AT YOUR SERVICE BETA TESTER NEEDED
So there you can play as soldier from the afghanistan war The Story Start At The 9/11 incident the Game Is Simple But The Story is good If You Have Suggestion of my story pls dont hesitate to email me
Email me: lordkristofer12@gmail.com
Currently it’s about (8%, 1 Chapters, 386 Words) done, and I plan on updating every 1 week. Its Almost Half Of Chapter 1 Now
Pls Support My Game Thanks
After i done Chapter 1 i want to you all test because i want To kbow if There are Some Spelling Mistakes And Some Grammar Mistakes (because im not american lol)
If you want to test my game here’s the link
I Put the Save Game There So You Can Save your Progress In the Next Time I Update it so you can restore you saved game
I won’t be long here, so here’re some quick feedback.
The Capitalization In Each Word is pretty unusual in writing. I’d recommend you to fix the consistency of the capitalization on the entire story.
You Quickly Say GoodBye To Your Mother And Father And Your Wife Your Wife Is Currently Working in World Trade Center Your Mother and Father Is Currently retired from there work after you graduated in military school
You need to chop down this text. Ignoring the capitalization, the continuity in this snippet is none. It can be really hard to read through this part (and other similar parts)
The section asking your dad’s, mom’s, and wife’s name is too mandatory and obvious. It feels like answering a questionnaire rather than reading a story.
Oh, and BTW, I named them all as “Bob.”
Broken image on the “wake up and watch news” section. Firefox can’t find the file at /D:/D. Folder/Downloads/worldtrade.jpeg.
We Need To Stop This Terrorism Attacks We Need An Bigger Plan
Indefinite article a vs an. An bigger plan > A bigger plan