Decided to give this game a try as you’re right, there aren’t a lot of sports IFs out there so I thought this would be interesting and it didn’t disappoint — just a few notes.
I wasn’t expecting passing the ball to a teammate on the first page to increase the leadership stat, but I guess that makes sense because you’re putting the team first to win the game — so that was a cool touch.
Maybe a suggestion to change the scene where your name in inputted. Having your best friend randomly calling you James seems a bit off, so it could be something like — ‘you find a message that reads happy birthday with a load of emojis next to your name.’ Then have the name option — something of that effect.
I think there could be a lot more customisation for the MC. Like when they’re throwing clothes on, there could be options for various styles of clothing so the reader can imagine their character more.
Also wasn’t expecting the coach to be so young for a high school story.
Overall, this demo has a lot of dialogue and I’m a firm fan of dialogue; but I think there could be a lot more description added. For example, the settings, the expressions on the characters’ faces, how each action is done, even descriptions of the other athletes that were sent away when Ben & the MC were left with the coach etc. instead of being in one place and then just getting sent to another.
Also couldn’t continue the game because I came across this bug:
I’ll get that bug fixed tonight, one of the reasons updates have slowed down is because I’m working on improving the immersion with descriptions. They aren’t done quite yet, but I promise they’re coming.
*goto_scene lost
*if Coach=5
“You let him win. You had no reason to, he clearly wouldn’t do the same for you. So, why?”
Since the commands are executed in order, the text always jumps to the “lost” scene regardless of the coach’s approval and the “you let him win” dialogue is impossible to get.
Shoves the other team while their not looking. Also I was wondering if we could have a foreign background with our player. I just watched Hustle on Netlflix and it was awesome.
To get to the spot where you can blur text when typing to some one there is a gear symbol on the top right of the message box click it and it should give you the option and then just click inside the highlighted section and start typing. Just don’t mess with the boxes to ether side.
If you decide not to injure Ben with the option “No, I won’t do it” he wins, but in the next scene you’re the one who joined the team. I guess it’s supposed to go to “lost” instead of “gameone”.
The coach accepted both me and Ben in the team after I told her I lost on purpose because “He’s my friend”, but in the next scene he is not in the team (Ben had 55 approval).
In the gameone scene you manage to score if shooting<9, shouldn’t it be shooting>9 instead?
I appreciate the support, but keep your cash. Whether I make millions or not a dime this is a game that needs to get made. It ain’t about the cash, it’s about making something special.
I respect that just want u to know I support you in you endeavors and on creating a good ball story for the people to enjoy this a good jawn can’t wait till it’s a finish product and on future updates
Thanks for the big report, all 3 will be fixed in tonight’s update. It’s usually pretty late at night when I code so I make small mistakes that cause stuff like that
— just a few notes.
