@Nocturnal_Stillness
That’s just disrespectful -_- it took me two hours to read this and 14 months to write.
I saw that review. It’s ridiculous. Just showing the reviewer’s cluelessness about writing. It stings to see something bring a rating down, but don’t let it get to you. That sort of reviewer is inescapable no matter what you write.
I couldn’t resist, I downloaded it to play on the train today. A few typos so far, but no complaints yet 
@Carolyne
Cool tell me what you think. Remember, the update will have typo fixes, bug fixes, stat balancing, achievements and new content. Idk why Apple’s sooo slow T.T all the other pkatforms updated it a week ago
Apple sucks. Half my delays were due to them.
@Nocturnal_Stillness
At least they’re 60% of our sales
True.
“I’m really surprised Choice of Games allowed this up on their site. If my pre-teen child wrote something like this for school I’d expect them to get a very poor grade”
Can you believe this guy is an adult?
Wow that is almost as bad as my “I studied zombies for two years” reviewer!
@Nocturnal_Stillness
I don’t think anything can top that review… xD
Ok mispelling right after the first page. If you want them detailed. Normally I can read pretty bad English so I ignore simple misspellings.
“Frantically diving backward, you narrowly circumvent the blade, accidnelty tripping over a stalagmite.”
Would backward use backwards; accidnelty change to accidentally. Or change part of sentence structure as such.
“Frantically diving backwards, you narrowly circumvent the blade. At the same time, accidentally tripping over a stalagmite behind you.”
It doesnt matter in my mind I seen the image one way or the other but that misspell is there. Before I got further, wanted to mention it lest I forget.
Instead of posting again after myself, I wanted to make mention. There are sentence structures that could bother me if I allowed it. You do have some that might want relooked at. I prefer enjoying the story than looking at errors. I criticize my own writings which is why I don’t do much of them.
Also right after getting money from turning in goblin. Walking down the trial should be trail.
"I sent two of them to escort the rest of the village to a safe place, and the rest of the guard and I mounted a full assault on the demon, but before we could even get close, he caved in the area, swallowing all the guards into the earth. I would’ve, too, but he caught me by the neck before I was sucked into the ground.
One big sentence where some of those commas could be periods instead? I won’t reword it for you cause I don’t feel its my place to do so. But that first and could be broken to two sentences instead. “safe place. The rest”
“on the demon. Before we”
This is why I don’t like looking for the mistakes it detaches me from the story.
@jjc73
That first typo is the one I mentioned finding earlier.
Usually when I have long sentences, it’s to heighten the narrative pace.
I’ll definitely fix those things you mentioned. I didn’t mean you should look for errors, just that if you happen upon one and it’s convenient, I’d like to know. If it detracts from the experience, I’d say don’t worry about reporting typos.
@jjc “At the same time, accidentally tripping over a stalagmite behind you.” would be a fragment. While creative writing can use segments at times, it’s not exactly something you want to do as a general rule.
@jjc37
Shoelip makes a good point.
This is true. Fragmentation could cause issues. That is why I didnt bring up another one that was in the middle of those. I read and reread my own lines and sometimes overcorrect myself, that tends to end up worse than what I started.
Well I’ll have DH copyedited when I get my first royalty check, and then I’ll have all my future gamebooks copy edited before publication.
DH has finally been upated on Apple!
Hit that button once and got a triple post! Yay phonearamooni. My phone didnt auto correct that word but it does auto correct known words to something else. Ah good phone…stupid phone!
Well, this is odd. Reason phones are not well liked for me on typing.
I ended up triple posting and double deleting! Awesomesauce!
Anyways…there is a spot as soon as you use the blue candle on the third witch, get kicked down, grab knife and stand back up. Imp lands on shoulder without making mention how the third one falls.
@jjc73
It looks like your bug report was deleted xD but how you defeat her is basically coded like this.
*if ((confine) or (talk))
Don't kill
*if kill
kill her
So I’m really not sure why it’s not working. I’ll check it out tomorrow. Do you remember what you did before fighting her?