Lasting Creations

I really enjoyed the demo, and from what I see the lore is very interesting (and Marcelle too :eyes:). I’m curious to see where this will lead!

Some errors that I found:

3 instances where you forgot $!{sister}:

And 1 where you forgot $!{brother}:

Also, when the choice to react to Evander’s touch appears there’s not a previous mention of that happening.

1 Like

Thank you for catching these! I really needed someone else’s fresh eyes for this. :joy_cat:

Also, when the choice to react to Evander’s touch appears there’s not a previous mention of that happening.

Hmm, I’m not sure what do you mean?

1 Like

This one, I didn’t remember him touching MC before in the text:

If you’re using Windows, Notepad++ would be great to use. Writing the scenes with the original names and then using Ctrl+F to find all the instances and change them for $!{mother/father/sister/brother} would make your life easier.

Ah, this is to him taking the MC by the shoulders, right before his dialogue line.

If you’re using Windows, Notepad++ would be great to use. Writing the scenes with the original names and then using Ctrl+F to find all the instances and change them for $!{mother/father/sister/brother} would make your life easier.

I should’ve done that from the start. Too much fiasco in one chapter for me. I’ll do that from now on, thank you!

1 Like

Such a unique concept! I love the way you describe body language and the MC’s thought process and emotions, there’s so much emotional depth in this. I also really like the different ways you can feel about the brother, my MC’s thoughts rn are “I love him but I Do Not trust him” and I’m excited to see how their relationship develops. Lots to look forward to here, will definitely be watching this one!

2 Likes

Thank you (and everyone else who I haven’t thanked) for reading and commenting. :yellow_heart: And I’m glad you like the relationship choices.

3 Likes

Chapter 2 is up!

With the exception of two branches. I wanted to update at the end of the month, but I finished everything I needed sooner than I thought I would, so here we are.

I’m still setting the stage. 1-2 more chapters, and all the ROs will be introduced.

  • Meet two new characters, one of them is a RO.
  • Spend some time with people you already know. (Only the path with the MC’s brother is published, for now.)
  • Customize your MC (I hope to add more options for details in the future).
  • Find interesting things in unexpected places and get more questions without answers.
  • I plan to add some codex entries by the time the full chapter is up. :fist:t2:
21 Likes

I like what you have so far quite a lot, so I will definitely be keeping an eye on this in the future!

It is refreshing to see a romance game skew towards offering female ROs compared to male ROs. Usually romance IF games decide that they can include fewer women because they have one (1) non-binary option, so this was a really nice change of pace.

Doing your character creation through your sister’s painting, was a fun and emotionally painful way to do it.

My only note so far is here:

"…I might believe in you, but not in them.” This part was confusing to me when we can pick an option earlier where we say we don’t believe in Evander and do not trust him.

3 Likes

I’m so curious about the Creation at the end of the chapter.

It made me think to the old blanck and white film Nosferatu.

I wanted to go see if it was dead or alive but there was not the option. I’ll guess we’ll see in the next chapter ~.

1 Like

There’s a part in the second chapter which is being repeated twice. It’s before and after I chose to tell Evander to take paintings anywhere I think. Along this part of the chapter. The highlighted part is being repeated.

1 Like

I’m glad you think so. :smirk:

I changed this part a bit to reflect the previous choice with trust/no trust.

This is a good idea, even if not a safe one, and I can imagine some people would want to do that despite the risks. I’ll add it to my list of the choices to include. :ok_hand:t2: I want to push forward with chapters for now, but I’ll be revising everything and adding some things later.

I fixed these parts, it should be working as intended now.

Thank you everyone for catching these things! :yellow_heart:

3 Likes

I enjoyed getting to spend more time with Evander, they’re more of a little shit than expected (in the most endearing way possible ofc :joy:) The introduction of Acin was also so good, I love how slightly predatory they come off as, I’m very interested in learning more about them and their clan :eyes:

Overall the whole vibe of the update was very moody and unsettling with the rain and all the mysteries unfolding, I love it! Looking forward to the next update :blush:
Also someone already said it but I wanted to give an extra kudos for making the character creation section into something that gave us more background info and was also very emotional

2 Likes

I’m glad to hear I’m managing to convey the mood and Brother’s and Acin’s characters as I planned it to, and that you’re enjoying it. Thank you so much! :relieved::yellow_heart:

1 Like

The second chapter is finished. Besides Fletcher’s and Marcelle’s branches, I added some entries into the lore codex. :fist:t2: I hope everything works as it should; coding is killing me a bit.

10 Likes

No problems on my part. I feel for u, coding is a pain.
I loved Acin, very interesting character.

Also siblings!!! I love a good sibling dynamic. I am looking forward to more.

1 Like

I’m glad you like them!
Thank you. :yellow_heart:

Interesting.

I gotta say, with that kind of premise, I was half-expecting one of the ROs to be a “Pygmalion and Galatea” type romance.

1 Like

HmMMMMmMM There are some layers to animating people, and the MC won’t be a second Pygmalion. I’ll keep my silence about everything else. :new_moon_with_face:

Really like the world building and the characters that have been introduced so far also really like your writing style.

3 Likes

Thank you for reading and commenting; I’m glad to hear you like it. :yellow_heart:

4 Likes