Nice 
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Chapter 4 is finally here, just in time for Halloween! 
Keep in mind, this chapter touches upon some pretty dark themes, so proceed at your own discretion.
Aside from chapter four, I also added a few other things:
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A choice determining why your character became a barista at the beginning of the game.
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An option to visit a bookstore during chapter 3.
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An option to ask Noel/le about why they like you. It’s at the beginning of chapter 3 during a conversation with them.
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Yasss, you’ve made my day uploading this!
Can’t wait to fully play through this chapter (and to see the new edits/options in previous chapters)!
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I hope they’ll be to your liking! 
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Summary
Ok, so, during the conversation with Tris in chapter 3, the option of asking her if she would like a different job can disappear without you picking it (and it does if you pick the options in order); not sure if intended. Picking it doesn’t appear to make any other conversation topic unavailable.
Should be “I see you brought a friend”
“The stifling smell of dust and rot” No trip to Paris is complete without some catacomb-ing, I guess.
“You have no idea where you are” Wanna bet?
“Julian” should be “Julia”.
Should be “it has signal”. Also, I’m confused here. We get up, go over to Julia, then go back to Rose, rummage through her clothes, and only THEN do we get rid of the bindings? Feels like they weren’t doing much binding to begin with.
Oh hey, Julia’s in the hospital again. I hear 10 times and you get a coupon.
“where this padlock came from”
Aaaand end… for now!
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Thank you very much! 
Well, only the MC’s hands are tied, right? 
Wow, it took me reading it several times to notice what the problem is! 
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Tysm for this update, I enjoy this wholesome story so so much :)!! While we’re on the topic… what’s gonna happen with “perfect RO” now, are they still an RO??
Edit:
…Is it weird that I’m intrigued???
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Technically not, but there is a way to end up with them (alrhough it’s basically a bad ending )
Not at all!
If you want to check it out, you’ll need to be rescued by Noel/le, then you’ll need to… make a cruel choice…
Also, you’ll need to make sure to kiss the stranger in chapter 3
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Um did the stranger just kill the other love interests?!
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Assuming you achieved Dark Love, then yes… 
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ah i didn’t do that but i did kiss the rest of the cast, & i somehow didn’t expect to be held accountable for it either… although i’m not complaining!! i guess my MC’s poly now xDD
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Okay, a spooky chapter for the Halloween, nice!
I want to see the option with the perfect RO, but the price is too high…
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Wow, this got . . . dark (though considering what time of the year it is, perhaps that’s appropriate!)
The detective killing their spouse, then trying to kill us too. Wow! The more I think about it, the more that actually it totally makes sense that something like this could happen. Someone like Julia sees the Urge as totally romantic (which obviously it is for many people), but doesn’t take into account the amount of harm and broken hearts that it has also caused (many people in seemingly happy relationships then suddenly being abandoned by their partner, trying to find their ‘soulmate’, as happened to Tris). It makes sense that, someone who was already maybe distrustful and a bit unhinged to be begin with, wouldn’t take kindly to the thought that their partner was maybe going to leave them - and would go to extreme lengths.
Also, wow, special props to the detective route in this chapter. I couldn’t bring myself to play through it initially, but (after playing through every other route at least once), I decided to bite the bullet and try it out. Yikes, betraying and getting your best friend killed so that you can get with the detective, who (it is then implied by the ending) kills the other ROs. Super disturbing! Probably one of the creepiest endings I’ve seen in one of these games.
On a more cheery note, I really like the little changes that you implemented in the earlier chapters. Makes the game flow better and feel more organic. Kudos!
Not specific to this chapter, but I do really enjoy your writing style. In particular, the little bits of humour that you inject here and there resonate with me well, often getting a smile or a chuckle from me; I actually had a code-dive earlier, and noticed in the first chapter when you give your name to Julia/n, that if you type the author’s full name, you get a hilarious Easter egg to do with a cat, something which I had to try out for myself when I realised it was there!
Also, just the way you write the the characters differentiates them rather well from each other. Not just obvious major personality differences either, but more subtle things too (that make it clear which character it is, even when physical descriptors aren’t being used). Like, for example, the way Noelle texts us (which I think is rather adorable and endearing, particularly with the way she uses emojis) is rather distinct.
Overall, well done with this chapter! You’ve outdone yourself imo 
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Yeah, I hope it’s not too much of a tonal whiplash – the story is light-hearted overall, but there are some dark parts, with chapter 4 being the darkest by far 
Thank you!
Which changes in particular? (just so that I know what I did right )
That is very encouraging to hear! I sometimes worry that my writing style may be too cheesy for some!
Ah yes! You’ve witnessed my fursona 
I’m glad you think so; making the ROs as distinct as possible was my main goal when it comes to this project!
Thank you very much!
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I don’t see why not mentioning that Noelle caused the Urge would make things confusing for the police.
Either the cops would figure, I would think, that Perfect Stranger blames the Urge for breaking up the marriage, in which case it would make sense (as much as that goes) to blame the MC.
Or the MC could admit that multiple people feel the urge for them, in which case it makes perfect sense that someone who would murder their spouse rather than being left might have a bad reaction to finding their soulmate and discovering they are a harem protagonist.
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I figure the stranger’s motive would be harder to understand since they have no connection to the MC besides the Urge
The police would probably not believe that though since there aren’t any other known cases of the Urge leading different people to the same person
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Well, I certainly enjoyed when we got to ask Noelle why she likes us, because it seemed to me like a very natural follow-up question (that wasn’t there before). Making what she says to us based on our stats is a neat touch (I love that you took my advice ), as it adds a more personal element based on how our MC is as a person.
I was wondering though if maybe you could adjust the stat requirements ever so slightly? 75, for example, seems to be a tiny bit high imo (I tried deliberately playing as someone rational just now, and even I could only get the stat up to 72 before the conversation with Noelle). Maybe reduce/increase the relevant checks by, say, 5? So that it’s 70/30 (that way someone playing is more likely to get the relevant unique dialogue if they’re trying to roleplay in a certain way).
I think having the question at the beginning of why we became a barista is good too for roleplaying purposes, because it prompts us to think about our MC’s background and how they got into their line of work in the first place.
Getting to go a book shop was fun too, as that’s certainly the kind of thing I love to do when I’m out and about (I found the descriptions you gave the different genres of books to be hilarious 
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Oh no need to worry about that on my end - I live for the cheese!
Also, completely unrelated to what we’re talking about, but I only just realised why the coffee chain is called ‘Spacedeer’, and I feel so dumb for not noticing sooner
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Well to be fair, calling it moondeer would have been more blatant.
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Yeah, that’s something I’ll need to fix for sure
That’s reassuring!
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I mean, sure, but ‘Spacedeer’ isn’t exactly subtle anyway
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