Mommy, We Created a Plot Hole! [Rewrite in Progress]

all-ages-fiction
cross-genre
gender-choice
nonbinary-inclusive

#242

Yup! Hell week is currently in full force right now. And thanks! I’ll need it. :stuck_out_tongue:

And nope, I’ll never abandon this project. I owe it to my younger self.


#243

Hi again! I have at most a week left before the hiatus is over!

I know, I KNOW I’m trying to reduce the amount of variables, and I said I wouldn’t do it, but… while I was replotting, I’m definitely starting to consider the idea of being able to play as your twin again. There’s a “We” in the title, after all.

All of my plotting so far only has the MC’s point of view (POV), so with the rewrite, this would be the best time for me to consider adding this option.

It would be a lot of work, but writing two POVs would open up more possible scenes and character interactions. A POV switch when the day rewinds would be a great time for that to happen, for example.

Your twin won’t just be an NPC that follows you around anymore. They’ll get their own character/stats page, so you’d be able to control your twin’s personality rather than just choosing their general personality.

Ask your twin to do something for you! And then maybe troll your MC back! :smiling_imp:


A few things to consider if I go through with this:

  • The twin will have less customization options than the MC.
    • The twin will always be the opposite sex of the MC. :boy: :girl: This is final.
    • The twin will always have the opposite opinion of the MC towards the parents. At least initially.
    • I currently have no idea about what to do with the twin’s ROs. Or maybe they won’t have any at all.
  • The POV will always be set for a particular scene, IF both of you are together. No choosing between MC and the twin.
  • The MC will naturally have more scenes. It probably won’t be an even 50/50 split. On the other hand, the twin’s choices will likely have more impact.

So, would you be interested in playing as your twin?

  • Yup!
  • It doesn’t really matter to me.
  • Only if I can choose my twin’s gender.
  • Nope, I don’t like multiple POVs.
  • Other (reply with suggestion)

0 voters


#244

I think the idea’s cool, and seeing from your twin’s point of view sounds very interesting. It would also serve as a good way to facilitate back-and-forth between the MC and the twin. However, from the sheer number of variables and variations the main MC already has, reactions and choices for all of those aspects will grow exponentially, and customizing the twin would mean an entirely new character to customize things for, and keeping track of two characters at once might be a bit overwhelming to some people.

I just worry that it will essentially be playing two stories in one or writing two stories in one, especially with the level of customization already offered, and that playing as the twin may be imbalanced, especially if


#245

Well, you know, I like torturing myself.

You have a good point about keeping track of two characters. The twin having less POV time is me trying to tone down the number of stuff to add (is it multiply now? :sweat_smile:), but yeah, I think not committing to it fully wouldn’t work out well. :thinking:

And regarding the twin’s choices, I just meant that their choices would have more immediate impact since you won’t be able to control them as much as the MC. But I can see the concern there.

I think I’ll just have to flesh out the twin more.


#246

Or you know you could ask legit twins for help. Now there’s a suggestion


#247

@Alan_Grajeda Well, I’m not asking for help, I’m only asking for everyone’s opinions about multiple POVs. I’m just considering the idea, not implementing it. :slightly_smiling_face:


So far multiple POVs looks like it’s not worth the effort at all. If only the minority is interested with playing even as the twin, then I think multiple POVs is not the way to go. I’m already struggling to get enough interest as it is.


#248

Hello guys! My break is finally here, so I can finally start writing again. Well, after I sleep for a couple days or so.

I’ll invite everyone who gave me useful feedback to a private thread once I finish the prologue. Then I’ll open up a new public thread once I have the new prologue and maybe Chapter 1 tested.

This will be my NaNoWriMo 2018 project, so wish me luck I don’t get writer’s block again!

I was going to post pictures of the clay sculpture of Wayne and Roselyna I made for my school project, but I think it’s ugly, so yeahhh :sweat_smile:


#249

Hey @Franzinyte how’s the rewrite going?


#250

Nooooo :sob: someone resurrected the thread :sob:


Ehem. I was hoping no one would because I didn’t want to make another Post of Disappointment :tm:. School started again and I have an unholy load this term so at this rate the new demo (up till the end of Chapter 2 plus surprise goodies) most likely won’t be done this year. I don’t want to post just the prologue.

Although I’m kind of glad I did the rewrite now instead of later. Rewriting is much harder to do than writing on an empty page, especially if you’re rewriting a story about someone writing in a diary who can’t think of something to write. …Yup.

On the bright side the plot outline is really taking shape now, so when I finally get out of the Chapter 1 slump I promise progress will be a looot faster. I’ve also made a huge development about Brandon/Beatrice. I’m starting to like their character now but I can’t talk about it yet cuz It’s a minor spoiler. Unless you want me to. :smiling_imp:


TL;DR: I freaking hate Chapter 1. Ughhhhhhhhhhhh. I need hugs. :slightly_frowning_face:


#251

It’s okay, you’ll get there when you get there! Best of luck to you at school and with the rewrite. :slightly_smiling_face:


#252

It will be worth waiting for.

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