transition. If my belief from the external outset via Tumblr or the character profiles provided influences my understanding of who Yor is supposed to be, as an archetype, then this passage presents a little abruptly in their presentation:
“You were a healer, not an all-knowing god. None of us knew what awaited us in the forest, what still awaits us. You have saved countless of (I think ‘of’ can be removed) lives, as well as your own. Here you are. That is a great feat.” Yor turns to face you, his eyes soft as they peer into yours.
“You are the reason you are here today, not only because of your connection to your team, or your experience as a healer. You are the one that managed to recalibrate your life after the whims of the well, leading your team with you, standing with them. You are the one here today, because of who you are, not because of your past. Your name still rings in these halls, and that means something. What it means will be up to you.”
It seems like the outward look of a commanding and cold character like Yor, who obviously wields a heart of gold within their rather impressive body, when initially introduced is that they are not hostile or unduly demanding, but still they must in some way remain a vague character. The first paragraph would fall in line with the acute pragmatism of a distantly viewed character, or in this case, a known variable who happens to still be a direct stranger to the main character.
The second paragraph operates in tandem with the first then as a rambling emotional reveal; not that it is bad, but it does not resonate with the fact of the matter that the main character had only been recently introduced to them in the scene; and therefore, it seems like only someone un -immersed in the setting from the get-go might it find it a little inconsistent in the way it emotionally rambles, following the first portion. It wrestles with a possible preconceived outlook of someone who plays that passage with external knowledge, whether of the CoG forum, or Tumblr-posted character profiles, as against the normal grate of expectant but pleasantly ignorant players looking for a raw experience absent of spoiler-y precedents. I get it. It is a demo, but this is what I found a little inconsistent in Yor’s introduction.
We don’t know yet that Yor is supposed to have a heart of gold, as a player-character.
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Woo, an update! As I read it, I have to really wonder how you thought all this stuff up, it’s pretty unique. Then again, I suppose such is the nature of imagination and such sometimes, huh?
I can’t even begin to think of where all this could lead yet, and I am hungry for more!
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And for some more spicy scenes.
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I think I had said this before but I want to repeat it - 1) so very interesting world you build, probably the most unique setting I ever see in cog-games and 2) I love Oma so much, every interaction with her is brilliant.
And about update… MC’s battle specialities is so cool? All of them. Need four MCs now. And I somehow missed and didn’t expect that Serpent cleric is A REAL BIG SERPENT-HUMAN MUTANT. It’s so cool and you write it so cool. I kinda hate Vicar but wow she is great.
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From your perspective, the first paragraph aligns with the image of Yor as a commanding and cold character with a hidden heart of fold. It sets up an expectation of a distant and pragmatic personality.
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@anon67111821 Greyed out options are not written yet! (Or you don’t meet a requirement, but those are often pretty obvious)
@endmeleef >:3 All weapons have secondary modes!
@Valixon Thank you so much for your feedback, it is very precious to me. Hearing how your hunter reacts to it all is very helpful in shaping a story with many roleplaying options! I also find it so funny how everyone trusts the vicar and lena differently. HEHE <3
Re: the surge choice, I had issues with it when testing and didn’t want to waste time over it, seeing how we have saves for now. It will be a choice you can backtrack on, though, I have just been focusing on forward writing.
@Lee_Lee and @MR_Moons Hmm, I can see where you are coming from, absolutely! Y is one of those cases where I can’t really categorize them so simply as to just slap an archetype on them and call it a day. I’d like to liken their personality more to someone like Aragorn from LOTR, who isn’t afraid of showing emotion on experiencing empathy but is still very closed off and private. I can agree that their introduction in the informational intro posts needs a brush-up!
For sure. The hardest part is just deciding on an idea and running with it. And not being a coward about it, but letting yourself see just how intricate and strange you can make it!
I’m so happy you enjoyed the update :>
@marrey 
Thank you so much for your kind words, they motivate me like nothing else! :> I love Oma too… She’s precious. There will be plenty more of her!
the exact vibe I was aiming for, glad it worked! 
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