@Babisko
You got some spelling errors in the original post chief.
As that includes your blurb you should fix that my boy.
Since personally at least if I see spelling errors in someone’s summary of their story I get worried and at times disuaded to have a look see
An example is “You whole world changes”- Your
“Everything around disappears”- 90% sure this is grammatically a bit ducky and should be around you
Also the “you are, too,” I don’t think it needs to be surrounded by commas, just looks a bit fucky, though I’m not 100% on this.
(Also once I do some work related activities I’ll read this and leave my opinions chief.)