The update was kinda boring and didn’t have opportunities to improve the MC stats/ prowess. I hope the next update will have more Action. But great work nonetheless
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Thank you. And what a thing 
, but there will be an update later (hopefully in the next few weeks) for the demo on Patreon as well. Thanks again 
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There definitely will be, but I should warn you that some specific abilities cannot be learned from Eleazar. Many can, but some specific ones, like what the MC can do with the rebels (essentially discovering a new ability on their own, which yes, it will be possible to learn some things independently), and others like teleportation, will have to be learned from other people. There won’t be a multitude of them, but teleportation and some rare ones will only be learned from specific individuals. This can also increase your status (you/MC are already known, but how you are perceived by others is something different). In this demo’s ending, your decisions on how you will act and whether you succeed or not will greatly influence how others see you.
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When the MC forms a bond with their pet, will the MC gain the pet’s unique abilities?
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Great update as always.
Only problem is some pronouns mix up in text. For example, when I pick a character to be female they show up as male in text.
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Are we still going to get our pets in the new update, and will the poly route still be open?
Just playing thru it again since the saves don’t work and I had a thought about the scar system would you consider making it so the shoulder injury can cripple the arm
Or would it have to many changes to the rest of the story
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Finished the update it’s very good tho their was a lot of him or he instead of her or she for Hayden (or in one case the command itself was shown)
Besides that there was no bugs I could see except maybe the cheat menu? I don’t know if that was intended or not I’d imagine it is the only reason why I’m being it up is because it was under w.i.p tabs In the menu so I thought I’d check
The only scene that annoyed me was the castle scene with Hayden for obvious reasons I mean I understand why it’s like that because of how your character is especially my character which was stoic(speaking of which dose that change that scene heavily) still annoying tho
And on that topic did you forget about the adult forum because it’s still down or are not using it anymore?
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Loving the new start. Lots of pronoun errors for Hayden, in my case should have been a he/his but was she/her.
Some odd phrasing that feels like a bad translation in spots. Just a small example would be the phrase “expression lines”… It sounds strange. I think intuitively you get the meaning, but you would call them laugh lines or frown lines depending on the character’s disposition, or just wrinkles. Idk.
The worst example is the first Hayden scene at the fountain when you are young, parts of it are… literally incomprehensible.
Lastly, there are numerous occasions where Hayden is referred to simply as “prince”. This would never happen, it should always be “Prince Hayden” or “the Prince”, otherwise you are talking about a musician named Prince, not the character in your story lol.
Other than that, really enjoy the rewrite, it feels the cast is introduced more organically and adds to the world-building instead of just randomly showing up. Really like it. One question, is Eris a new RO? Only asking cuz you get to select their gender. At first I thought I was meeting Nix and got all excited lol.
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The author told me in discord that the next update will (hopefully in my opinion) include the rest of the pet options and that there will be chances where you can get them early or still go to the illegal merchant from the old demo in case you changed your mind and I guess maybe as a way to get the pet you want in case you missed it somehow. And the poly route will still be a thing, like the Hayden and Nix poly. I’m still not sure about other polys though. If I was going to suggest one, I hope there’s a poly between Hayden and Cecilia since even in the old demo, it seemed like the MC, Cecilia and Hayden were a team often so it would be an interesting dynamic to have a poly between all three of them.
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Tbh, I wouldn’t do a poly route cuz they’re not my thing, but I agree C + H would be an awesome OP poly, and the most likely to occur given the events so far, but as a dreamer, I want a Tyler/Kori poly (just my overactive imagination y’all, I know Kori is not an RO). Those two…. :: dreamy sigh ::
I have a Kori problem. Old and new demo, I just love him.
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Damn it damn it damn it seeing wip Put me in a frenzy I’m going to use my magic to end this madness this is will not end well I know it but I just see our father making it much worse pretty much making a massacre happen
WHAT A CLIFFHANGER! I was so prepared for my mini!father!MC to go full Uchiha Itachi and slaughter the entire village for treason that I’m shaking in my swivel chair!
I have to say that my favourite RO in the rewrite is still Hayden. Dude’s so Astarion-coded that I can’t help but love him. And his dynamic with a cold!MC is so fun to read. I’m a complete sucker for the angsty and pining chemistry those two have, especially when my MC flipped the hell out over the rumors her subordinates gossiped about but absolutely refuses to admit to liking him. So cute.
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Very nice update! I will say, I mourn the loss of, “I hate you (flirt),” but it wouldn’t fit right as is in the new version. Hayden my beloved…
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Funny how I didn’t care much about Hayden in the original demo, but they quickly became my favorite character after the rewrite (although Nix hasn’t shown up yet, so it can still change in the future). I loved the update and can’t wait to see what will happen in the village, despite thinking it won’t end well.
Also, the little dire wolf is so adorable. I will probably just keep adopting him in every playthrough now since I can’t bring myself to kill him :')
some bugs
The ‘his’ should be capitalized in these parts
It should be ‘himself’ and the ‘he’ should be capitalized in these parts.
Also, I’m not sure if you already know it but in case you don’t, if you put an exclamation mark before the variable the word will be capitalized. For example, if you use $!{h_he} or $!{h_his} then it would be ‘He’ and ‘His’ respectively (and if you remove the exclamation mark the words will be displayed in lowercase again)
If you choose to have green eyes it says that you have blue ones instead
It seems like something is missing in this part (?)
It should be ‘her’
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This new demo, is the biggest improvement I have seen this year, in anything.
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Another great update as always, but why did you have to end on such a cliffhanger man?? 
@Firefox_12 @Lucifur-dark @MadAdam @yizhens I apologize for the pronoun errors. I usually translate first and then add the codes, which is why pronoun errors related to Hayden occur frequently. I read and review, but sometimes some pronouns slip through, and I miss adding the code because I didn’t notice it. Some people have also sent me screenshots with the errors, and I appreciate that. It helps a lot in finding the errors. I’ll try to correct things here and then update the chapter. Thanks again for letting me know; sometimes I don’t notice these mistakes.
@yizhens, and I won’t lie, I ended up being a bit lazy about creating a code just for the capitalized pronouns. Although I did create a line of code for “He” and “She,” I left the others to correct later. But thanks for the tip about $! I wasn’t aware of that, and now I can use it without having to create multiple lines of code (although I ended up creating them before seeing your comment with this tip 
). But I’ll use it because it makes coding easier.
I also forgot to update the adult topic I didn’t exactly forget about it but about updating it. I’ll talk to a moderator to unlock the topic and then update it there. And yes, there is a cheat menu. I initially created it for testing and then made it available for Patreons, but anyone who knows how to work with the codes and files can activate it and use it as they wish.
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Yes, in a way, and the reverse will also happen. But these are abilities more related to the MC’s senses.
I’m afraid not, Eris is not an RO, although they will be available for a fleeting romance, whether it’s serious or more casual. Eris is not a RO. But (I believe I haven’t mentioned this on the forum?) you will have the opportunity to have a fleeting romance with Eris (whether serious or not) and only something casual with Asther or Sofia. These will be some options later in the demo, but they won’t become or are not ROs.
And yes 
Kori has been winning over some people lately too. Currently, the poly options are Nix and Hayden, although you mentioning Hayden+Cecilia+MC could indeed bring some interesting dynamics and has given me some ideas. BUT, if I add another poly option, it might have to wait until the second book. Or maybe not, I’m still figuring out how future scenes and everything else will go, although I already have the basics planned for the demo.
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