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This definitely shouldn’t be a lesson in sign language! I don’t think it would be a good idea to start having characters say things like, “you write whiteboard, you-mind?” It won’t feel natural, it will confuse a lot of readers, and you are practically guaranteed to mess it up if you don’t have a good command of the language.
Still, I’m a big fan of using little details to bring a world to life. If you have characters speaking Japanese, you don’t want to ape Japanese sentence structure in English. However, you might want to include some of the common phrases that crop up in English translations of Japanese media (e.g. “What are you saying?” or “Don’t joke around”).
Finger spelling a name takes time. If you are talking to someone, you aren’t going to say their name. Little details like that can help convey the feel of communicating through sign, and you don’t have to know how to sign. Don’t go crazy with it, but a little effort can go a long way.
If you wind up hand-waving it, you can mention that the MC is using some variant of Signed English, though that does imply that the MC will have difficulty communicating with any other characters in the deaf community.
While I agree that details can make or break something, it is important not to over-focus on the details, you risk missing the forest for the trees.
In this instance the game can safely hand-wave it all as straight up English.
My favourite words ‘happy medium’. Finding the right spot where reality and fluid story telling meet, like lying in half-truths is more convincing that total-bull.
I think I’ll have use more formal writing in terms of sign dialog and limit the amount of words. From what I’ve read so far signing is anchored around ‘efficiency’ getting your message across plainly not alot of flourish. SO I think that’s the route I’ll take.
When it comes time for the MC to interface with a larger group (for example if they get on TV interviews the story for whatever reasons … whistles innocently Like I mentioned powered individuals are the new celebrities,) I’ll be sure to keep these things in mind. (avoids mentioning on the fame route there’ll likely be a superhero fashion show and photoshoots…) oops 
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I actually liked the idea of using ‘ASL-speak’ - it would help set this game apart from anything else, and really make the player feel like they’re playing a mute character. Just writing in English loses that, and makes it easy to forget the MC is mute.
I would agree not to go overboard, though. It doesn’t have to be 100% accurate, but I think it should be different from typical speech.
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Well shit, sorry 
I deleted the post because it was too big, and I posted it about half a second after he said it so I didn’t know
btw… you weren’t wrong about me traveling, just not to China… just… please don’t shoot me down when I get back 
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Already shot down the plane. Wait…did we shoot down the wrong Michael? Sorry, Jordan! Oh, well…he was retired anyways.
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Nnooooooooooooooooooo! That was Michael Keaton!! I was waiting for another Beetle Guise!!
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Gawd-dammit. Too many Michaels in this world.
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Sectrets?
In stats menu…
Thankyou, signed
Emanuel Kravic CEO of KRV Incorportated
Thank you
All employees of KRV be aware that subject First is a high priority resource aswell as hazardous.
as well
To be honest I hadn’t thought that one through completely yet. it was sitting there while I was planning the structure before actually writing things. I MIGHT delete it or change it over to a note book for the infamous and never seen CEO himself (your mention of him just inspired me)
though I wondering what you’re getting at beyond that.
(S)He thinks it’s a typo.
Silent Sarcasm. Behaviour set to Troublemaker
Brood negotiation Behaviour set to Brat
Gentle Smile and apology. Behaviour set to Earnest
What’s with the capitalizations and lowercases in these choices?
Nope the stats menu is like a look into KRV computer console, one that’s ‘watching’ the main character 24/7. Its a myserious organization ooooOOOOOOoooooooOOooo!
Emphasis and self amusement… 
For the stuff in bold it serves as a ‘Notification’
I thought it was a typo since I just started it.
Followed with a mock salute and a quite breathy chuckle. You may not say a word aloud but sarcasm is all in the exaggerations anyway.
"You’ve been reading too much Portis… or have you been reading Prachette this week.” She chuckles at your little show before going about putting away your books.
It wasn’t a big mess. You’ve done worse though your room was kind of scant, a closet with several sets of your plain old whites; all clingy form fitting cotton, long sleeve, short sleeve, shorts, slippers. Then you five tier book case filled to bursting with textbooks, novels and a few embarrassingly old coloring books… those didn’t last long after you decorated the entire room in offensive scribbles of MR Luger picking his nose among other childish designs, ‘no more crayons for First!’. You did something similar after ward in a show of rebellion when you noticed one of your favourite books was missing; painted mural on your wall with a combination of tooth paste soap and hair conditioner; they had to replace the mirror. Not too happy with that, but you got a little extra time outside while it was being cleaned… well outside your room, you can’t remember the last time you were ‘actually’ outside.
Your books were the only escape you had.
Asking or prodding about it got you no-where fast, most just stopped at the simple ‘no’ others told stories about how ‘dangerous’ it was. It was hard to believe them but how could you know your oldest memories where ‘here’; Lab 47.
Who’s chuckling in the first sentence? The second paragraph first sentence should end with a question mark, MR Luger should be Mr.Luger, there should be an a in front of painted, comma after well in the second paragraph, comma after no, comma after them, question mark after know and the semicolon should be replaced with a this : (Sorry forgot the name of it)
Nope, and no worries its vague enough to act as ‘bait’ and not really give anything away. If it continues to throw people off I may do away with the company disclaimer
I’m still hammering out those kinds a mistakes and am almost done. I’ll let you know when I’ve updated the sentence structure stuff. Word only notices grammar and spelling issues not ‘wrong words and bad flow unfortunately’
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Speaking of which the kindly Doctor readied lunch;
Should be a comma after which. Also, after a little while I will not test because I don’t want spoilers when I buy it. In the meantime, I’ll help your story flow better.
A few hide and seek matches he *though you were some wild animal hunting him.
*thought
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You’re nose in a book as usual, the ‘dictionary’ is hardly fun reading but after today’s run in with that loud guard had your curiosity piqued. The definition of the word ‘freak’, he called you that with a sneer… but you didn’t see anything wrong with the word. People are so odd… or is it you?
Your instead of you’re, dash after reading, your curiosity was piqued instead of had your curiosity piqued(You switched tenses from present to past).
The word he called you with a sneer…freak-you don’t see anything wrong with it. People are so odd- or is it just you?
This takes care of all tense switches and sounds more organic and like something a ten year old would say.