Sorry about that! It should be fixed now.
A error popped up after I told James I was shopping for a gift for my mom. Though I’m not sure wich error
it’s good
error just after you take the box, (unable to get property ‘crc’ of undefined or null reference)
Quick error:
You sigh, looking at Leo and then back to your path ahead of you, ready to head to the cool waters after a long and hot day. “You know what, I’m going to go know. You, uh, have a nice day, I suppose,” you manage to get out as your feet start to move. Leo manages a lazy wave before saying a goodbye.
I think it should be “You know what, I’m going to go now”.
edit: Another quick error:
Liam nods and steps out of your way. “Don’t let me stop you. Have fun, you two.” Rosa runs off ahead of you, throwing off her dress with ease and swiftly handing it on a tree before jumping into the water. After leaving Liam behind, you just walk your way there and start to tug off your clothes once your feet hit the sand of the beach and head to a nearby tree to hang your clothes.
I think it should be “throwing off her dress with ease and swiftly hanging it on a tree before jumping into the water.”
edit2: Another quick error
With your clothes gone, you step into the water that’s cool to touch at first but you warm up quickly. When you’re about waist deep, you start the chance. Unlike what some people think, it’s not an entirely painless process. It’s hard to explain, but you guess it could be explained to feel like when you’ve sat on your legs too long and tried to start walking again. You watch as your legs slowly come together and the scales of your tail start to appear. The color of your scales shine in the water in the slowly dimming sunlight and, suddendly, the water seemed just the right tempature.
I think it should be “you start the change”. Also I think the following sentence is grammatically incorrect but I am not sure how I would change it “It’s hard to explain, but you guess it could be explained to feel like when you’ve sat on your legs too long and tried to start walking again”. Also I believe “suddendly” should be “suddenly” and “tempature” should be “temperature” in the last sentence…
edit3: Another quick error
Rosa proves to be rather energetic in the water, which isn’t too much of a surprise, but she does sort of drag you around to meet all off her friends. It takes a while, but with the bussling underwater city never sleeping, it doesn’t matter how long it takes.
I believe it should be “drag you around to meet all of her friends” and “but with the bustling underwater city never sleeping”.
Thank you very much! I’ll get to those the next time I’m going to work on it.
@snappingcookies of what i’ve read ao far this game seems very interesting and has the potential to be very good
@snappingcookies Will you get to meet and/or rescue any humans?
I don’t want to give too much away, but humans are a big part of this story. you will get to meet a lot of them
This is so awesome! 
I love the concept, and the romance options are really nicely done 
Can’t wait for more!
Edit: There’s a bit of a problem with ‘Line 197’ or something like that, when you’re with James and looking for the pinging box thing. I’ve tried it twice as different genders, but it seems to be only affecting the boys’ story at the moment :S
oops…
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Sigh
I hope that was sarcasm. If not, please do me a favor and read the rules. <- And yes, that blue thing is a direct link.
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