I like that you’ve included some thoughtful question prompts, and am looking forward to chewing on them and sharing! But for now, here are some things I’ve noticed that are less introspective 
Bugs/Typos/Thoughts
The red-headed woman thought to herself. [Natasha is blonde?]
Sure, it was hard to deal with ${hhim} from time to time, but overall, ${pc_name} was fun to be around. [should be ${pc_his} instead of haye’s pronouns]
"Focus on both attack and defence [defense]
And then ${hhis} eyes fluttered open lazily and ${bname} froze in panic.
[should be pc’s pronouns instead of haye’s]
“Of course, it won’t,” You scoffed. “You’ve had my back for nine years. I won’t let anything like this come between us.” [wait what??? i thought MC and Blaine haven’t known each other for that long??? MC is 18, so they’d have to have met at 9]
${bhis} face in ${bhis} hands, then peeked from between her fingers [forgot to make that her a ${bhis}]
Flaky croissants, gooey cinnamon rolls and macarons. [just a suggestion, but “colorful macarons” to continue the adj noun pattern.]
by the friendly smile of a female cashier [I feel like the “female” part is unnecessary; it made me pause while reading to consider the implications, interrupting the flow.]
I felt my cheeks grow warm and fed him. ⇑♥/⇓60 [not sure what the 60 is?]
I mean, look at me," she slowly turned around as if showing off himself. ${Vhe} slowly turned around as if showing off ${bhim}self [used b’s pronouns instead of v’s here]
$!{Vhe} pulled ${Vhis} hands back and punched the wall, hard enough that his arm sank all the way to the elbow. [missed putting v’s pronouns there instead of “his”]
Vivian cleared his throat awkwardly. ${vname} cleared ${bhis} throat awkwardly. [using b’s pronouns instead of v’s]
partitioned by curtains. Th [extra th in an odd place]
I didn’t like him at all. [j’s pronouns should be her here for me, looking at the code *set Jhim "him" should be “her”]
Living with your parents, you often suspected they had mixed blood into your food, which explained why your hunger never felt satisfied.
Throughout the years of living with your parents, you suspected they added a few drops in your food to keep you from starving. It explained why you were always hungry for something more. [worded differently, but both sentences convey the same thing, so it feels like an oversight to have the repetition?]
$!{PC_name} has been tugged left and right like a rope in a tug of war. [I chose to use a fake name for infiltration]
Gregory glared at the doctor. "A week? Did you not see his fighting skills? She’s better than our veterans "A week? Did you not see ${pcb_his} fighting skills? [my pcb should be her, but it’s coded as “his”]
Especially after the test you just went through, ${pc_name}." [also should be fake name here]
HOWEVER I did try my best and was able to rewrite almost 13K words! Unfortunately it’s not only the rewrite that I have to write but also the skipped parts, and part where 
) John/Elizabeth’s issues have also been fixed!
Unfortunately I can’t pay for patreon but I’ll wait patiently. I already miss my cutie M. 
(Fixed it, sorry