Tyranny [WIP]

Hello today i present you with my very first wip. i never worked with choice script before and it was very fun learning where this thing goes, so that thing can work. Either way hope you like it, also am open and very thankful to any form of constructive criticism that will help this story grows. especially any grammar errors since english isnt my first language.

Currently it’s 7.7 k words making up the entire prologue, and Im already halfway through chapter 1 but decided to post a demo with prologue only, to see where i can improve.

To play the demo, go here: tyranny (dashingdon.com)

summary

The last bastion for humankind they called it, the splintered land they fought for it, whether from mer, beasts or bandits they guarded it. But you were few, and they were many, And at long last The human kingdom cracked, but to the surprised of its enemies, what emerged instead was a united empire threatning to overtake them whole, heralded by a young king his dynasty thought long to be extinct, and yet they were wrong and he was strong.

That was 10 years ago, now the empire stands at the forefront of imperial conquest its enemies of the past crushed, their lands assimilated as the realm continues to grows, and yet what lies within it, is but the brewing of rebellion and the dissatisfaction of its people as the iron hands of the king chokes them ever so slowly.

How will you, the commander of the red wolves comapny of the empire fare once you are thrust right at the center of these conflicts. As wolrds clashes around you, who will you stand with and uphold, the rebels or the king.

Romance options

all romance options are player sexual.

-Oliver/Olivia Wright (gender selectable)
The previous commander of the red wolf company presumed dead, after an encounter with a powerful beast, where they heroically sacrificed themselves to save their wounded soliders, Including you. You haven’t seen them for more than 2 year, but now they suddenly appear before you in the most unlikely of circumstances looking for answers not from you, but from the empire that they once loyally served, convinced that they betrayed them. Will you believe in their words like you once did or will you stick to the empire’s side?

*characteristics:
The previous commader is really tall, standing at 6’2 for Oliver and 6’ for Olivia. Their red hair is long and braided, always falling fowards on their chest for Olivia. And short no longer than their ears with uneven strands sticking out for Oliver. Their rosy commplexion only helps to pronounce their striking crimson eyes.

-Mason Ross
An engemtaic Noble turned rebel leader overnight. No one knows why Mason turned rogue and betrayed the empire, but they all know how much of a thorn for the empire he was once he did. The nobel mutneer managed to not only attack the once thought impregnable capital with but a mere 300 rebels, but also infiltrate all the way to the king’s castle before promptely dispearing for the last 2 years. No one knows where his current location is, that it is until you found yourself sitting at his desk in an unlikely morning, his eyes staring at yours.

*characteristics:
The nobel rebel stands at 5’11, small freckles line the contours of his noise, his chocolate skin only further helps exhibit the overbearing luster hiding deep withing his hazel eyes.

-Alyssa Vaughn
The only living heiress to the great Vaughn noble family. Wielding endless wealth and significant poltical power in the empire’s court and yet she’s rarely there. Instead Alyssa can be found in the country’s pastures tending to her orange farm or in the animal shelter that she founded for any abandoned animal in the empire. People usually describe her with two words chreefully carefree, or is there more to her? fortunately you get to test the truthiness to that, when you come face to face with her in a animal shelter you stumbled upon in the capital.

*characteristics:
Alyssa is relatively short standing at 5’2. Her black hair always tied in a knot, her healthy brown skin shimmering in the sun as a small smile seems to always adorn her spotless face. And yet her deep brown eyes never seem to smile back, always following those around her.

-The king
Will update his section in the coming days

Content Warning

-Mention of blood
-Mention of murder
-Mention of harm
-Graphic depiction
-Adult themes

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fixed!

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thank you, the option should work properly now.

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fixed!

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I edited it so the stats should reflect better on those choices now.

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absolutely not, im happy to fix any issue presented by users here and even though im still a noobie when it comes to choice script, ill still try my best :slightly_smiling_face:

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the pronouns should work now.

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For the future, you can find something called Choicescript IDE. With it, you can use the “quicktest” or “randomtest” function to find any gamebreaking errors before you update the demo.

Sharing cuz, well, I remember how many errors I found myself making too. Hope this helps.

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will give it a try, thank you :pray:

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I thought i added that :sweat_smile: the option will reflect on that now.

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I just updated the Romance section to those who are curious :slightly_smiling_face:

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Looks interesting. I like tyrannycal monarch/commander theme games which offer choice to being tyrant and the clash of morals in it. This makes me remembered the old game i used to play which have the same title “tyranny” and its gloriously fun.

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It’s a CRPG called Tyranny made by Obsidian, it’s great!

Sounds like this is gonna be similar but in text form, which is awesome.

I wish more mainstream games and brands would have a version in text form, like Halo, Uncharted, even James Bond lol

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That’s excatly where my mind went to, seeing this title as well! :sweat_smile: Such a great game.

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Off to a good start.


My commander’s a female, but it says inthat line “but do you notice how his back slightly tenses”. Oh and there is a grammatical error there too

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Thanks for brining up this game will def give it a try!

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Yeah definitely, personally the Ros which i find most compelling are those whose moetivations arent that easy to pick up, which in turn i strive to hold true for all of my characters :slightly_smiling_face:

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Should be fixed now. thank you for playing!

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You need a proofreader. Even small things like the constant absence of capital letters at the beginning of a sentence complicate reading and glue the text into a single mass. English is not my native language, I can’t pinpoint specific errors, but even I feel that there is something wrong with the text. It’s hard to read. And I’m afraid that in the current state of affairs, the vivid picture that you draw in your imagination will not reach the reader. Which is a pity, the game has potential…

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I’m currently planning to do a major editing proccess for the prologue, to try and stump out any grammatical inconsistencies still plaguing the story. thanks for the heads up though :pray:

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