Tore through that corruptant with ease.
I mean Ozyx keeps d-riding our main character so I get it
Also anyone thinking our biological mom was too apathetic when our parents were throwing us to the streets??
Got kicked off due to not being secure or something. Cant get back to it now.
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Personally, I justify the rapid bounce back as MC just coming back from the experience as a near completely different person; my MC was a quiet and shy (but questionably evil) person before becoming a corruptant, and now that heās freeā¦well heās more friendly and joking because he just lost his mind down there, making light is a coping mechanism, so of course his personalityās shifted to match. Thatās just me though, and I can see why thatād seem weird.
As for Morganna specifically, I actually like the way Morganna is characterized and explains herself. She adopted the MC for years, so of course sheād feel the need to save their life when theyāre facing death. In her mind, torturing you is better than letting you die, and itās not like you had a ādo not save my life if I turn into a corruptantā document on file; plus since you were very much not in your right mind, you couldnāt even say you wanted to be killed in the moment (probably because you were too fixated on biting some poor guyās throat out). Iām not entirely sure this is a fair comparison, but I kinda view it as a similar situation to a parent having to make the call to take their kid off of life support. Yeah the practical thing to do would be to end their suffering, but no loving parent would be able to make that call so easily no matter what the facts are, and especially if the kid canāt give their opinion.
Not to say that this makes what she did forgivable, Iām certainly not, but I at least understand what crazy logic led to this outcome. But no way in hell Iām going back to that dank a** basement (I know itās not the basement but thatās funnier to imagine) just to be tortured again no matter what excuse they give; either Iām escaping or Iām taking my head off.
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Yeah nothings loading either
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Nah my mc got a hit list of people thatās gotta go, MC grew up and had nothing but snakes around him. Iām not even mad at Sam, Iām taking a wild guess sheās was at ground zero when the MC went insane with the corruption. The MC probably gave her that scar.
Morganna, the mother and father, and the king has got to get smoked. And the torture team too.
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Thats my guess. Since Sam wont say anyway.
Curious what happened. Really would want to know. Makes a difference to know if able to control or its all false currently. Only the mark being the reason and just being lied to by It.
Yeah, I agree. Itās simply unforgivable.
Sam, possibly, but I also wonāt let them stop me either so if they get in the way, Iām not going to hold back.
Also, for the author, thereās a point where Morganna refers to Maverick as just cultist, and both options imply the PC is bothered by them not using his real name. Iād like if there was a neutral āreally donāt careā option there since the one where you donāt speak up implies that Everix does it since she can tell you disliked it.
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Iād like to check out this update! But for some reason whenever I click on a button for the next page, a script error pops up. It pops up twice, and then allows me to read the story. Not sure whatās causing this exactly.
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I would like a neutral option there, as well. It doesnāt make much sense for my character to care much about the cultist yet.
Also, I wonder if there will be any options to point out to Morgana how she seems to only consider Sam their child now, and not the MC. I donāt know if this is intended, but I very much got the impression with some of the wording used. It would be nice to throw that a bit in her face, if only to increase the collective amount of angst in the storyā¦ 
Love the story, hope to see it continue receiving updates ^^
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At this point Iām 100% sure Sam is just as much of a victim as the MC is. It definitely possessed the MC when they touched the sword and they went on a rampage- Samās scar was caused by them and they killed their mentor (as well as probably a lot of innocent people.) He didnāt know the MC was being tortured and during his povs itās clear heās fighting the natural trauma he feels towards the person closest to him who snapped and stabbed him in the face. His fear is so strong he developed a phobia of sharp objects, yet heās doing his best for it not to show to the MC- I feel so bad for him
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Oh no arguments there, they say revenge leaves you feeling empty, but given the holes they put in MC and all the blood they drained, theyāre probably already feeling empty. Problem is that revenge is a messy process thatād put you on the radar of important people whoād see you dead and may have armies to throw at you. Best to just disappear and hope to never be found.
Now hypothetically if we were to achieve ultimate power enough to dominate the world, then thatād be a whole other thingā¦
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Caught up.
I blame It thoroughly on all of it. Along with the Nine apparently.
Now that I know lot more. I know whom I wanna rip apart. Especially with what It did when I said, No.
Also, got lots of errors to follow up with. Lots of pronoun parts, code showing up and shouldnāt of as well as few grammar points. I forgot how to hide it.
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One of the best WIPs Iāve ever read, did most things really well compared to other simple stories Iāve read. The story, back story, indepth POV experiences, plot progression and character relationships with each other are done. The teasing of a potential Poly romance is also interesting.
Iām not sure why Mav and Quinn are gender locked though, but I definitely want a poly harem romance.
Story wise and pacing wise its a bit too slow, not much progress on the plot is made, the back stories and flashback sequences were fantastic, most authors ignore doing this even though it adds emotional and story depth in the lore, however thereās a bit too much dialogue and flashbacks and not enough active story progression.
