Tysm for comorehnsive reply. Re the banter comment. Basically i just mean fialogue options so we can play the smartass/slightly unhinged. Like we can go with V’s insane schticks/make it worse(although V does not give us a choice when its about to pop off/they’ve got a plan). Or maybe with Gregory’s more sdry humour (idk if that’s what you were going for but he gave me that vibe). But making jokes/innuendos in front of Jinwa sounds a way to speedrun life 
I very much doubt that we’re valuable enough to mouth off in front of him without getting deleted.
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Damn, I can’t believe I didn’t add that stat and added so many useless ones I actually wanted to make a less serious, “I’m unhinged” MC personality but I kinda thought “This isn’t the book for it” So I let go of it but I will be adding that for Gregory, Vale and Jinwa! (Tough, yes, we are not valuable enough to mouth off in front of him without getting eviscerated XD)
Update time!
This week was pretty uhh… interesting lol. It was mostly fixing coding, testing, fixing coding again, realising I didn’t like the way things looked, then doing it all over again XD
Goals I completed from the last week
Changed a lot of relationship stats to Friends stats all the way to chapter 3.5 (5 chapters left which will be done in 1-2 days)
Added a small description of what each stat indicator does.
Put in Stat indicator for other stats. (5 chapters left which will be done in 1-2 days)
Additional things I did.
Edited chapter 3.2 and removed around 3K words from it. Making it go from 21K to 18K
Added a few more stats in the recent chapters.
Added 1-2K words around the book since I realized that a few were missing the shyness options and confidence options and harshness options.
Things not added
Failed to add Love at first sight for Blaine.
Not gonna lie, I’m still debating on whether I should add this or not since it’s going to change quite a lot of things and I’m afraid it might look out of place.
Goals for the next week.
Finish up adding all the stats.
Finish up changing the relationship stats to editing stats.
Go for a test run and go back to editing chapter 2.2.
Add an option for additional banger between Vale, and Gregory. Add an option to say something in front of Jinwa.
Edit and rewrite at least 15K words.
That’s it for this week, have a great week you guys! Take care!!
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Okay! Another week, another Monday!
This week was kinda slow not gonna lie. I tried to accomplish all the goals but work kinda turned me upside down, BUT I did progress!
Goals completed:
Finished up adding all the stats.
Changed the Relationship stats to Friendship Stats.
Went for a test run and everything was fine.
Edited 2K words from Chapter 4, then realized I should be editing chapter 2.2 and edited around 3.2K words. (A total of 5 something thousand words)
Deleted around 2K words and added 1K words.
Goals not able to complete:
Edit and rewrite at least 15K words.
Add banter options between Vale, Greg and saying something in front of Jinwa.
Adding Love at first sight for Blaine. (I have instead added M_D Which means that Blaine will be more dominant based on the choices you make and will be more bolder.)
Goals for next week:
Add all the goals that were unfinished from previous week.
Rewrite at least 15K words (Highly unlikely but Imma push myself)
Again, words can’t describe how much I appreciate you guys for supporting me and I hope you all have a lovely week!
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@Silly_Cat_69
Great update!
Glitches
female MC
Summary
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I didn’t know why I was sent there honestly. Once she used the pendant, he took everything out before I had the chance to even get into the fight, not that I would be any use.
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You looked at the figure of Marcus standing nervously by your bedside, cheeks flushed and smiling sheepishly.
" What you doing there buddy?" You asked cautiously. -
What was up with him and his dramatical pauses?
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He gently pressing his nose against yours, giving you an eskimo kiss. “Patience,”
More to come
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question: is there a reason we don’t get relationship points with marcus if we like them buy r shy like in ch2when m invites us to lunch and if we confirm while blushing
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Yes! The reason why is because I’m dumb and stupid however! I fixed that <3
Fixed the rest! Thank you so, SO much! 
Update time!
Okay, so this week was more productive then the last. However I’m focusing more on rewriting then adding additional work for myself. This way, I can focus more on continuing the story and adding to the story later.
Things still needing to be added:
Love at first sight (I’ll add this in the future but not rn)
Add Banter Options. (This will be added upon the completion of the rewrite.)
Goals completed:
Rewrote atleast 8K words.
Deleted at least 4K+ words.
Added at least 2K+ words.
Book is now at 25K words (Original starting point was 31K words)
Which means I only have 10K words to rewrite. I’m going to try and finish that up here and now.
My main focus has been eliminating MC’s personal dialogue that would usually either be
A) Rude
B) Useless
C) Is information that can be revealed in other ways.
Ofc, to compensate, I’m adding more options for the readers to react the way they want, which, not only increases the stat, but also adds more flavor to the text if the opposing stat is higher.
Goals to be completed next week:
Finish up chapter 2 and move onto chapter 3.
I kinda got lost in chapter 4, and by that I mean I was so surprised that I wrote it cause of how good it was, so I’ve decided that the rewriting will stop at chapter 3, and then I’ll move onto chapter 5.2! Thanks again for all the support you guys!!
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Yay! You’re so fast! Go u! 
