Hey everyone. This story, this Blood, this Melody, is my first IF which I’m working on. The main reason I made this thread is to get feedback about what you think of it. It’s still heavily in work in progress, as you will sometimes come across choices with “WIP” on them. And if you’re wondering how much there is in chapter terms, it’s the prologue and the start of chapter one.
Story
“You lead a casual and calm life in a small village at the foot of forest grounds, in a world where magical creatures are lurking from road to road, as well as much further and deeper in the earth than your eyes can see.”
“But your life of such tidiness is soon to take a dark and unforgettable turn once your father takes one step too far, and disappears from every soul with a still-beating heart after walking into the depths of the woods. Without the thought that he might never be able to see sunshine for one last time.”
“But the unease villagers are soon to be greeted with the news that your father has been found in the woods, just laying there calmly in the maple leaves, on the ground, with an arrow straight between his eyes.”
In this nail-biting tale that follows, you’ll be battling with lives edge, at the tip of the blade, in the aim of the arrow, get kidnaped by a demon, get a death wish from a ghost.
On your journey, you’ll be able to fall in love with a shy vampire, a witty elf, a kind werewolf, or charm open the heart of a gorgeous creature in a mask. As well as tame and fight alongside various magical, or non-magical, pets.
Will you find out who murdered your father? Will you get revenge on who did it? Will you save your own Blood and escape being murdered yourself? And most importantly, will you create a bond strong enough and hear the Melody of love?
Features
- Play as a male, female, or non-binary. trans or cis. aromantic, bisexual, gay, lesbian, and straight.
- Play as a vampire, werewolf, elf, phoenix, angel, demon, or simply human.
- Romance up to five different characters.
- Ride a ghost horse risen from the shadows, battle beside a phoenix birthed from the ashes, deafen the forest with a howling wolf, or charm your enemies to their doom with a snake on your wrist.
- Watch an army fall in front of your own eyes. Will you help them, kill the king who send them, or both?
- Get revenge on your assassinated father in a world with epic fantasy and different challenges every corner.
- Escape being murdered or put in your death wish.
- Or make it thru everything and hear the eternal Melody of love.
ROs
Linda–Vampire
Gender–Female
Personality–Shy & Charming
Linda has long blonde hair which flows down most of her back, along with her crystal blue eyes that could lighten up at least half the world.
Oakley–Elf
Gender–Non-Binary
Personality–Confident & Witty
Oakley has dazzling white shoulder-length hair which is tucked on one side behind their long pointy ears, along with their gleaming green eyes that look like a meadow in the morning.
Alan–Werewolf
Gender–Male
Personality–Kind & Protective
Alan has warm chocolate brown hair which is a couple of inches long, along with his rich yellow eyes that look like a colorful blossom in spring.
Emily/Emery/Emil–???
Gender–F/N/M
Personality–???
Female – She wears a smooth white ceramic mask with golden edges which cover her entire front face, as the only holes are two openings for her fire amber eyes. She has waist long ash brown hair, which is tied in a half crown braid on the back of her head. She also has a tight neckless with one single ross red gem dangling around her olive skin neck.
Male – He wears a smooth white ceramic mask with golden edges which cover his entire front face, as the only holes are two openings for his fire amber eyes. He has shoulder-length ash brown hair, which is tied in a half braid on the back of his head.
Non-Binary – They wear a smooth white ceramic mask with golden edges which cover their entire front face, as the only holes are two openings for their fire amber eyes. They have shoulder-length ash brown hair, which is tied to their right in a triple mini braid on the side.
The fifth still hasn’t much known yet.
Genre: High Fantasy / Romantic / Murder Mystery
Play it here ➣ DEMO
About Feedback
You didn’t see the choice you wanted? Let me know! I want to make it that you can come with any approach you desire.
The choice you wanted was there but it didn’t affect the MC/stats/characters to your expectations? Also important, as I want to make sure you get what you were expected.
I’m not only new to writing IFs, as I’m also just new to writing in general, so I’d be more than happy with any advice around that. As it would really help if you tell me what parts you like and dislike, then I know what to avoid as well as aim for while writing.
And as for grammar/text style/commas, that’s not very important. As I will most likely find that later after editing. Unless it’s really vivid or distracting.
Total word count: 30.000
Word count (excl. coms): 25.000
Average play thru: 7.000
I write slow but determined so it won’t come fast, but oh my…it will come.
Update log
Do you think I’ll be updating it right after posting it?
Warnings
Fantasy violence, horror, mild sexual content (nothing more explicit than kissing), mild alcohol use, gore, and blood.
This tale is much about your assassinated father, which some might find very dark.
(I might update the warnings a bit in the future.)
“We will battle, and we will battle for as long as our blood will stand.”
I guess its looping because I didn’t add a capital letter so you’re fine.