The MCās mental and psychological turmoil is done pretty well, Iām just a bit perplexed at the lack of dialogue options as the choices we get are mostly standard shy, teasing or assertive. I was expecting more contrasting options such as sarcastic/humorous which tends to be my favourite.
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Iām also currently justifying it as the MC post release being almost a new person. Kind of? Like, after they initially became a corruptant they completely lost their mind and it was that mad berserker version of the MC was who was being tortured for the past 13 years. But after they were branded, it kind of freed their mind? Or maybe compartmentalised it. So they have the memories of the torturer but it doesnāt really feel like it was happening to them. Bit of a stretch, but whatever. Hand wave it away so we can get on with the juicy plot.
I think we mostly agree on Morganna, you can understand why she did what she did. Doesnāt make it right. Does make for some horribly angsty drama, which I love. āCos Iām terrible that way.
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this is my new fixation 
the story is addictive in the same way games like Infamous and the Sword of Rhivenia (rewrite) are for me. idk what it is, something in the prose or the characters or the world itself just HITSSSSS !!
iāve played through as a wet cat PC (just sad about everything, luvs sam, doesnāt want to go through with Motherās plan but doesnāt want to go back to imprisonment, etc) and it was obviously awesome. i shed a few tears in several places. i def want to try other routes out, too, but author if thereās any particular route it would help you for someone to try (and look for typos, weird phrasing/pacing, or whatever else would be helpful) lmk and iāll run that one. otherwise iāll probably do crazy vengeful psychopath run next (prob romancing either quinn or maverickā¦leaning towards maverick. i love that fuckass guy)
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Iām enjoying this a lot, but I do find it jarring in the extreme that basically five seconds after weāre released from a decade of nonstop torture MC is just magically functional again. If itās too much of a pain to go back and rewrite/add material with that in mind, I think at the very least a handwave āyouāre kind of incoherent for a few weeks but when you start to come back to yourself, hereās what happensā with properly meeting Everix and stuff & then continuing the regular story from there would be a good idea.
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I understand where youāre coming from since it is immersion breaking. But the author has shown optional and non-optional ways of showing how the PC isnāt a functional member of society. Such as Insanity, apathy, dissociation and memory loss. I feel like this alone out ways the need for changes in the beginning of the first few chapters. The pacing is already slowed because of the flashbacks.
You can somewhat build your PC into a sociopath given enough head canon and personality stats. By the way sociopaths are human too and should not be dehumanized. Iām just giving an example of what undiagnosed mental disorder the PC could have.
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Personally, Iām more interested in how awesome and implicitly disturbing it is that MC physically recovered so fast. You start off with several holes through your body due to metal f***ing rods, and within, what, a few days? Hours? Suddenly those are all gone and your range of movement is no worse for wear. Trapped in a basement without food for years? You still have the strength to try and lash out at someone. Really puts into perspective how scary the corruptants are and why everyone is justifiably so wary of you, if decapitation is the only surefire way to kill one, then the average joe is only gonna survive by swinging and praying. Everybody should be glad MC was young when they turned, otherwise things wouldāve been a lot uglier.
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I did another play through and picked a couple of typos, one real bug, and one kinda/sorta/but not really bug. Posting them here on the off chance theyāve not been reported yet.
Typos
During the conversation with Ruben and Morganna, Ruben asks her if the MC is dangerous. Iām guessing it should be āthatā and not ātheā:
āWhat does the mean?ā He is heated, anger rising. No. Protective. Why? He doesnāt know you at allā¦
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Chapter 5. If you sit on Samās lap, when Everix returns with food, missing space between āyouleaveā:
The awkwardness from Everixās entry leaves quickly as youleave your comfortable spot on Sam and dig into the food in front of you.
First bug. There are two variables. savage_fight_flawless and savage_fight_flawless_win. Both are defaulted to false, but I can only find savage_fight_flawless_win getting set to true if you win the fight against The Savage without making a mistake. But savage_fight_flawless is used for some of the dialogue in chapter 5.
Second bug. Well, less a bug and more a bit of unreachable piece of code. Also, probably not even worth fixing, as itās not breaking anything. But thought Iād point it out, just in case.
Chapter 5, when asking Morganna about the other members of the team, during the conversation about Everix there is this line
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@{(knowshowcorrupted_morganna) You had a sickening feeling he didnāt make it past that dayā¦ The weight of if you had killed him sits in your stomach, and with effort you push past it.|You had your worries about him not being aroundā¦ You canāt help but wonder how he couldāve died. Your memory of him seems to be one of a tough, competent warrior.}
As far as I can tell (I could be wrong about this), you should never be able to both have knowshowcorrupted_morganna be true and be able to talk about Everix as the dialogue path that sets knowshowcorrupted_morganna to true also ends to conversation with Morganna.
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Itās wild that I was just thinking about this game a few days ago and was sad that it didnāt have any updates. Now I get to experience peak again lol.
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