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I’m confused… when we first get to the school and we’re getting food someone says vampire and we say yes however until that point it doesn’t seem like we actually knew that like there’s only one bit of text that’s to do with blood and stuff but your MC didn’t understand any of it and no text said anything about us being told why we felt that way or anything to do with supernatural stuff.
Yeah like until that point it the text reads in a way that says the MC knows they and Alex aren’t normal kids but MC doesn’t know how.
Also why does the MC sometimes have a heartbeat then other times they don’t and why is it that the MC doesn’t know that vampires need a lot of blood to stay strong like you would have thought they would have learned that in a class by now or something as the MC has been going on missions for years which as a lot of fighting. 
Oh and another thing our age doesn’t change in the stat screen… and in the relationships tab instead of saying relationship with Alex it says Rel_H and when looking what’s in your inventory it doesn’t go to a new page instead the text shows up above where your MC name is in the stats.
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Uhh… Are you implying that you didn’t realize that the MC doesn’t know they’re a Vampire?
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Yeah, that’s kinda why chapter 2.2 went from 31K to 25K words because unnecessary things like MC’s heart suddenly beating out of nowhere. (Back when I started, I was debating on making Vampires just superpowered beings but since they needed blood to get stronger, they’re Vamps but I discarded that Idea.)
Which text? It’s kinda established early on that the MC knows that they’re a Vampire. (Line from the book:) She remembered the moment she and Nathan told Adrian that he was a vampire. This is in chapter 1.
No one knows this actually. Vampires have been living on the least amount of blood, enough to make them not turn into ravaging beasts from hunger, for so long that the concept of getting too much blood makes them stronger, is lost on them. Any one who drinks more then a few vials of blood is immediately put down or forced into therapy (Which is so rare that it’s not mentioned in the book lmao). Oh, and the stronger they are, the more attention they take towards them. (Church of Solathis have means of finding out Vampires who are strong enough to be categorized into Apex level threats. Vigil makes sure no Vampire can get to that state. The only reason why the MC hasn’t been found out is because of John/Elizabeth and the Pendant they wear. This is established in chapter 2. ) Also from the Book: He fished under the desk and took out an iron pocket watch, then handed it over to Marcus. “This is a family hair-loom, though it’s much more than that. It counteracts any enchantments meant to find supernatural creatures and also allows you to evade guardians and other supernatural hunters hiding in public. It’s not exactly as powerful as Adrian’s pendant but it does its job which is camouflaging you as a human.”
It will be mentioned later on in the future though at the side-effects of consuming too much blood though. But for now, it’s only in the later chapters that it’s revealed that Blood = More Power.
Yeah, that’s cause I edited that in chapter 1 and haven’t updated chapter 2.2 where the age is set. I’ll put that back in chapter 2.1, Thank for pointing it out! I also fixed the stat with Rel_H (Mostly cause instead of Relationship, it’s friendship and then relationship as well now). Thanks for pointing out on the Inventory page though, will be fixing that <3
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Read it for an hour and already loving it! I’m a sucker when it come to character focus, and I LOVE CHARACTERS!!! Reached chapt 2 and prolly will finish the WIP when I have more free time. Keep up the good work because I surely will wait for more stuff to read 
Anyways, not sure if you wanted feedback on typos nor error, but I do find some thingy that ick me a bit. Here they are:
Repeat/error.
“Promised”.
I think “Theirself” would be better here. Unless the “himself” indicating a specific person Vigil know about, but I don’t think it’d fit well no?
Repeated.
I also found one that says “savior” instead of “savor”, where savor is more appropriate for the said context. I forgot to screenshot it unfortunately, soooo hope you can find it 
And that’s it! My english is not that good itself so I understand if there’s multiple errors (hell there’s probably one error in my own reply). I’ll say more things later when I kinda have the time to. Have a nice day 
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Yep! I love feedbacks, both on the story and the typos/errors!
Fixed all those that you pointed out, and your English is incredible! Thanks a lot againnn! <3 (Also I did find the Savior one haha, thanks )
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Questions is Vale romanceable or certain creatia too romance him he has turned down both my male and female ro is that just part of his character?
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Vale is romanceable, and he only turns down characters who are only non-binary/trans/gay (He will accept them but there will be an entire arc for that dw) But yeah, you should be able to romance him.
(Also I’ll post the update tomorrow, sorry you guys >.<)
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Update time
Ooookay, the last week was just hectic and busy, doesn’t mean I didn’t get any work done, but I did get some work done.
Around 12K words were rewritten. The chapter went from 31K to 21K which is a massive 16K+ words that were deleted. (Cause I added around 4-5K words. MC is not rude or doesn’t go off with their monologues any more and a lot of the choices will give the readers to choose what to do.)
Massive MASSIVE thanks to @BabyBunny for helping me out so much!
That’s pretty much it. I just have to add a few options to the kissing scene and rewrite around 3K more words before releasing it for Patreon and then releasing it for the public a week later. I’d say the release date will be 28-30 for Patreoners and 6 for public.
After this it’s chapter 3 and then I won’t do any more rewrites until the book is finished. I feel like it’s as polished as it needs to be for a beta book and too much rewrites is not going to let me go with what I want to do.
That’s pretty much it! Hope you guys have an increadible week!!
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