High School Revenge (WIP) (Chapter 4 OUT, +182k words, Nov 30, 2025)

Just something small with Angela:

Original:

“oh, right, Cecily!”

After that, she goes quiet. You’re just starting to wonder if something went wrong when her name pops up on an incoming call. Huh. Faster this way, at least.

Suggestion: the oh in the first line should be capitalized “Oh.”

Original: “I, um, though giving everyone their own little story would make things interesting.”

Suggestion: I think ‘though’ should be ‘thought’

Original: He reads a few lighthearted quotes about school lunches and drama club mishaps,

but yours never comes up. The moment to unsettle her slips by. Well, there was always the risk he just wouldn’t read it, huh…?

Suggestion: Just a spacing issue after mishaps,

Original: One could be to give some of your lucky peers free VIP tickets to the upcoming Liannah show. You known her, right? Very popular R&B singer.

Suggestion: I think known should be know.

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Guys, how to romance Cecilyn?

Don’t be overt about it, she hates getting hit on because she thinks people are doing it for social cred.

So long as you refrain from it and aren’t hostile (and aren’t doing stupid shit like drinking on school grounds) she can warm up pretty quick. Then talk with her in private before the homecoming and pitch the idea of going together to keep her free from her would-be suitors.

(in theory with high enough relationship you can make even public request work, but this makes Cecily lose trust in MC, so best to avoid it)

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Does interacting with Miss Meatballs with her increase relationship? Or am I just getting scratched by the cat for no reason.

I don’t dig into the game mechanics so I can’t tell if it really changes anything, but at the moment I would say no. However, I see this as the author making up for a long term thing for the story and at some point she won’t.

Perhaps the cat will warm to your presence, and this might rub off on Cecily as well…or drive her jealousy. Heck, I can even see a possible interaction in later weeks where we might go off by ourself and bribe the cat to come to us instead. I mean, if the cat doesn’t go to Cecily first, she won’t like that.

Fsix gave some good advice here. Other things I do is at the party, either help her yell out the frustration or compliment her quick. If this goes off, I always like to hook the ‘pinky’ thing.

If you go to the group outside, they’ll ask ‘what’s up’…choose the ‘sky’ answer to get a laugh from cecily, though this tends to tank the other people.[/spoiler]

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Guys, I swear to god, I vividly remember reading a scene of Haley smoking on the rooftop. but I cannot find it in the game files, am I going crazy, or am I just not looking enough?

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It’s the latter :v

(this is during the initial drawing club event, specifically drawing_event_1 which is stored in file with content for Chapter 3)

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I went code diving after @fsix responded, and uhm. Apparently Haley can have an obsessions stat… I wonder what that means. (Please be a yandere :sob: )

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So true, I like Haley too much to do the punch plan :disappointed_face:

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You might want to put that stuff under a spoiler; not everyone appreciates being told such things out of a blue and without having asked.

As for what it means… at the moment i’m guessing Haley has been stalking the MC for a while now, and she’s started before the MC came to their current school. Perhaps from around the time Isaac re-posted the Creep video as the “blast from the past”? You can discover that she’s got an elaborate painting of MC the way they appear now as the “creep king/queen”, in her private collection.

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MC: after the last plot, ruining everyone’s life

Cecily: things can’t get any worse

Miss Meatballs: Meows as she jumps on MC’s legs

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Just another spacing thing:

Original: He studies you for a few seconds before

gently easing his hand back. “I… don’t think I can. Not yet.”

Suggestion: There is a space after ‘before’

Original: You’ve seen enough. You’re have to be in. The loss doesn’t matter, you were clearly a tier above most rookies.

Suggestion: Change the You’re in the second sentence to You have to be in.

Original: You do your best hit a nice shot that gets you on first base, with the cheer of the crowd following your advance.

Suggestion: I think you should put ‘and’ after ‘your best’

How do you get to see it?

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Is it actually possible to go with Dylan as male mc? I mean he was my first choice and I tried since he was mc’s former best friend and I wanted to reconnect but it seems to be impossible to get really close to him as a boy, so then I just went, like most others, for the main course instead and dated Isaac instead. Edit, is Isaac the only male ro who will go to the homecoming with a male mc? Because I just tried a music focused one and got turned down by Connor and Michael has a girlfriend.

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You get an opportunity to briefly snoop around Isaac’s and Haley’s house if Isaac is your homecoming date and you come to his place after the event. Each location gives you a hint for one of their secrets, though if i’m not mistaken you only get enough time to check one.

No, he won’t ask the male mc out and will turn down any attempts to ask him out (although doing it in private offers a clue to one of his secrets, so you might want to do it anyway) Still, you’d think there would be at least some people with female MC who’d want to give the boy a try, smh.

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I went with Dylan! …mostly because I wanted to see his reaction when you do the livestream commenter plan. Plus he asked :person_shrugging:

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LMAO, Poor Dylan.

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Yes… the FULL stats…

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I think Dylan now, grown up likely a bit more toned and muscular and very fashionable at 17/18 absolutely does with his K-pop star looks, however Dylan at 11 is likely a different story, just as mc was at that age. Although I still think male mc in the present and Isaac might be the hottest guys, annoying but at least to me the Devil wasn’t exaggerating that he is a 10, I also consider my male mc to be one, with Dylan being a 9/9.5 in my mind, with the thing that sets Dylan in the present time apart from my own mc and Isaac for me isn’t looks but that Dylan seems to lack a certain amount of daring and boldness and Michael at 17/18 a solid 8 and then Connor rounding out that shallow, purely looks (and fashion) rated list at 7.5. Yes I know very shallow and objectifying of me but at least fantasy boys can be shamelessly objectified. :winking_face_with_tongue:

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This is not a bug, and sort of a continuity thing with Marcus. If you told him why you are out for revenge, you can get this line at the dance:

Original: “Hell yeah, it is. You don’t even trust me to tell me who you are… But you… like me? I… don’t know how to feel about that…”

Suggestion: Now, when you meet him the first time, and tell him why you want revenge, you don’t exactly give him your name but you do mention the video. I admit, i would think he would look it up later, and find your name. I understand if you don’t, but maybe a different line in the middle of: “You don’t even trust me to tell me who you are” might work better. You could have him say something along the lines of, You already had me with tearing them down…and then the rest of the sentence.

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