yeah still have the same error at the same place…
act_one line 53: Non-existent variable ‘coat’
trying to choose a ‘coat’ lol
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@Illusiveacorn54 @Lying_Arsonist and @E_RedMark
Fixed for reals. . . Old habit from trying to learn js . . . |||orz
You could try using Choicescript IDE if you aren’t already. Makes testing a lot easier.
I am – they made it a lot easier just to get started haha. I think I rushed too much trying to get the first chapter out. I’ll definitely take my time on act two. I appreciate everyone’s patience so much!
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AHHH this story is SSOO goood…
but got error in the way like a goddamn commercial LOLOL
act_one line 394: Invalid expression at char 8, expected NUMBER, STRING, VAR or PARENTHETICAL, was: EQUALITY [=]
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Something cool with CSIDE is the randomtest and quicktest buttons! Both of these features will quickly go through the code and spot any mistakes for you!
It makes bug hunting a lot easier 
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The demo is honestly amazing!
The story is extremely captivating maybe a tad bit rushed in the beginning cause of how it skims the origin story but hey it does adventure a layer of mystery!
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Okay, sorry for the delay! That one’s fixed up!
I’ll definitely give the randomtest and quicktest buttons a go here, thank you @peaches
I’m afraid I’m not super good with technology these days . . . . @_@
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Oh, my 
Reading the prologue made me feel like a magical shoujo girl
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I’m glad to hear that! I’ve always wanted a magical girl game so I set out to make one . . . I’m glad that I’ve succeeded in the prologue!
(Also, addressing @Lying_Arsonist’s earlier comment – I do plan on fleshing out the first battle a bit more, but not yet ^-^;
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@Vashnik Sorry for the trouble! Thanks for letting me know!
Alright, the demo should be a bit steadier now. I’m really sorry for the trouble, thank you for everyone’s patience and kind words!
I’m glad the story is enjoyable and thank you for everyone’s kind words!
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This is like Clamp meets Kingdom Hearts meets Howl’s Moving Castle. 
I like the contrast between the airy, shoujo beginning to the older, bitter MC at the end of the demo. The MC’s names were amusing (I chose Marshe Mallows), as was having them call out their attacks. Of what I’ve seen Iriel is my favorite so far.
Other stuff:
Summary
“No!” the word tears itself from your throat before you realize it, and before Iriel can stop you, you find yourself running forward, pushing past the guy who’d pulled out his phone, “Don’t do this!”
I felt a bit disconnected from the MC here, especially because for this playthrough she was a cry-baby seven-year-old – perhaps put a choice in here with MC’s thoughts for why they run forward, whether it’s out of altruistic motives or because they’re afraid or because they don’t want a monster ruining their vacation, etc.
Lapis knew who she was referring to, and his heart leapt so fiercely that it took every ounce of the last ten year’s carefully harnessed apathy to push it back — and even then the room seemed to spin, just a little, at the edges of his vision.
You.
I would change this “you” to the pronoun of the MC since they aren’t in the scene and it isn’t from their perspective.
Looking forward to seeing more. 
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God, I love this. Iriel is so pure and sweet, they remind me so much of my childhood bunny plushie! This game is like a mix of Bird Box and Sailor Moon and I’m LOVING it. Bookmarked! I also noticed a few typos and I’ll post them later if I have time (it’s late where i live, 2 am to be exact).
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This
Me
Like
A lot
Iriel great
Bookmarkd
Gimme more
Me go play again
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its*
Remove “the” or replace “worse” with “worst”
That doesn’t sound grammatically correct.
You forgot to add space after the comma.
its
Replace “You’d” with “You” or remove “Had”
Awe
This is the stuff I found in the prologue, it’s not much. But I’m getting too sleepy 
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I really like how the MC is kinda jaded due to years of fighting, it’s so cool.
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Love the Dark tone! Really cool!
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This is good. Like…really really good. I don’t even know what else to say…
I am curious, are you planning on including stats? Maybe a stat tracking how dark or light you are, and how that affects the story? Just a thought, though if it doesn’t fit with the story you’re trying to tell, please ignore it.
Anyway. Really really amazing work.
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