No worries on the name change. Wish I’d thought of it, myself.
I played through some more of it, getting a few more chapters in and the typos keep coming up. Commas are used in strange places, like in the middle of words. When being introduced to the group of friends in the dorm room, the list is basically name,thing they do,name,thing they do,name,… No spaces after the commas in that instance. If this is a coding error, then I wonder if it’ll get fixed, or what might have caused it. (I have no idea how Choicescript works, so I can’t help there.)
I fully realize this is not the kind of feedback asked for in most betas, since i keep seeing those requests asking for coding or overall story critiques rather than grammar or spelling. But it felt like something to bring up. There are also cases wherein words are used that make no sense in the context of the sentence. Specific examples are hard to remember, I hardly take notes on this kind of thing when I’m just playing through and happen to notice them, and several sentences make sense, but they seem a bit over-thought or like a different phrasing could be better used to describe what’s going on.
I’m not entirely certain how to critique this without bringing up the previously noted points, nor how to sound polite about them given the lack of tone and depth that limits a text-based communication, but I will say that so far the story is good. It’s got some cool visual descriptions and an interesting idea behind it, but the previous points are making it very difficult for me to enjoy the whole experience.