Heavens’ Revolution: A Lion Among the Cypress (WIP)

I appreciate the feedback! I do think there’s an opportunity for me to make the meaning of these words clearer through context, but I’m reluctant to italicize just the Farsi, as this can create a sense of otherness around these words.

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Ah, you’re totally right. I’ve fixed it in *scene_list. Thank you!

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This game was really fun and well-written! The setting was fascinating, as well as the plotline. I especially liked the character interactions! However, there was an issue with saves. Apparently, I can’t save my progress-whenever I try to, it just says that it’s a bad slot.

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I’m so glad you liked it! I’m sorry the save function didn’t work for you. I’ll look into it tomorrow!

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Which means you’re going to write 20 words instead of a single turban? :stuck_out_tongue_winking_eye:

Okay, the save function should be working again!

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If those twenty words make for a more accurate and immersive experience, then yes. The dulband of my world isn’t exactly the same as a turban, nor is the rusari exactly the same as a hijab. I chose these words deliberately. I want players to imagine a world they’ve never seen before, and I’m drawing specifically on Safavid- and Qajar-era Iran, so I’d rather not use words that might conjure pre-conceived images of a generic West or South Asian setting.

(To be clear, there’s nothing at all wrong with the word turban, but it’s not the word I want to use here.)

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:0 Thanks!

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Hi I found a bug.

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Choosing anyone of these options and pressing next will result in an error. For example

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Whoops! Sorry about that. Should be fixed now.

Looks like you hit the same bug as @K_T. Should be fixed now!

This was a great read, I love your writing style! I find the character interactions really dynamic, especially the family ones.

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Oh my goodness! I’m so glad you enjoyed it!

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So. First, gotta say that I love, love love where this is going. Persian science for the win.

I did feel, though, that when I tried to squeeze more dinars out of Sahar, that shouldn’t have pushed my allegiance revolutionaryward - or maybe not as much as wholeheartedly giving myself to the Legion’s cause. It felt like a much more mercenary choice than it did picking a side.

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Thank you so much for reading! And for the feedback.

I’m currently putting the finishing touches on the next two chapters (life has been incredibly busy) and also addressing a number of issues with the previous chapters. That particular choice is actually at the top of my list!

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I’m really enjoying this game! However, I got stuck at the page where I was going to the Bazaar and had to decide if I would pop in on my aunt and uncle, whether I didn’t need help and money, and whether I didn’t want to be late for my meeting. It just never stopped loading. But I love the plot and characters a lot!

The update has broken the save system. The save slots say Error: Bad Slot - Has smPlugin been included?

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Whoops! Good catch. It was still commented out. Should be working now, but let me know if you run into any other issues.

I’m embarrassed to admit that this was because I failed to upload the kebab shop sub scene file. It should be working now! So glad you’re enjoying it!