Dude that was evil, i want to know more on this history,also boss is too sus ,negative girl too very sus ,and as someone that live on a tropical and hot country,cold shower on morning are amazing, now a thin rain is terrible every drop of water hit like a cold needle and is worse if you’re with a fever
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Hi guys. Passing here to say I’m still alive and soon I will release an update. Nothing new, just a review with some corrections and polishing.
Thaaaanks. Also, I’m still thinking on that. No promises, butI think I’ll give a dark turn to this IF. Just to add a little more drama.
I will be honest. I have no idea. Mostly because I dont think I’m good writing romances, but I will try anyway. But about the Ros that already appear: We have the boss, which I cannot say much because spoilers, but she is definitely more than she says she is. And we have the “bus driver”. He will be a knight that will appear later after you are reincarnated. How did he appear in the other world though? It’s a mystery. They both will be a part of the “older” Ros. The others will have an age much closer to you MC.
Also, if anyone has tips and/or recommendations for writing romances, I’m all ears.
Hehe. I also live in a tropical country. I just hate cold anyway.
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Hey guys. As promised, full review of the game just uploaded. I read it sentence by sentence, and it just cost me half of the days it did I spent writing it. I also had help from a friend who knows English better than me, so it should be smoother to read now. I added a status page, so it shouldn’t be bugged anymore. The text structure have also be improved ( I did use too much of the “line_break” I don’t even know why. ) And finally, even though I did say I wouldn’t add anything new, I did. The ‘‘sleep’’ route now has a better dream scene, in which I hinted a little at what I plan to write in the future.
That’s it for today. Any bugs or other grammar errors, let me know.
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I hope there is an actual route where you’re just way worse than the original.
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im so curious about the whole plot set up also having older ros as an option is great!!!
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Hi guys, its been a long time. First of all, I’d like to apologize, as I won’t be posting the first chapter just yet. That said, I didn’t come here for no reason; instead, I’ll be posting the interlude between the prologue and Chapter 1.
It takes place from the POV of a character who will be quite important to the plot. And, although it consists mostly of reading, there is an option to make a choice at the end. This will provide a “sneak peek” into what I have in mind for the future of the game.
For the most part, I used this time to try and figure out exactly what I intended to do. I confess that I got carried away and ended up planning something HUGE, that might be very difficult to do it (more information coming soon), and I also used this interlude to play around with it and work on these ideas.
Although I haven’t written Chapter 1 yet, the good news is that now I know what I’m going to do. I might be able to write faster than I originally thought I could.
Besides, I think the interlude turned out really good (much better than the prologue, in my opinion), so I’d suggest giving it a try if I were you. I’ll add an option to skip straight to it, for those who might be interested.
So, that’s it for now. Soon, I’ll be back with more news. Byee.
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i think that’s great actually, i used to write stories on wattpad and used to write the plot on a whim, and that resulted badly, events didn’t add up, i often forgot minor events that were still quite important, planning ahead is one of the best things i did to improve my storywriting.
and wow you became so much better in grammar! did your friend help you or was that just you?
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Ha, I wish. No, I’m still abusing of his good will. But I’m trying to get better my self too. I’m reading more ( or trying ), and I’m using some tips very communly used to improve the prose. Hoppefully one day I will be able to do it alone.
After getting the notification that the pilot was accepted and clicking next a few time when you click the bar that says ouch I got this error prologue line 167: increasing indent not allowed, expected 3 was 4
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Thaanks. I will look into it.
Also, any erros you guys can find, please post here. So I can correct as soon as possible.
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