Old project and broken demo
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cowboys, werewolves AND gay. Iām excited!
uh just letting you know
"Maybe I wouldnāt be this shocked if if it "
you wrote if twice, idk if you want like people posting typos and stuff
Canāt wait for more!
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OH Thank you for pointing it out, that happens sometimes when I lose focus lol. And yeah posting typos is appreciated!
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Supernatural Western, thatās a genre I havenāt seen too often. Looks very interesting so far, though!
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Minor update, I fixed the typo and added some words, the demo is now at 2k words! I also added a quote at the beginning because it felt fitting (ā ~ā ā¾ā āæā ā¾ā )ā ~
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Hey0 everyone, I hope itās ok to ask for a little help ;v; Could anyone tell me their opinion on my pacing? I know the story has just started, but is it moving forward too fast so far? I donāt want it to seem rushed, but lots of filler text isnāt a good thing either 0_0 Iām still figuring out the right amount of words per event
The pacing seems fine, if anything the demo is a little uneventful. Throw in a little bit of skill customization? Iām more put off by the 1st person narration, if Iām being honest, Iād rather choose how MC behaves and what they think.
I donāt intend to criticize your decision to make it m/m exclusive but I want to make sure you know it will affect the IFs popularity (and the amount of feedback youāll receive) and that might be discouraging.
The demo is uneventful because so far itās an introduction; the interesting stuff will happen later. And Iāll try to add more customization choices, but certain things must remain predetermined for loreās sake (like in Fallen Hero for example). The point here is to replace the frequent but meaningless choices with less frequent choices that have a bigger impact on the story.
Iām aware this choice will affect the IFās popularity, but frankly, I donāt really care. I want to write something Iāll enjoy writing, something I can be proud of. M/M is what Iām most interested in and most comfortable writing. Iām okay with asking for feedback if needed instead of getting tons of it if I enjoy what Iām writing C:
I hope this doesnāt sound too negative, I genuinely appreciate the feedback and Iāll keep what you said in mind, so tysm! (ā ļ¼¾ā āā ļ¼¾ā )ā ļ¾ā āŖ /gen
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Oooh~ I like this. Looking forward to updates 
Keep up the good work
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Thank you!
The next update will be pretty soon, I have Fredās convo written (~700 w), I just gotta finish Ericās!
After that youāll meet the other two ROs and Iāll start dividing the story into paths E:<
You might also get some more insight into your characterāsā¦ other side.
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I enjoyed the story so far, our characters paranoid attribute is so relatable because of his other form 
my gosh, this hunter has a lot of silver on him 
(understandably so )
Iām looking forward to the chat between hunter and us
The barman is so suspiciousā¦ 
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UPDATE! 1855 words have been added!
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I like the premise of this game, but is there any chance u will add f MC or nb MC please? If u cant thats okay
From the description, itās meant to be a M/M romance, so itās unlikely
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If itās gay, Iām going to play! lol but Iām seriously intrigued so far. Happy writing/coding!
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M/M Romance, Iām in !
I loved the teaser, how engaging the story is, itās still the begining but there is a definitely a big potential !
I really hope we can meet other ROs soon. And I want to see more reactions from ācommon folkā about MC reapparance.
Plus, guys, readers, tell me, donāt you think Eric looks like the Devil ?
Tell me Iām curious ! ~
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