Don’t worry I will update the stats. You have to remember that in Chapter 1 MC was in school. He didn’t have a gun.
By chapter 2 MC has begun his own racket there will be a stats change.
Also thanks you were the first one to give me a feedback. And I think I will remove leadership and add charm and intimidation . Also you will get a choice to specialise in one form of martial arts in the first chapter.
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I will upload the next chapter within 24 hours.
Not gender locked. It happens by mistake. I am a male. So when I was talking freely I forgot about MC gender. Also the story is based on my life to some extent. But don’t worry MC will be gender fluid.
My mistake and I don’t want to limit my readers to half as it is very few have shown interest. Fix gender means loosing half of your audience. And I won’t do that mistake. I am keeping gender and sexuality fully up-to the readers. You will get to choose your MC and his/her looks, name etc in chapter 1 s beginning.
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Also I wanted to ask do you want smaller updates on regular basis or large ones. I can do both. I have about 5k words in chapter 1 . Should I post it tomorrow? It’s mostly about what happened to the MC before he/she turned 18 and what they faced at childhood.
I personally would prefer larger, less frequent demo updates to smaller, more frequent ones. Of course it’s best if bug fixes and the like are as immediate as possible.
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OK I will see to it. Also if any one of you could give me tips about increasing the reader count. It would be highly appreciated.
Reader count tips:
- More words in the demo, and full customization present in the demo from the very beginning. The word count will increase in time, as will the reader count.
- Put the RO list in the first post (this is something someone else suggested).
- Perhaps a slightly different title? While the word “Vengeance” works, it and “Your Revenge” both contain the same word root. I’d suggest changing the subtitle from “Your Revenge” to something more related to the overarching plot or nixing it entirely.
- This is a corollary to the above and purely my personal taste, but I feel like “Vengeance”, “Vendetta” etc. are a bit overused in WIP titles these days. If I were to suggest another possible one-word title, I’d say “Pratikaar”.
- Regular updates–even if you don’t make any changes to the demo, it’s good to let people know how the project is doing.
I will add more tips as they come up, but these are my few for now.
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[spoiler] If you can, please add broken down paragraphs for the readers to easily read. I like the start which has the MC going into a flashback but does this limit our type of outcome if it’s all predetermined or does it really start after the flash back and it’s just the tutorial(Build up) for the story? I want the mc to have good endings and bad endings but if it’s inevitable I understand…I like building characters that have good relationships,high skills,high social connections(Not just romantically), and a sense of morale.
SPOILERS(maybe)
Like in the beginning where It expresses not everyone is born evil but how life lead it to be. The father being fat and abusive really put the image of the usual American stories of abuse but I remember it being in India. Or was I wrong…?
Anyways, this is going to be epic and I think you writing this is going to be interesting, I can’t wait for the story to unfold. Sometimes I wish I had a time traveling ability so I can skip to where this is finished XD.[/spoiler]
People can be fat in India as well.
My father was both fat and abusive
And thanks all of you for your advices. I will work on them.
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Vengeance is a saga while Revenge is part one. There will be 2 other parts.
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Can’t wait to play the demo:smoking:
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Demo updated. Added a new scene to the prologue.
Character names
Roma- MC’s mother
AJ - MC’s father
Also the stats is updated aswell as advised
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Don’t worry it’s just a build up. There will be 2 good endings and 2 bad endings. But that will be in book 3.Also nothing is predestined in this book. If you make continuously wrong choices you will die atleast a few times . Your MC will indeed become rich and powerful over a course of time.
