I got an urge to write an IF. I had no prior knowledge of choicescript and all but I really wanted to try it out.
This is what I managed to churn out before my craze left me.
Entering, Surviving Another World.
Four heroes. One deadline.
Things don’t go as expected when you’re summoned to another world. Dragged into a fantasy world by desperate royals, you must train, fight, and get stronger by any means necessary before your final judgment arrives in 14 days.
It’s not even close to being done, but I’m tired and didn’t want 3 weeks of work sitting there not doing anything. So I figured why not share it?
It’s not much, but I’d appreciate feedback, ideas, thoughts, all that sort.
Anything is fine from a “You forgot to put an ‘a’ here, idiot.” to “This thing in particular sucks, remove/replace it entirely.”
Thank you, for your time. Please tell me if I’ve made any mistakes.
I genuinely enjoyed the game overall, though I have to say, the ending was very lackluster. That said, considering the game isn’t finished, I’m guessing it might just be a placeholder for now?
Here are a few suggestions:
When you enter the “Use Your Experience” menu, it would be helpful to have your current stats displayed. That way, players can easily see where each stats stands before making choices.
Also, when entering your character’s name, it might be a good idea to add a warning if the name matches one of the story’s characters. Something like: “Warning: a character in the story already has this name. Are you sure you want to use it?” I ran into this with the name Arthur, and it threw me off a bit.
One more thing, I noticed some pronoun inconsistencies. For example, I chose to play as a male character, but in the scene where Elias wakes us up and the others arrive, one character refers to “their room,” talking about our room, while felt a bit off.
I like this. Off rip i can El is the normal story prota. I love being the real mc playing as the side character. Now are vicky and the princess ROs? Im tryna get a loce triangle going op beautiful ladies. Now i wanna be a martial hero no weapons or armor. So can there be two serum otions like ther ogre?
Ogre: the appearance you have already. +1 in strength, endurance, and health
Weretiger: grey tiger stripes, glowing cat eyes, with retractable claws that can cut threw armor. +1 in strength, agility, and endurance.
Werewolf: ears, tail. +1 in mana, endurance and agility.
And mc gets skin almost as tough as steel armor as a side affect for fighting against armed opponents. I cant wait for more.
I love what’s presented. I know the 14 days is a plot point but will there be more to it after facing vic after 14 days or will that be the end of it ? Will there be more to do as more updates roll out during the days such as relationship building between the other heroes and characters ? All in all I gotta say I’m very interested in this I wish you the best writing it.
Well the other characters question EMC about the undead master trait and also will characters ask how the fuck the MC is that strong and will be another scene where we show our status to our companions again
Let’s get back to this when I actually make 14 days worth of content. This is the first draft, so I can simply scrap my original plans and do something else.
Yes.
Some people will react to you being a lich but I’m not thinking of doing anything crazy. I’ll try to make characters reactive to your strength.
I’m thinking of making another scene where the group shares their stats. It’d be a spoiler though, and I don’t want to get your hopes up since it would be far in the future.
Small update, about 2k words I believe? Added 2 new potions, The morning event of day 2 (first scene with gender reactivity) and an experimental mission to the guild.
Will be busy, so other than error fixing I probably won’t be around for a while. Take care everyone.
Looks great, but please include an option to trade/gift items/equipments to the party members, it’s one of my pet peeves in mass Isekai when theres more than one otherworlder and yet they don’t help each other at all and keep going solo
Like if you have an equipment that doesn’t suit your"build" why not give/trade it with someone who needs it instead of letting it rot in your inventory, who knows they might have something that you need
Same with running across a boss that’s above your level,why waste time trying to win alone just jump them
Sorry for the rant couldn’t help it (it’s so dumb)
Also in the “manage inventory” section can you include the stats effect of the items/equipment, it’s not a problem now since there isn’t too many items but in the future it’ll will make choosing what to use easier
Love the update but I want to know does the lich MC look like a fucking spooky scary skeleton or they look human and also what does leveling up do because I do not see it increase status or give us points to increase our status
I might decide to go this way, but I’m currently thinking about letting them get their own equipment. You can sell your equipment in the shop, it’ll likely be the only way to get rid of them.
I’ll consider your suggestions.
Spoiler, Victoria gets jumped
Spooky Scary Skeleton. Everyone treats it normal because I find it funny.
So, I had to decide how the player would get stronger. It was either going to be through level ups automatically like the companions, or they could use their experience as they please.
I chose the latter, to give the player more control. As it is, leveling up restores your health and mana.
I meant when I level up and also will there be more origins to choose for those who do not want to look like spooky scary skeleton but have higher status
Katanas are cool and if we choose it do we get swordsman master as a trait and also like the necromancy book but instead in it’s place martial art book and it gave us martial art master trait and it’s up to you to decide how much status each origins give the MC and I have a quick question how old is they MC when they get summoned because before we get some and we spend 80 years is grandpa fighting goblins or some magical mumbo jumbo returning us young
