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In an age where stars dimmed and hope waned, a legend was born from the pages of history. Eight hundred years ago, as humanity teetered on the brink of despair, Victor Loredan I, hailed as the Astral Savior, emerged. With the valiant Knights of Evallon at his side, he united a fractured world under the banner of the newly-founded Kingdom of Evallon. His ascension to the Mountain of the Gods, where he harnessed the elusive power of the Crystal of Eternity, is a tale of sacrifice and salvation, one that reignited the dying stars. But this story of triumph is shadowed by a betrayal most profound - the treachery of the Dark One, a figure whose actions forever tainted the skies with crimson.
So says the Holy Scripture of the Church of the Stars and the history books of the Empire of Evallon.
Fast forward to the present day - the once-noble Empire of Evallon has devolved into a relentless conquering force. Gralea, a steadfast nation clinging to its independence, stands as one of the final resistors against Evallon’s overwhelming might. Amidst this backdrop of encroaching tyranny, you are an elite operative of SIN, a covert group of assassins committed to preserving Gralea’s sovereignty and the ideals of its Socialist Republic. Driven by a deep-seated vendetta against Evallon, you leap at the chance to infiltrate the empire and dismantle it from within.
But as you delve into the heart of enemy territory, the black-and-white narratives begin to blur. The imperialist dystopia painted by your homeland contrasts starkly with the complexities you witness within Evallon’s borders. Similarly, Gralea, once thought to be a bastion of righteousness, reveals cracks in its utopian façade. Your journey becomes one of unraveling truths and challenging long-held beliefs.
Amidst this intricate web of political intrigue and moral ambiguity, an ominous sign reemerges - the stars are dimming once again, echoing an ancient prophecy and heralding the stirrings of dark, forgotten forces. As history seems poised to repeat its darkest chapter, the line between myth and reality blurs.
What the history books say and what truth lies beneath remain questions that only your journey can answer. In a tale shrouded in mystery, where allegiances are uncertain and the past is a puzzle, your choices stand to either illuminate the world or plunge it into darkness. Will you uncover the truth behind the Astral Savior, the Dark One, and the dying stars, or will history’s shadows obscure the path to enlightenment? The fate of Terra, once more, hangs in the balance.
Changes
The following features have been removed as I don’t enjoy writing them.
Polyamory, blackmailing and threatening a child.
Since I revealed how the story ended, I had to make some changes to the plot and the backstory. It took me the better part of an year to come with something else that fit with the setting, so I think it’s better than what I had before. However, I’m obviously biased so I will leave that judgement to you.
One recurring complaint from the last version was that the Dark Lord, i.e. MC’s past incarnation, died too easily. So, I have made the whole prologue about the past incarnation of the MC. Plus, I think getting to know Victor Loredan, the founder king of Evallon, will give a certain gravitas to the MC’s interaction with his descendant Princess Amelia.
That’s all for now…I think. If I remember anything else, I’ll make the edits.
By the way, the girl who “caused all the hoopla”, I’m married to her now. Have been for two months.
Romances
Character Profile: Princess Amelia Maria Loredan
Gender: Female
Hair Color: Platinum
Eye Color: Violet
Complexion: Fair
Description:
Princess Amelia Maria Loredan, the silver-haired, violet-eyed beauty of Evallon, seems as though she has stepped right out of an ancient painting. With a demure, gentle demeanor, and an enchanting charm, she is affectionately known as Evallon’s sweetheart. Her extensive charitable work extends beyond the borders of her kingdom, earning her admiration and love from both her subjects and foreigners.
Background:
Tragedy struck Amelia early in life when an accident claimed the life of her beloved brother. The same misfortune that took him from her also dimmed the light in her eyes. However, this personal setback never dampened her spirit or her resolve to make a difference in the world.
Character Profile: Count Leone Silas Sinclair / Knight of Leo
Gender: Male
Hair Color: Golden
Eye Color: Blue
Complexion: Fair
Description:
Count Leone Sinclair is the quintessential golden boy. Towering in stature, with striking golden hair and piercing blue eyes, he is the embodiment of the mythical heroes of yore. His presence is commanding, and his chivalrous demeanor captivates those around him.
Background:
Leone’s life has been one of privilege and high expectation. Born into nobility and groomed for greatness, he has always been in the spotlight, his every move watched and weighed by those who see him as the future of their hopes and ambitions.
Character Profile: Inspector Flavia/Flavius Belmont
Gender: Selectable
Hair Color: Brown
Eye Color: Amber
Complexion: Umber
Description:
Inspector Belmont is a figure of authority and determination. Their umber complexion and dark hair form a striking contrast with their captivating amber eyes.
Background:
Inspector Belmont is a renowned member of the Peacekeepers of Evallon, an elite organization that represents a collaborative effort of police forces from around the Empire. They are recognized for their exceptional skills and unwavering commitment to the law.
Character Profile: Yuna/Yuri
Gender: Selectable
Hair Color: Crimson
Eye Color: Emerald Green
Complexion: Fair
Description:
Yuna/Yuri is a figure of formidable presence. Tall, with a commanding posture and an aura of undeniable power, they captivate and intimidate in equal measure. Their emerald green eyes are intense and unyielding, locking onto you with a gaze that is as sharp as it is indomitable. The strands of their flaming crimson hair add to their fierce demeanor, fluttering like fiery wings in the heat of battle.
Background:
Once your childhood friend, Yuna makes an unexpected return into your life.
Looking for feedback on
-Bugs
-Plot holes
-Grammar
-Inconsistencies
Word count (without codes): 59000
Published:
Prologue: Two Lives
Chapter 1: Blood and Iron
