Quite happy to see this updated.
A few typos:
Capturing the New Order pubs:
Your party are armed with truncheons. You’ve brought along pistol, just in case.
Probably should be “a pistol”
The Greyshirts are also mentioned as “greys” without capitalisation, perhaps it should be?
Meeting Kant when going to the Budget debate:
“Busy,” she gives you a cigarette and takes a decanter from her draw, “Brandy?”
“her draw” instead of “her drawer”?
Their uniform is one you don’t recongise: they wear the blue shirts of the SDP’s Iron Guard…
“you don’t recongise” should be “you don’t recognise”
Stop this terrile idea every becoming law
Probably should be “Stop this terrible idea from ever becoming law”
Lady Howe’s budget speech:
It will balence the books
“Balance the books”
Also, isn’t “Mr Speaker” is usually capitalised?
When resolving the film union issue, “politician” is misspelt as “politicain” a few times.
“Independents” is also misspelt as “Independants” in the “Results of the Moravian General Election of May 1934” bit of the stats screens.
Wulf’s task, talking to the informant:
…I shall myself for the benefit of Becker here…
“repeat myself”?
I wouldn’t want to arous suspicioun
“arouse suspicion”
Some comments:
Perhaps personal popularity should be tracked (openly or not)? Some of the choices - particularly at the hospital - might seem more appropriate in boosting personal popularity than overall party popularity based on the nurse’s statements. It could also be useful if the MC has a possibility at trying to topple the existing leaders. Additionally, perhaps party cohesion as well? Supporting the amendment might not only piss off Wulf but also have an effect on party cohesion with MPs voting against the whip. Aside from that, the player’s party hasn’t really been ‘hit’ by anything major from the opposition, hope the ride is a bit bumpier in future chapters.
I would also like to see other routes of getting support. Bringing the papers on side (or burning the presses), arms smuggling (Moravia might not have the arms industry of Germany or Czechoslovakia and the Moravian Army was disarmed, so the guns have to come from somewhere and Solidarity’s hardly going to get them from national armouries). So far though I think there’s a nice variety of things for the player to do, even though there appears to be no limit (aside from accidentally choosing the option that goes to the next major scene):
For the second set of choices where you can go to the budget vote, perhaps that should be triggered after all the other options are performed, because currently if you attend the debate immediately you miss out on the rest of the chapter and it wasn’t clear the first time 'round; the same would apply for the paramilitary operations at the end of the previous chapter.
