I mainly made it like that so you will feel more like you grow into a badass later on.
I also think I’ll remove the age choice because I ran into problems with that. For example, I actually had the choice to headbutt him right in the face, but you would be too short if you are 16.
I didn’t add a choice like “None of your problems” because in reality you would probably not see the next day. But I’ll find a way around that. Thanks for the idea.
Of course! It’s not even the full chapter one, it was mostly to meet some characters.
Hey there, Just played the demo and the story looks really interesting! I’ve noticed that your writing is a bit specific, I think it’s better to either cut or shorten/rephrase some of the descriptions/sentences and store them for later use if you wish to. I’ve also noticed you used thru instead of through, While it may be easier to use shortened versions the story won’t really be that appealing to read since it really just applies to “A person’s style of texting/Writing to someone” and some other stuff. Although I think some parts were a bit modern and medieval so it confused me for a while, haha. The kidnapping part also seemed as if it was too acted out, Maybe flesh it out with more emphasis or emotion? That’s all I could come up with as of now, So I shall happily wait for the coming scenes!
This is set around the 1300s. And yes, I’m aware that calisthenics and bodybuilding was invented in the 1800s, I’m still finding a way around that. If there are more things like that, please let me know.
I have a question about this game depending on your species will you have like special abilities like as a werewolf when you shift is it a form like the wolves from twilight or the werewolves from underworld?