[spoiler] “I don’t think we have mentioned it in the first place.”, the man interrupts.
I think this should he corrected to 'I don’t think we have mentioned this in the first place.
150mph. 160mph. 170mph. 180mph. 190mph. 200mph. 300mph. 400mph. 500mph. 1000mph. 2000mph. 5000mph. 10000mph. 20000mph. 75000mph. 100000mph. 400000mph. 800000mph. 1000000mph. 3000000mph. 6000000mph. 8000000mph. 9000000mph. 20000000mph. 50000000mph. 80000000mph. 100000000mph.
To me,this part feels…sloppy and unorganized. Maybe find another way to express that the car is going faster?
All is silence.
It’s supposed to be ‘All is silent’
As for the structure of the story,you really ought to just combine some scenes together.It isn’t really pleasant when we read 2-4 lines and click ‘Next’,only to read another 2-4 lines and click ‘Next’ again,and so on. [/spoiler]